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发表于 2007-10-14 13:18:10 |只看该作者

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已修改,请查收:-)
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Life is like a 2πr.

Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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还想请教豆豆一个问题~

仔细看了豆豆给的意见,是不是说最后的时间里我应该把主要的精力放在改进文章结构,然后用具体例子证明呢?本来倒是对自己的写句子的能力也很怀疑。。。:confused:

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是的,只要你的文章结构和思路可以flow together as a whole就能拿高分,有点小错误是没关系的:-)
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Life is like a 2πr.

Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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大哥or姐。。。你不要吓我。。。一次这么多。。。慢慢来。。。
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Life is like a 2πr.

Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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回复 #64 haomi 的帖子

已修改其中一篇作文。主要问题已在帖子中回复,请查收:-)
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Life is like a 2πr.

Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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already revised:-) plz check
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Life is like a 2πr.

Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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发表于 2007-10-14 22:27:51 |只看该作者
呼~又是一天过去了。。。又是要上6天的课。。。好累。。。不过也挺开心的:-) 看到有人推选我当斑竹,心里真是很温暖:-)

谢谢大家的支持!我会继续努力的!
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Life is like a 2πr.

Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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发表于 2007-10-15 01:00:40 |只看该作者

小豆豆你好~

呵呵,我这有俩个问题,就贴在这里啦~~
1. 类似于这样的开头(一个疑问句的开头,你觉得怎么样哩? 合适嘛/)Have you ever heard of nice songs by a chorus which make you pleasing? If they were only sang by a person, without the music equipments driven by others, it might not impress you so much. As what is mentioned, team work contributes to development of things well. Nowadays, do people need more cooperation than ever ? In my point of view, by contrast with past, cooperation plays an increasinly-imporant role in our real life. Here, I will supply my idea with striking my reasons in terms of globalization and complication.

2. 如果考试的时候是开放性的话题:比如说 "一个代表你们国家的东西"你会怎么选择并且用理由证明哪?


谢谢豆豆:loveliness: :loveliness: :loveliness: :loveliness:

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发表于 2007-10-15 09:59:41 |只看该作者
豆豆~~帮忙改改~~17号就考试了。。。

谢谢

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D2

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发表于 2007-10-15 14:34:30 |只看该作者
u u u~~~p

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请教豆豆几个问题(关于独立写作开头)

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Life is like a 2πr.

Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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