蔓落的ibt独立写作作文本~

lain0119UID: 2695504

The public always speak(speaks) highly of the valuable aspects of the scientists' research but ignore(s) the negative parts.So(这个连接词木有前后逻辑关系...),even(even是甚至说不通啊~) some famous scientific consequences make passive influence on the society.Just as people now are afraid of eating transgenic food like oil (extracted)from the transgenic soy bean,because they do not know what will happen in the future if the have it (?)and no body will stand out to take response for it(为什么说没人会负责?).So as far as I am concerned,if some rules set to formulate that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discovery,the present condition will be improve(d)..
        First and foremost, every scientific research is a double-edged sword,scientists must be more religious and strict with their actions in professional field,if they keep the sense of (介词后不能接句子）they should shoulder the responsibility of the whole society,especially the negative parts which may be harmful.（主题句尽量精简哈）Many scientists are addicted to the high-risk studies at a numerous cost of time and money,ignoring the voice of the environmentalists（环境学家和科学家科研要用钱和精力多不多没关系，他们只关心环境问题~） and other opponets.For example,a nuclear test require（s） that the（删the) people should leave their home ten kilometers away,and may lead the surrounding environment to ruin.So the scientists are necessary to consider whether it(it指代不明啊~） worth the cost or just a waste of the resource.
        Besides,a parts of the discoveries or inventions（题目木有说inventions吧~） will indicative(indicate) their side effects in future but now(?).(这句我实在看不懂= =indicate只是暗示啊，副作用应该是在将来必定发生而不是暗示吧~）So（这个so怎么来的） the scientists have the duty to resolve these problems since the the researches are put out.（这两句话只不过是题目的拉长版，lz的话是科学研究有副作用，所以科学家要负责；题目是科学家要为他们的科学发现的负面影响负责）But till now,few scientists are blamed for the negative impacts on the society.Just like the phosphorus in washing-powder lead to a condition that the mount of the planktons increase so fast that the face of the water are covered.No scientists stand out,and the whole society,especially the government pay the "bill".However,if the scientists have known that they should take responsibilities on it,the phosphorus willr not be used in the washing-powder when created.（这段没有主题句，很混乱。）
Last but not the least,the scientists is the core when they carry on research,so they are initiative to control the effects which the research will make.（这段是没有写完吗？怎么只有一个主题句都没有展开捏？）
        Anyway,I insist on the stand that the scientists should be responsibilities(responsible) to(for) their research especially the negative impacts.And I believe that the science will act a more beneficial fact if every scientist is full of duty of society.
语法错误太多了；逻辑连接词用得很诡异；段落结构很混乱，没有主题句或主题句不够精简；稍有偏题的嫌疑（题目是discovery哦~洗衣粉加磷怎么说都不是discovery吧= =）
总之。。。路还很长

lain0119UID: 2695504

The public always speak(speaks) highly of the valuable aspects of the scientists' research but ignore(s) the negative parts.So(这个连接词木有前后逻辑关系...),even(even是甚至说不通啊~) some famous scientific consequences make passive influence on the society.Just as people now are afraid of eating transgenic food like oil (extracted)from the transgenic soy bean,because they do not know what will happen in the future if the have it (?)and no body will stand out to take response for it(为什么说没人会负责?).So as far as I am concerned,if some rules set to formulate that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discovery,the present condition will be improve(d)..
        First and foremost, every scientific research is a double-edged sword,scientists must be more religious and strict with their actions in professional field,if they keep the sense of (介词后不能接句子）they should shoulder the responsibility of the whole society,especially the negative parts which may be harmful.（主题句尽量精简哈）Many scientists are addicted to the high-risk studies at a numerous cost of time and money,ignoring the voice of the environmentalists（环境学家和科学家科研要用钱和精力多不多没关系，他们只关心环境问题~） and other opponets.For example,a nuclear test require（s） that the（删the) people should leave their home ten kilometers away,and may lead the surrounding environment to ruin.So the scientists are necessary to consider whether it(it指代不明啊~） worth the cost or just a waste of the resource.
        Besides,a parts of the discoveries or inventions（题目木有说inventions吧~） will indicative(indicate) their side effects in future but now(?).(这句我实在看不懂= =indicate只是暗示啊，副作用应该是在将来必定发生而不是暗示吧~）So（这个so怎么来的） the scientists have the duty to resolve these problems since the the researches are put out.（这两句话只不过是题目的拉长版，lz的话是科学研究有副作用，所以科学家要负责；题目是科学家要为他们的科学发现的负面影响负责）But till now,few scientists are blamed for the negative impacts on the society.Just like the phosphorus in washing-powder lead to a condition that the mount of the planktons increase so fast that the face of the water are covered.No scientists stand out,and the whole society,especially the government pay the "bill".However,if the scientists have known that they should take responsibilities on it,the phosphorus willr not be used in the washing-powder when created.（这段没有主题句，很混乱。）
Last but not the least,the scientists is the core when they carry on research,so they are initiative to control the effects which the research will make.（这段是没有写完吗？怎么只有一个主题句都没有展开捏？）
        Anyway,I insist on the stand that the scientists should be responsibilities(responsible) to(for) their research especially the negative impacts.And I believe that the science will act a more beneficial fact if every scientist is full of duty of society.
语法错误太多了；逻辑连接词用得很诡异；段落结构很混乱，没有主题句或主题句不够精简；稍有偏题的嫌疑（题目是discovery哦~洗衣粉加磷怎么说都不是discovery吧= =）
总之。。。路还很长

蔓落UID: 2779470

好久不写作文了。。。。烂死了。。。我自己都无语到暴~~~~


Sports and arts are both necessary and significant basic infrastructures for a city that the government should care a lot.Comparing these two,I concern that the government should spend more money on the sports field.Maybe,it is a appropriate suggestion that the government can set a special funds to improve the sports condition.
        First and foremost,there is a large mount of people who live depending on the sports activities,like the athletes in the football teams or basketball teams.These kind of people,who mainly take part in the games to compete with each other in a special league,are eager to expect the government to put some measures to improve sports into practice.And especially in some developed country,like Italy and France,sports are job professions for many people.The sportsman and sportswoman participate in various kinds of competition to earn money and gain fame to live.And this means if government consider that pay more attention and money on sports,more and more people will get their job more and more easily.It is a befitting way not only for government but also for everyone who live in the city.
        What is more,the ordinary citizen actually are the group who benefit from the sports policy most.Imaging,if government cost a great of money to make the sports condition better,as build more special gyms in the universities or set up a new system to contribute zones which are made up with kinds of facilities for exercising in central parks,the common will possibly spend more time to take exercise in their daily life.With the developing steps of the society,there is an increasing number of people regard health as the most crucial aim they pursue.And in some aspects,the public establishments for sports,which the government set up,will supply a number of opportunities for people to get healthier,thereby to get higher level of quality of life.
        Last but not the least,a city will be more active and optimistic if government attach more importance on sports.And at the same time,a city which think highly of sports has more chance to attract more attention from outside.Take Boston for example,the government consider that the basketball game the important culture reaction and expend special funds to build and rebuild basketball center,construct industries related with basketball games and son on and so forth.Obviously,Boston become a place which be famous of basketball games.Also,basketball games benefits Boston in return.
        To sum up,it is a wise way for government to invest more money in sports rather than in arts.Personally speaking,I am expect for the day,which government prefer sports to arts,for a long time.

bruce520UID: 2634940

Sports and arts are both necessary and significant basic infrastructures for a city that the government should care a lot. Comparing these two, I concern that the government should spend more money on the sports field. Maybe, it is a[an] appropriate suggestion that the government can set a special funds to improve the sports condition.
3 P: n" O1 N0 c: N. F3 _/ x        First and foremost,there is a large mount of people who live depending on the sports activities,like the athletes in the football teams or basketball teams.These kind of people,who mainly take part in the games to compete with each other in a special league,are eager to expect the government to put some measures to improve sports into practice.And especially in some developed country,like Italy and France,sports are job professions for many people. The sportsman and sportswoman participate in various kinds of competition to earn money and gain fame to live.And this means if government consider that pay more attention and money on sports,more and more people will get their job more and more easily.It is a befitting way not only for government but also for everyone who live in the city.【你这不是已经把下文要说的个概括了？本来你想说竞技体育给职业体育群体带了了生存机会，但是最后却论证到everybody】

- |4 b( h* w) y; Z        What is more,the ordinary citizen actually are the group who benefit from the sports policy most.Imaging,if government cost a great of money to make the sports condition better,as build more special gyms in the universities or set up a new system to contribute zones which are made up with kinds of facilities for exercising in central parks,the common will possibly spend more time to take exercise in their daily life.With the developing steps of the society,there is an increasing number of people regard health as the most crucial aim they pursue.And in some aspects,the public establishments for sports,which the government set up,will supply a number of opportunities for people to get healthier,thereby to get higher level of quality of life.+ j; `7 E3 f9 P" z
        Last but not the least,a city will be more active and optimistic if government attach more importance on sports.And at the same time,a city which think highly of sports has more chance to attract more attention from outside.Take Boston for example,the government consider that the basketball game the important culture reaction and expend special funds to build and rebuild basketball center,construct industries related with basketball games and son on and so forth.Obviously,Boston become a place which be famous of basketball games.Also,basketball games benefits Boston in return." X" f' b+ W  b9 g+ E9 C4 Z
        To sum up,it is a wise way for government to invest more money in sports rather than in arts.Personally speaking,I am expect for the day,which government prefer sports to arts,for a long
楼主貌似不太注意自己的文章格式，基本不用空格键，估计是不像我这样担心字数的问题哈，呵呵。对了，你也是5.16考啊？在哪啊？

蔓落UID: 2779470

4.17
今天的作文有点超时，虽然题目不难可是写的时候分心了~谢谢帮我修改！
    Nowadays,movies can be mainly divided to two different kinds,by the purpose why they can attract people go to cinema,that one is designed for people to think and the other is fit to amuse and entertain people.As far as I am concerned,I prefer to watch a movie which is made of interesting story or wonderful images other than which could lead me to the way to think about the live.Here,I state some of my supporting reasons.    First and foremost,according to the origin of movies,movies are initially design to make the upper class in society to have fun in their spare time.In other words,movie is actually a new form of theatre which is most popular among the upper society in that age.Also,in the modern times,watching movie become the first choice of people to relax.And they will always choose to watch the movies which are designed to make people have a comfortable and joyous time.The box offices which the movies designed for amusement like Avatar,Alice in Wonderland,and so on and so forth are the evidences.
        What is more,with the developing steps of the society,more and more people are bothered by the high stress of the job and life.And watching movies,which especially interesting,turn into the most popular way to reduce the pressures.When they enjoy the funny movies,maybe with their family or their best friends,they will be entirely absorbed in the colorful stories or the fantastic images,forgetting what have happened in their daily life.Moreover,a excellent movie which will make people be optimistic,just as students who have watched Harry Potter believe that maybe their dreams will come into reality at least in the two hours.
        However,movies which will also offer people ways to think are also great ones.There is an old saying that,movies are the short images of lives.Take Forrest Gump for example,we can see that Gump are brave,confident and persevering to overcome all the difficulties.And the most significant point is the attitude he toward to life that he thinks one should be indebted,optimistic and helpful.I believe everyone who has saw this movie will gain a lot.
To sum up,maybe the movies which not only designed to amuse people but also to make people think are the appropriate ones.But comparing they two,I still prefer the one which can make me feel relax and delightful.

bruce520UID: 2634940

  Nowadays,movies can be mainly divided to two different kinds,by the purpose why they can attract people go to cinema[你这个句子的逻辑我捋不太清，是总数下面两种电影还是偏向？],that one is designed for people to think and the other is fit to amuse and entertain people.As far as I am concerned,I prefer to watch a movie which is made of interesting story or wonderful images other than【词组搭配不对哦rather than的嘛】 which could lead me to the way to think about the live.Here,I state some of my supporting reasons【此句的时态貌似有问题哦】.   
First and foremost,according to the origin of movies,movies are initially design to make the upper class in society to have fun in their spare time【此中心句与你下文论述的目的不符啊，你是想说现在电影对普通人来说已经是重要的消遣方式了对吧】.In other words,movie is actually a new form of theatre which is most popular among the upper society in that age.Also,in the modern times,watching movie become the first【改成significant比较合适】 choice of people to relax.And they will always choose to watch the movies which are designed to make people have a comfortable and joyous time.The box offices which the movies designed for amusement like Avatar,Alice in Wonderland,and so on and so forth are the evidences.1 J/ p. u) q4 v0 ]% |* ~+ V
        What is more,with the developing steps of the society,more and more people are bothered by the high stress of the job and life.And watching movies,which especially interesting,turn into the most popular way to reduce the pressures.When they enjoy the funny movies,maybe with their family or their best friends,they will be entirely absorbed in the colorful stories or the fantastic images,forgetting what have happened in their daily life.Moreover,a excellent movie which will make people be optimistic【这种电影有让人to think的嫌疑哦】,just as students who have watched Harry Potter believe that maybe their dreams will come into reality at least in the two hours.4 a: O" v& x1 k
        However,movies which will also offer people ways to think are also great ones.There is an old saying that,movies are the short images of lives.Take Forrest Gump for example,we can see that Gump are brave,confident and persevering to overcome all the difficulties.And the most significant point is the attitude he toward to life that he thinks one should be indebted,optimistic and helpful.I believe everyone who has saw this movie will gain a lot.【不是建议的建议哈，据新东方的口语老师amanda说，中国学生一谈电影就是两部：Forrest Gump& Harry Potter，呵呵，现在可以有意地换一下啊】
/ `( j* v+ U4 G9 gTo sum up,maybe the movies which not only designed to amuse people but also to make people think are the appropriate ones.But comparing they two,I still prefer the one which can make me feel relax and delightful.

楼主5月8号考啊，比我早一周哦。口语怎么准备的，可以交流一下吗，我对口语很迷茫。

BriaIFUID: 2515589

Nowadays,movies can be mainly divided to two different kinds,by the purpose why they can attract people go to cinema,that（句子没啥问题啦，不过建议把逗号that改成一个冒号，酱紫更简洁一些^^） one is designed for people to think and the other is fit to amuse and entertain people.As far as I am concerned,I prefer to watch a movie which is made of interesting story or wonderful images other than which could lead me to the way to think about the live.Here,I state some of my supporting reasons.  

First and foremost,according to the origin of movies,movies are initially design（designed） to make the upper class in society to have fun in their spare time.In other words,movie is actually a new form of theatre which is most popular among the upper society in that age.Also,in the modern times,watching movie become the first choice of people to relax.And they will always choose to watch the movies which are designed to make people have a comfortable and joyous time.The box offices which（改成of吧，因为后面没有从句诶……P.S.前面是票房的意思对吧？恩……这句话也可以改成the popularity of 阿凡达etc，是不是更简洁点呢^^） the movies designed for amusement like Avatar,Alice in Wonderland,and so on and so forth are the evidences.

What is more,with the developing steps of the society,more and more people are bothered by the high stress of the job and life.And watching movies,which especially interesting（especially those amuzing/interesting ones）,turn into the most popular way to reduce the pressures.When they enjoy the funny movies,maybe（whether） with their family or their best friends,they will be entirely absorbed in the colorful stories or the fantastic images,forgetting what have happened in their daily life.Moreover,a excellent movie which will make people be optimistic,just as students who have watched Harry Potter believe that maybe their dreams will come into reality at least in the two hours

        However,movies which will also offer people ways to think are also great ones（哈哈，两个also啦~删掉一个吧~~）.There is an old saying that,movies are the short images of lives.Take Forrest Gump for example,（加个and哦~）we can see that Gump are brave,confident and persevering to overcome all the difficulties.And the most significant point is the attitude he toward to life that he thinks one should be indebted,optimistic and helpful.I believe everyone who has saw this movie will gain a lot.

To sum up,maybe the movies which not only designed to amuse people but also to make people think are the appropriate ones.But comparing they two,I still prefer the one which can make me feel relax（relaxed） and delightful.

加油！

蔓落UID: 2779470

4.20

        With the steps of the development of the society,the price of the land becomes more and more expensive,which means we human beings have less and less space to live.Under this condition,some people hold the opinion that it is very significant to reserve land for human beings,even can ignore the land for the endangered animals.However,for me,this voice is ill-considered.Even though,I agree that it is the time to develop large areas for human being to contribute buildings for commerce,industry or even leaving because of the high population of people in the world,but the animals especially the endangered animals have right to possess land to live.
        First and foremost,to reserve land or endangered animals is the most crucial way to protect them.No one can deny that the actions that like we human beings' occupying the nature land to expand the field for the development of society did enormously harm to endangered animals,even to the whole ecosphere.We have thought a large mount of methods to try to overcome the extinct problem like making use of advanced biology technology to sever unique food for them,or trying to make an artificial copy of environment according to the details in what they used to live.But we can easily see that,these means seemed making no sense.So,if we still want to grasp the last opportunity to rescue the endangered animals,we should return the land for the endangered animals at least prevent expanding land any more.
        Besides,we human beings and animals,also other creatures can share the whole world at the same time,to keep the balance of the environment. Although we human beings is the most significant kind of creatures over the world,we still do not have the right to occupy all the land.To vista the future,it is wise for us to keep the balance among all the creatures and the environment,which will obviously benefit the earth in return in both short and long time period.Let us take New Zealand for example,the government spend large mount of money,even set special funds to contribute National Park in the areas where endangered animals most live.Also,New Zealand is one of the most appropriately country in the world.And one of the reasons is that the local government attach much importance to the protection of the endangered animals.
        To sum up,maybe we should pay more and more attention to the endangered animal and to reserver land for them,ignoring the interests for what the land will benefit directly in short time.So,as far as I am concerned,it is better to leave more land for animal other than human beings.

蔓落UID: 2779470

4.22

        In the area of education,the homework for the student always causes heated discussions.Nowadays,some people voice that it is not necessary to leave daily homework for student with the opinion that they consider that the knownledge in the class is enough.But,as far as I concerned,this standpoint is ill-considered.So I can hardly agree on them,and I think that whether students should have daily homework depended on what they study,science or art.
        First and foremost,the daily homework is the most appropriate way to consolidate what have learned today for students who study science.In the classes,teachers always teach by making lectures or set up group discussions to ensure the students can understand the scientific knowledge.However,the time for the class is limited that the students can not gain the whole.So maybe they could take some notes of the class to write down what the have heared,also the questions making them confused.Surely,to complete the daily homework can force the students to review what they have get with their memories and notes,which will make benefit for students to get well master of knowledge,especial the complicated theories in sciencde to prove that the daily homework can gave a hand to students to grasp the scientific knowledge.
        However,for the students who majored in art,the daily homework is not so significant and necessary.Students whose majors area art ,like advertisement,marketing,management and so on,should pay more attention to how to practise in what they learn, insteading of daily homework.Let us take students who study marketing for example.The student who study marketing first need get command of the marketing theories,then they maybe put the theories into practise by doing the research of some successful cases,making up teams to sale things by themselves or others in a long time.So,the daily work left by teachers everyday can not make great progress to their knowledge.
        To sum up,whether it is necessary or not for students mainly depend on what subjects they learn.And sometimes,the daily homework should be left or not by teachers also depend on what stage the students are,as the primary students should take daily homework but the students in the university should have the ability to decide what the ought to do in their study.

BriaIFUID: 2515589

In the area of education,the homework for the student(s) always causes heated discussions.Nowadays,some people voice that it is not necessary to leave daily homework for student with the opinion that they consider that the knownledge in the class is enough.(this sentence is too long and may cause confusion. it would be better for you to split it into two sentences^^)But,as far as I concerned,this standpoint is ill-considered.So I can hardly agree on them(agree with them-if you mean the people who hold the opinion, or agree on it-if you mean the exact opinion they hold),and I think that whether students should have daily homework depended on what they study,science or art.

        First and foremost,the daily homework is the most appropriate way to consolidate(good word!) what have learned today for students who study science.In the classes,teachers always teach by making lectures or set up group discussions to ensure the(that) students can understand the scientific knowledge.However,the time for the class is (so) limited that the students can not gain the whole.So maybe they could take some notes of the class to write down what the have heared,also the questions making them confused.Surely,to complete the daily homework can force the students to review what they have get with their memories and notes,which will make benefit for students to get well master of knowledge,especial(ly) the complicated theories in sciencde(typing error) to prove that the daily homework can gave a hand to students to grasp the scientific knowledge.

        However,for the students who majored(major) in art,the daily homework is not so significant and necessary.Students whose majors(major) area art ,like advertisement,marketing,management(well...are you sure these disciplines belong to the category of "art"? it would be better if you replece "marketing/management" into literature, painting...) and so on,should pay more attention to how to practise in what they learn, insteading of daily homework.Let us take students who study marketing for example.The student who study marketing first need get command of the marketing theories,then they maybe put the theories into practise by doing the research of some successful cases,making up teams to sale things by themselves or others in a long time.So,the daily work left by teachers everyday can not make great progress to their knowledge.

        To sum up,whether it is necessary or not for students mainly depend(s) on what subjects they learn.And sometimes,the daily homework should be left or not by teachers also depend on what stage the students are,as the primary students should take daily homework but the students in the university should have the ability to decide what the ought to do in their study.

Good job! Keep going~

P.S. There's some error in my typing sys so I just reviewed ur essay directly in English. Hope you don't mind...:)

lily@@UID: 2661882

In the area of education,the homework for the student always causes heated discussions.Nowadays,some people voice(很漂亮的词） that it is not necessary to leave daily homework for student with the opinion that they consider that the knownledge in the class is enough.But,as far as I am concerned,this standpoint is ill-considered.So I can hardly agree with them,and I think that(可以去掉的，用whether引导从句） whether students should have daily homework depend（时态要注意哦） on what they study,science or art.  First and foremost,the daily homework is the most appropriate way to consolidate what have learned today for students who study science.In the classes,teachers always teach by making lectures or setting up group discussions to ensure that the students can understand the scientific knowledge.However,the time for the class is so(so that 从句） limited that the students can not gain the whole.So maybe they could take some notes of (改成 in 是不是好些？）the class to write down what the have heared（heard),also the questions making them confused.Surely,to complete the daily homework can force the students to review what they have get（got) with their memories and notes,which will make benefit for students to get well master of knowledge(这句话貌似有点乱，可以整理一下which benefits the students and help them master the knowledge gained better),especially the complicated theories in science to prove that the daily homework can gave（give) a hand to students to grasp the scientific knowledge.   
    However,for the students who are majored in art,the daily homework is not so significant and necessary.Students whose majors area(are) art ,like advertisement,marketing,management and so on,should pay more attention to how to practise (把in 去掉） what they learn, insteading of daily homework.Let us take students who study marketing for example.The student who study marketing first need get command of （可以这么用吗？或者可以换成master)the marketing theories,then they maybe put the theories into practise by doing the research of some successful cases,making up teams to sale things by themselves or others in a long time.So,the daily work left by teachers everyday can not make great progress to their knowledge.:(结尾可以用一个比较收的更加有力，So, unlike the science students, the daily homework left by teachers can not do much good to art-majored students as the everyday practice.)      
To sum up,whether it is necessary or not for students mainly depends on what subjects they learn.And sometimes,the daily homework should be left or not by teachers also depends on what stage the students are,as the primary students should take daily homework but the students in the university should have the ability to decide what they ought to do in their study.