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cuiwen_09UID: 2661472

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 714
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2009-10-27 23:40:49

1,兴趣在教育中是很重要的
2，虽然兴趣很重要，但是不是说只有根据兴趣设定的教育才是有效的。对于基础知识以及价值体系的培养来说，无论是否有兴趣，都是教育中必要的一部分。
3，根据每个人的兴趣来设定教育在现实中是不可行的，因为教育资源的有限性。

Though no one could deny that interests actually play a crucial role in education, it is not the same to conclude that only the education which is designed according to individual interests and needs is effective. After all there are other factors which will also affect the result of education ()such as the basis courses. Not to mention that the idea to design specific education according each one’s characteristic is not feasible in real word.(Besides, the idea to design the specific education schedual for each student is not feasible in real world.)

To begin with, it will be more effective for students to learn when the education they get is based on their own interests As we all know, when learning knowledge which students have interests on, they will listen to the teachers more carefully in the class, and even after class they are willing to spend time on it to study it further. In this case, students have more motives to learn the course, which is totally different when they are forced to learn the course they feel boring. Thus, education will be more effective when students are learning the course which they are interests in.

However, it is unfairly to conclude that only the education which is designed to meet individual interests will therefore be effective. There are two major reasons to object the point.
First, the true target of education is not to produce learned people but to produce learning people. That is to say, it is not only significant to pass knowledge in the past to students, but also necessary to equip them with the ability to learn knowledge in the future by their own effort. In this case, there is no need to hasty to find out the real interests of students and pass the related knowledge to them, especially considering that it is really hard, even impossible, to find the real interests of children, and that their interests are likely to change during their lives. Thus, it is more significant to equip them with the basic knowledge and skills of learning. Under this circumstance, it does not that matter whether they have interest in the basic skills and knowledge due to that they are necessary for their life-long learnig.( and in this case there is no necessity that the courses are right those they are fond of.) Second, another crucial target of
education is to help students foster a proper value of both their lives and the world. After all, the basic moral and ethic criteria is necessary of each people. Without that, there is no right guide for both their life and career and they will be more destructive rather than constructive for the society no matter how much knowledge they have learned.
For example, image a person who acquires the most advanced knowledge of nuclear weapon but is not aware of significant of peaceful of the world. He or she will be a thread to the world that he may do damage and even destroy to the world. In this case, though he is effectively taught, he is more a thread to the world. Thus, given the true goal of education, it is unfairly to only consider students’ interests when designing education.

Furthermore, some people may claim that the disadvantages of interest-based education mentioned above may be made up by educators if they also take into the actual needs of students besides interest when designing. Nevertheless, even though, it is still infeasible to realize the imagination due to the limited education resources. Comparing the numerous students and the relative small quantity of educators, how could it be possible
to actually design a specific education according to each one's characteristic? And besides, it will also be a difficult problem for school to arrange curriculum when almost all its students have complete different curriculums. Even though the problems above could be solved, there will be few education resources left, and that it to say there is no insurance for the quality of courses now matter how reasonable they are designed. In this case, though it is really crucial to take the individual characteristics into consideration when designing education, there is no need to design a specific education for each student. Just as that there is no need to make clothes of various sizes according to each person's own shape.

In the final analysis, though interest and individual characteristic play a significant role in education, it is still unreasonable to design a specific education for each student due to it is unfeasible and there is also other factors which effect the result of education.

issue写了10篇左右了，还是没有太大的感觉，不知道自己写的是不是像样子：比如每段的首句是不是把文章的意思说清楚了，以及说理是不是算清楚，例子是不是不丰满。希望有经验的人能够帮忙给点建议。谢谢啦

sakuraanneUID: 2253519

Though no one could deny that interests actually play a crucial role in education, it is not the same to conclude that only the education which is designed according to individual interests and needs is effective.(语言太繁琐) After all there are other factors which will also affect the result of education ()such as the basis courses（？）. Not to mention that the idea to design specific education according（to）each one’s characteristic is not feasible in real word.(Besides, the idea to design the specific education schedual for each student is not feasible in real world.)（为什么要打括号？）

To begin with, it will be more effective for students to learn when the education they get is based on their own interests（.） As we all know, when learning knowledge which students have interests on, they will listen to the teachers more carefully in the class, and even after class they are willing to spend time on it to study it further. In this case, students have more motives to learn the course, which is totally different when they are forced to learn the course they feel boring. Thus, education will be more effective when students are learning the course which they are interests in.（同一个意思反复两句话说，实则浪费笔墨。观点缺乏深度，有凑篇幅之嫌。）

However, it is unfairly to conclude that only the education which is designed to meet individual interests will therefore be effective. There are two major reasons to object the point.
First, the true target of education is not to produce learned people but to produce learning people（？what is the learning people?中式英语）. That is to say, it is not only significant to pass knowledge in the past to students, but also necessary to equip them with the ability to learn knowledge in the future by their own effort. In this case, there is no need to hasty to find out the real interests of students and pass the related knowledge to them, especially considering that it is really hard, even impossible, to find the real interests of children, and that their interests are likely to change during their lives. Thus, it is more significant to equip them with the basic knowledge and skills of learning. Under this circumstance, it does not that matter whether they have interest in the basic skills and knowledge due to that they are necessary for their life-long learnig.( and in this case there is no necessity that the courses are right those they are fond of.) Second, another crucial target of
education is to help students foster a proper value of both their lives and the world. After all, the basic moral and ethic criteria is necessary of each people. Without that, there is no right guide for both their life and career and they will be more destructive rather than constructive for the society no matter how much knowledge they have learned.
For example, image a person who acquires the most advanced knowledge of nuclear weapon but is not aware of significant of peaceful of the world. He or she will be a thread to the world that he may do damage and even destroy to the world. In this case, though he is effectively taught, he is more a thread to the world. Thus, given the true goal of education, it is unfairly to only consider students’ interests when designing education.

Furthermore, some people may claim that the disadvantages of interest-based education mentioned above may be made up by educators if they also take into the actual needs of students besides interest when designing. Nevertheless, even though, it is still infeasible to realize the imagination due to the limited education resources. Comparing the numerous students and the relative small quantity of educators, how could it be possible
to actually design a specific education according to each one's characteristic? And besides, it will also be a difficult problem for school to arrange curriculum when almost all its students have complete different curriculums. Even though the problems above could be solved, there will be few education resources left, and that it to say there is no insurance for the quality of courses now matter how reasonable they are designed. In this case, though it is really crucial to take the individual characteristics into consideration when designing education, there is no need to design a specific education for each student. Just as that there is no need to make clothes of various sizes according to each person's own shape.

In the final analysis（！中式英语）, though interest and individual characteristic play a significant role in education, it is still unreasonable to design a specific education for each student due to it is unfeasible and there is also other factors which effect the result of education.


语言问题太大，表意严重不清。建议不要一味写，更要注意平时的阅读和吸收。
说理啰嗦，内容陈词滥调，缺乏深度和力度。建议多参考优秀的提纲，自己勤加思考。
行文板滞，缺乏适当的事例填充，需注意积累。
细节不注意，标点符号有时会缺。格式混乱，没有注意编排。
lz首先需要解决语言问题，注意写作语法，否则基本的表意都难以顺畅，何谈表达思想。

sakuraanneUID: 2253519

时间还比较充裕，希望加强积累，在考前写出令人满意的文章

sakuraanneUID: 2253519

futhermore后面的那点首句尤其不清楚，这点如果不时刻注意紧扣题眼很容易偏题