呵呵，第一帖就求拍~作文一篇

老王家的小猫UID: 2781258

4-2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to truly understand world events, reading newspaper is better than watching TV.

Thanks to the development of technology, our global has become more and more close for us. Several means of media, such as newspaper and television, open our scope about the outside world. For this vital fact, there are numerous discussions about these irreplaceable vehicles of information. And which is the better way- television or newspaper, to have a truly understand of world event is one of the questions under debate. Although several people still prefer to newspaper for its traditional characteristics, I would like to support to television instead. From my perspective, there are several reasons for this statement.

At first, comparing with newspaper, television has many supreme advantages as one of the most influential inventions of twentieth century. And we can point our several of them within a minute. Television is an objective way to show us the whole event we want to know, specially those live show even can present the whole process of an event to audiences. Taking the report of the dryness of Yunan province for example, we shocked by those unbelievable but reality pictures of those areas. This objective documentary of the event, gives us a deeper impression of the situation, which newspaper can hardly give us. Besides this advantage, there are other ones we can figure out, such as the speed of television news report and the multifarious means of it.

What's more, to help us have a deep understanding and to solve our questions about the event. Television has many other kinds of program to show us the news and make a deeper research of it. This kind of program includes talk shows of several experts and a documentary about background of world event. All of these programs serve us many useful ways to have a deep understanding. Like experts, they based on their professional expertise further analyze those messages and provide many useful suggestions for us.

However, before making my conclusion, I think it is better to have a look at the argument on the opposite side. We have to admit that newspaper does have many advantages on reporting world events. For it is a traditional way of getting in touch with the outside world, it is an important part of our life. Specially, in this modern society, it can be seen as one of necessaries of those working people for it portable and cheap price. Almost every people would read a newspaper on their way home when they take the subway or on the bus.

All in all, based on what has been discussed above, we can safely draw our conclusion that television is superior to newspaper for us to get a truly understanding of world event. Although, newspaper has a longer history, it cannot overshade the dominance of television.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Thanks to the development of technology, our global has become more and more close for us. Several means of media, such as newspaper and television, open our scope about the outside world. For this vital fact, there are numerous discussions about these irreplaceable vehicles of information. And which is the better way- television or newspaper, to have a truly understand of world event is one of the questions under debate. Although several people still prefer to newspaper for its traditional characteristics, I would like to support to television instead. From my perspective, there are several reasons for this statement.
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At first, comparing with newspaper, television has many supreme advantages as one of the most influential inventions of twentieth century.（改成插入语可以更好） And we can point our several of them within a minute. Television is an objective way to show us the whole event we want to know, specially those live show even can present the whole process of an event to audiences. Taking the report of the dryness of Yunan province（Yunnan，a province in China 老外不知道云南吧） for example, we shocked by those unbelievable but reality pictures of those areas. This objective documentary of the event, gives us a deeper impression of the situation, which newspaper can hardly give us. Besides this advantage, there are other ones we can figure out, such as the speed of television news report and the multifarious means of it. 9 x+ [0 I6 B2 {' d, G

8 L0 t- g3 ~; b5 T2 K; FWhat's more, to help us have a deep understanding and to solve our questions about the event. Television has many other kinds of program to show us the news and make a deeper research of it. This kind of program includes talk shows of several experts and a documentary about background of world event. All of these programs serve us many useful ways to have a deep understanding. Like experts, they based on their professional expertise further analyze those messages and provide many useful suggestions for us.
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However, before making my conclusion, I think it is better to have a look at the argument on the opposite side. We have to admit that newspaper does have many advantages on reporting world events. For it is a traditional way of getting in touch with the outside world, it is an important part of our life. Specially, in this modern society, it can be seen as one of necessaries of those working people for it portable and cheap price. Almost every people would read a newspaper on their way home when they take the subway or on the bus. （我觉得这段需要改一下，最后说明报纸的好处都有利于我们更了解世界，这样和题目就联系起来）
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0 Q% H, [( K/ @0 S8 U+ UAll in all, based on what has been discussed above, we can safely draw our conclusion that television is superior to newspaper for us to get a truly understanding of world event. Although, newspaper has a longer history, it cannot overshade the dominance of television. 31# 老王家的小猫

yxb_25UID: 2758094

4-2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?   E  e* Y+ m% }1 l* E' r; \0 U In order to truly understand world events, reading newspaper is better than watching TV.! R- Q0 C; E( r, c3 i9 e Thanks to the development of technology, our global has become more and more close for(to) us. Several means of media, such as newspaper and television, open our scope（expend our horizon/vision) about the outside world. For this vital fact, there are numerous discussions about these irreplaceable vehicles of information. And which is the better way- television or newspaper, to have a truly understand of world event is one of the questions under debate. Although several people still prefer to newspaper for its traditional characteristics, I would like to support to television instead. From my perspective, there are several reasons for this statement. At first, comparing with newspaper, television has many supreme advantages as one of the most influential inventions of twentieth century. And we can point our(out) several of them within a minute. Television is an objective way to show us the whole event we want to know, specially those live show even can present the whole process of an event to audiences. Taking the report of the dryness (个人感觉旱灾用drought会好点）of Yunan province for example, we shocked by those unbelievable but reality pictures of those areas. This objective documentary of the event, gives us a deeper impression of the situation, which newspaper can hardly give us. Besides this advantage, there are other ones we can figure out, such as the speed of television news report and the multifarious means of it.（例子很有时代气息，但是如果能再花两句话稍微详细描述一下会更好，毕竟是中国的旱灾，ETS的人可能不太了解） * u: k" }, y% j. Y  V+ j  U3 j* @/ V What's more, to help us have a deep understanding and to solve our questions about the event. Television has many other kinds of [size=10.5000pt]（many kinds of [size=10.5000pt]）program to show us the（去掉the) news and make a deeper research of it. This kind of program includes talk shows of several experts and a documentary about background of world event. All of these programs serve us many useful ways to have a deep understanding. Like experts, they based on their professional expertise further analyze those messages and provide many useful suggestions for us.(报纸也有专家点评分析的栏目，lz的论证不太全面，可以对比报纸的相关栏目来衬托出电视的优势） ; B' d# _& L8 t! k/ x (( However, before making my conclusion, I think it is better to have a look at the argument on the opposite side. We have to admit that newspaper does have many advantages on reporting world events. For it is a traditional way of getting in touch with the outside world, it is an important part of our life. Specially, in this modern society, it can be seen as one of necessaries of those working people for it portable and cheap price. Almost every people would read a newspaper on their way home when they take the subway or on the bus. 9 _: u5 S* d2 J  o8 S' V# _# e All in all, based on what has been discussed above, we can safely draw our conclusion that television is superior to newspaper for us to get a truly understanding of world event. Although, newspaper has a longer history, it cannot overshade the dominance of television.[size=10.5000pt]

写的不错，就是论述如果再具体一点就更有说服力了，呵呵，加油啊~

老王家的小猫UID: 2781258

4-3 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation (plane, train, bus)?
When it refers to mobile phone, it has become to an irreplaceable part of our daily life. For this situation, there are several discussions over this important invention of twentieth century. And whether people should be allowed to use it in public transportation is one of those questions under debate. For this dilemma, many people support using cell phone in public transportations for advantages it brings to them. However, from my perspective, I cannot agree with their statement for several reasons.

At first, using cell phone in public transportation, especially in a crowded subway or a bus full of passengers, is very inconvenience for others and can hardly protect one's individual privacy. Now, it is a commonly thought that public transportation is a vehicle for all civilians, everyone has the right to enjoy a personal space in it. We often read newspaper, listen to music by our portable equipment, and even have a quick sleep when we take the bus or in the subway. At this time, talking through a mobile phone would destroy the quiet surrounding in the carriage, which forces others to pay their attention on the communication unwillingly. This is a disruption for other passengers and an unconsciously way to disperse personal information.

And moreover, using cell phone can also create many troubles to driver of these vehicles and even leads to several dramatically accidents in the end. This is not only because of loudly sound we create when we talking with other people on the cell phone, the radiation of this transport equipment is also harmful for transportation instruments. It is an obviously example, that we are not permit to use cell phone on planes, as a result for that radiation of cell phone would interrupt the signals guide pilots to flying in the sky. All these signals are crucial for the fight, a tiny mistake would lead to a serious accident.

However, before making my conclusion, I think it is important to pick up several exceptional situations under which it is freely to use mobile phone on public vehicles. These exceptions may contain some emergent situations, such as one of the passengers is suffering from a sudden disease, a bus is running out of energy, or even there is a dangerous person in among passengers. All these situations acquire us to contact with relative people as soon as possible, and at this time using mobile phone is not only permitted but also necessarily.

All in all, according to what has been discussed above, except of several special cases we have mentioned, it is necessary to prevent people to use mobile phones in public transportations, for it not only disrupt other people around us but also may interrupt the drivers as well.

nafgnawUID: 2446115

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4-3 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation (plane, train, bus)?


When it(删除) refers to mobile phone, it has become to be an irreplaceable part of our daily life.(此句不完整) For this situation, there are several discussions over this important invention of twentieth century. And whether people should be allowed to use it in public transportation is one of those questions under debate. For this dilemma, many people support using cell phone in public transportations for advantages it brings to them. However, from my perspective, I cannot agree with their statement for several reasons.

At first, using cell phone in public transportation, especially in a crowded subway or a bus full of passengers, is very inconvenience（inconvenient）
for others and can hardly protect one's（删除） individual privacy. Now, it is a commonly（此处应该用形容词） thought that public transportation is a vehicle for all civilians, everyone has the right to enjoy a personal space in it. We often read newspaper, listen to music by our portable equipment, and even have a quick sleep when we take the bus or in the subway. At this time, talking through a mobile phone would destroy the quiet surrounding in the carriage, which forces others to pay their attention on the communication unwillingly. This is a disruption for other passengers and an unconsciously（同前） way to disperse personal information.


And（删除） Moreover, using cell phone can also create many troubles to driver(s) of these vehicles and even leads to several dramatically accidents in the end. This is not only because of loudly sound we create when we talking with other people on the cell phone, the radiation of this transport equipment is also harmful for transportation instruments. It is an obviously example, that we are not permit to use cell phone on planes, as a result for that radiation of cell phone would interrupt the signals guide pilots to flying in the sky. All these signals are crucial for the fight, a tiny mistake would lead to a serious accident.


However, before making my conclusion, I think it is important to pick up several exceptional situations under which it is freely to use mobile phone on public vehicles. These exceptions may contain some emergent situations, such as one of the passengers is suffering from a sudden disease, a bus is running out of energy, or even there is a dangerous person in among（删除） passengers. All these situations acquire(compelled) us to contact with relative people as soon as possible, and at this time(that moment) using mobile phone is not only permitted but also necessarily(necessary).

All in all, according to what has been discussed above, except of several special cases we have mentioned, it is necessary to prevent people to use mobile phones in public transportations, for it not only disrupt other people around us but also may interrupt the drivers as well.

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题目：Government should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletes such as state-sponsored Olympic teams

文章：Art and sports both play a unique role in today's society. Despite various responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding the finance of these two fields. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that art has the primary consideration.

First and foremost, art represents various culture and elements. It remains the evidence of human beings' long history. Any religion can not live without art, which help people realize the faith of church and gospels. Each and every revolution in this world is accompanied by the emergence of art in that artists acutely sense the circumstances and they reflect their sensations with sophisticated techniques in their works. No doubt it's vital to grasp the past and take advantage of it to make our current life better.

In addition, artists are those who barely consider money so that there are always myriads of artists died of starvation and poverty. On the contrary, athletes especially the distinguished ones gain more money by endorsing some products and starring in commercials on TV. Not only are athletes more easily obtain reputation and money, but also they are more likely to get involved in business and thus earn income. In order not to interfere artists' characteristics, putting more resources into the industry which seem on edge today is practical and unavoidable.

Finally, art as a means of recreation are suitable and beneficial for all people. Watching landscape paintings sooth fatigue and stress from work, and acquiring the ability to appreciate classical arts enhances critical thinking and aesthetic sensation for students.

On the other hand, sponsoring sports activities also has merits. The sponsorship improves people's enthusiasm in exercising which benefits physical health. There are also a multitude of sports fans who regard sports programs as an inevitable part of their spare time propensities, so the government should not ignore the inclination of vast majorities of people.

In sum, people in charge should take both culture elements seriously. My heartfelt agreement to the idea that arts hold more vital status is, however, coincident with many people. The weak arts industry requires more capital to maintain its vitality.

老王家的小猫UID: 2781258

4-4 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The car has had a greater influence on our life than the airplane has.
For the recent decades, our life has been dramatically changed by those influential inventions of the twentieth century, such as computer, telephone and some new means of transportation. Among these, cars and planes are the vehicles we cannot ignore. And for these two important inventions of transportation, there is a discussion over them about which one has had a greater influence on our life. For some people, they claim that cars are more important to them for it is useful in their daily life, and on the contrary, others would deem plane as their choice for its irreplaceable function to connect us with the whole world. However, from my perspective, I think both of these two options are too unilateral, for car and plane have both had changed our life dramatically, and each of them has its advantage in its own field.

For car, it is an indispensable vehicle in our daily life, we depend on it every day when we travel from one position to another in our city. Nowadays, the most familiar city scene is the running cars on the road, people in them traveling to their destination by an easily way and on a quickly speed. Comparing with those traditional means of transportations like bicycle, car has numerous advantages which make it change our life so greatly. For example, its speed makes us travel in an efficient way and change our way of life dramatically. Today we can enjoy a quiet life in the suburb and take a job at the city center by using our private car to travel between these places within several minutes.

And for plane, it plays an irreplaceable role in connecting us with the outside world. It is without any question that plane is the most efficient mean to transport us to a faraway place. Before plane became an important transportation tool, traveling to a foreign country may took us several months or even almost a year. For this reason, ordinary people have to spend all their lives in a place they familiar with. However, thanks to the using of plane, we, nowadays, can travel to a foreign place within a day. This kind of experience opens a door of the outside world, consequently, we can enjoy those unique scenes of foreign countries by flying over the ocean and have a business with a foreign company by flying to have a communication with them.

However, just as an old saying goes, every coin has two sides. Besides the advantages of these two vehicles, we cannot deny there are still several bad impacts they have on our life. We have to admit there are numerous harmful impacts of these newly means of transportations we have to solve with. We would give several instances of these bad impacts. Such as using fossil fuel make these vehicles have bad influences on our environment, especially the global warming. In addition, the higher speed they have the more accidents would happen during their trip.

All in all, based on what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that both of car and plane have had a dramatically influence on our life, and they contribute to us in their own field. What's more, the influences they give us not only the good ones we can enjoy nut also contain those harmful ones we should pay attention to.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

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(第一个感觉这篇字数好多啊)
The car has had a greater influence on our life than the airplane has.
$ R6 {5 _1 i( d% d% p2 ?For the recent decades, our life has been dramatically changed by those influential inventions of（in） the twentieth century, such as computer, telephone and some new means of transportation. Among these, cars and planes are the vehicles we cannot ignore. And for these two important inventions of transportation, there is a discussion over them about which one has had a greater influence on our life. For some people, they claim that cars are more important to them for it is useful in their daily life, and on the contrary, others would deem plane as their choice for its irreplaceable function to connect us with the whole world. However, from my perspective, I think both of these two options are too unilateral, for cars and planes have both had changed our life dramatically, and each of them has its advantage in its own field.
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For car, it is an indispensable vehicle in our daily life, we depend on it every day when we travel from one position to another in our city. Nowadays, the most familiar city scene is the running cars on the road, people in them traveling to their destination by an easily way and on a quickly speed. Comparing with those traditional means of transportations like bicycle, car has numerous advantages which make it change our life so greatly. For example, its high speed makes us travel in an efficient way and change our way of life dramatically. Today we can enjoy a quiet life in the suburb and take a job atin the city center by using our private car to travel between these places within several minutes.
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: x7 H* a+ P6 K+ ?And for a plane, it plays an irreplaceable role in connecting us with the outside world. It is without any question that plane is the most efficient mean to transport us to a faraway place. Before plane became an important transportation tool, traveling to a foreign country may took us several months or even almost a year. For this reason, ordinary people have to spend all their lives in a place they familiar with. However, thanks to the using(inventor) of plane, we, nowadays, can travel to a foreign place within a day. This kind of experience opens a door of the outside world, consequently, we can enjoy those unique scenes of foreign countries by flying over the ocean and have a business with a foreign company by flying to have a communication with them. ! w7 v3 v9 |( B

6 K1 K! k$ W) c4 n: hHowever, just as an old saying goes, every coin has two sides. Besides the advantages of these two vehicles, we cannot deny there are still several bad impacts they have on our life. We have to admit there are numerous harmful impacts of these newly means of transportations we have to solve with(这两句有点重复). We would give several instances of these bad impacts. Such as using fossil fuel make these vehicles have bad influences on our environment, especially the global warming. In addition, the higher speed they have the more accidents would happen during their trip. . j$ }/ Z/ X- s
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All in all, based on what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that both of cars and planes have had a dramatically influence on our life, and they contribute to us in their own field. What's more, the influences they give us not only the good ones we can enjoy nut also contain those harmful ones we should pay attention to.

yxb_25UID: 2758094

4-4 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The car has had a greater influence on our life than the airplane has.
For the recent decades, our life has been dramatically changed by those influential inventions of the twentieth century, such as computer, telephone and some new means of transportation. Among these, cars and planes are the vehicles we cannot ignore. And for these two important inventions of transportation, there is a discussion over them about which one has had a greater influence on our life. For some people, they claim that cars are more important to them for it is useful in their daily life, and on the contrary, others would deem plane as their choice for its irreplaceable function to connect us with the whole world. However, from my perspective, I think both of these two options are too unilateral, for car and plane have both had changed our life dramatically, and each of them has its advantage in its own field.
(开头段写的很好，不错哦~！）

For car, it is an indispensable vehicle in our daily life, we depend on it every day when we travel from one position to another in our city. Nowadays, the most familiar city scene is the running cars on the road, people in them traveling to their destination by an easily way and on a quickly speed. Comparing with those traditional means of transportations like bicycle, car has numerous advantages which make it change our life so greatly. For example, its speed makes us travel in an efficient way and change our way of life dramatically. Today we can enjoy a quiet life in the suburb and take a job at the city center（downtown比较地道) by using our private car to travel between these places within several minutes.6

And for plane, it plays an irreplaceable role in connecting us with the outside world. It is without any question that plane is the most efficient which meansto transport us to a faraway place. Before plane became an important transportation tool, traveling to a foreign country may took us several months or even almost a year. For this reason, ordinary people mayhave to spend all their lives in a place they familiar with. However, thanks to the using of plane, we, nowadays, can travel to a foreign place within a day. (其实这里连起来说就行了，不用这么多逗号来强调其作用）This kind of experience opens a door of the outside world, consequently, we can enjoy those unique scenes of foreign countries by flying over the ocean and have a business with a foreign company （by flying to have a communication with them似乎多余，或者改写下补充前面也行）.

However, just as an old saying goes, every coin has two sides. Besides the advantages of these two vehicles, we cannot deny thatthere are still several bad impacts they have on
our life(we cannot deny that they still have several bad impacts in our life). We have to admit that there are numerous （用在这里不妥,可别一棒子打死了哈）harmful impacts of these newly means of transportations we have to solve with（这句话似乎有些问题，意思清楚，但是如果重新整理一下就好了）. We would give several instances of these bad impacts. Such as using fossil fuel make these vehicles have bad influences on our environment, especially the global warming. In addition, the higher speed they have the more accidents would happen during their trip. （两句话两个例子？举例如果能再稍微具体点就好了）


All in all, based on what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that both of car and plane have had a dramatically influence on our life, and they contribute to us in their own field. What's more, the influences they gives us not only the good ones we can enjoy nut also contain those harmful ones we should pay attention to.

不错哦，文章很流畅，发现LZ写得越来越好了哈，加油哦~！

老王家的小猫UID: 2781258

4-6 Advertisement is a waste of a company's money and time, because consumers have already known what they want to buy.

In the recent decades, our lives have been filled with many kinds of advertisement. It has already become an indispensable part of our commercial behavior. As for this matter, there are numerous discussions over it, and whether advertisement is a waste of company's money and time is one of the questions under debates. For some people, they claims that because of consumers have already known what they want to buy, advertisement is indeed unnecessary for producers. However, on the contrary, others would figure out that a good advertisement is still an important method for companies to promote their productions by influence consumers’ attitude and behavior. From my perspective, I agree with the latter statement for there are many methods the advertisement could affect buyers’ inclination.

At first, a good advertisement can give prominence to a manufacture’s advantages, which would attract some consumers. Nowadays, based on high technologies, we have many ways to achieve this purpose, such as 3D method and mixture of the imagines and music. Taking the advertisements for Coca Cola as an example, all of these advertisements are full of imagination, they always use a numbers of lively cartoon characters to indicate that drinking this beverage is really enjoyable experience and this would make you full of energy. These attractive imagines and interesting process would change a person mind easily.

In addition, besides showing those advantages of a production, a good advertisement can also influence a people’s decision by showing him or her a new way of life. The most efficient and familiar method is inviting some celebrities to promote their productions, because ordinary people always admire those famous ones and consider their way of life and their choice as the best choice. Especially young people, they have not make up of their mind about they really need. For this matter, we can use their idols’ choice to influence their inclination.
       
However, besides these useful ways to make advertisement influential, we cannot ignore that there are several negative methods we should avoid will we want to make an efficient promotion in advertisement. If we fail to take these into account, advertisement is indeed a waste of money rather than an assistant for sell. There are several examples of these negative methods, such as exaggerating the function of a production or ignoring those defects of a manufacture in purpose.

All in all, based on what I has been discussed above, although consumers have already made a decision about what they would like to choose. A good advertisement can still have an impact on their idea by using some certain promotable methods. What’s more, to make advertisement more efficient, we have to abstain those negative actions which would have oppositional effects.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

In the recent decades, our lives have been filled with many kinds of advertisements. It has already become an indispensable part of our commercial behavior. As for this matter, there are numerous discussions over it, and whether advertisement is a waste of company's money and time is one of the questions under debates. For some people, they claims that because of consumers have already known what they want to buy, advertisement is indeed unnecessary for producers. However, on the contrary, others would figure out that a good advertisement is still an important method for companies to promote their productions by influence consumers’ attitude and behavior. From my perspective, I agree with the latter statement for there are many methods the advertisement could affect buyers’ inclination. 4 E& y1 e" ?% a' |, E

At first, a good advertisement can give prominence to a manufacture’s advantages, which would attract some consumers. Nowadays, based on high technologies(technology), we have many ways to achieve this purpose, such as 3D method and mixture of the imagines and musics. Taking the advertisements for Coca Cola as an example, all of these advertisements are full of imagination, they always use a numbers of lively cartoon characters to indicate that drinking this beverage is really enjoyable experience and this would make you full of energy. These attractive imagines and interesting process would change a person mind easily.3 Y, M1 k5 y9 [# k
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In addition, besides showing those advantages of a production, a good advertisement can also influence a people’s decision by showing him or her a new way of life. The most efficient and familiar method is inviting some celebrities to promote their productions, because ordinary people always admire those famous ones and consider their way of life and their choice as the best choice. Especially young people, they have not make up of their mind aboutwhat they really need. For this matter, we(An advertisement) can use their idols’ choice to influence their inclination.
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However, besides these useful ways to make advertisement influential, we cannot ignore that there are several negative methods we should avoid will we want to make an efficient promotion in advertisement. If we fail to take these into account, advertisement is indeed a waste of money rather than an assistant for sell. There are several examples of these negative methods, such as exaggerating the function of a production or ignoring those defects of a manufacture in purpose.

in all, based on what I has been discussed above, although consumers have already made a decision about what they would like to choose. A good advertisement can still have an impact on their idea by using some certain promotable methods. What’s more, to make advertisement more efficient, we have to abstain those negative actions which would have oppositional effects.
我一直觉得lz写的作文很好……我水平有限,改不出什么错误

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In the recent decades, our lives have been filled with many kinds of advertisement. It has already become an indispensable part of our commercial behavior. As for this matter, there are numerous discussions over it, and whether advertisement is a waste of company's money and time is one of the questions under debates. For some people, they claims that because of consumers have already known what they want to buy, advertisement is indeed unnecessary for producers. However, on the contrary, others would figure out that a good advertisement is still an important method for companies to promote their productions by influence consumers’ attitude and behavior. From my perspective, I agree with the latter statement for there are many methods the advertisement could affect buyers’ inclination. ; H4 \. j. U1 l4 S' K# M
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At first, a good advertisement can give prominence to a manufacture’s advantages, which would attract some consumers. Nowadays, based on high technologies, we have many ways to achieve this purpose, such as 3D method and mixture of the imagines and music. Taking the advertisements for Coca Cola as an example, all of these advertisements are full of imagination, they always use a numbers of lively cartoon characters to indicate that drinking this beverage is really enjoyable experience and this would make you full of energy. These attractive imagines and interesting process would change a person mind easily.
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+ N1 L$ `& [# }* v' [  u9 t9 PIn addition, besides showing those advantages of a production, a good advertisement can also influence a people’s decision by showing him or her a new way of life. The most efficient and familiar method is inviting some celebrities to promote their productions, because ordinary people always admire those famous ones and consider their way of life and their choice as the best choice. Especially young people, they have not make up of their mind about they really need. For this matter, we can use their idols’ choice to influence their inclination. ! H2 k6 c: ^( c! W9 i
        
4 X  \6 F% p, h/ D- WHowever, besides these useful ways to make advertisement influential, we cannot ignore that there are several negative methods we should avoid will we want to make an efficient promotion in advertisement. If we fail to take these into account, advertisement is indeed a waste of money rather than an assistant for sell. There are several examples of these negative methods, such as exaggerating the function of a production or ignoring those defects of a manufacture in purpose. ( U' K$ }& t( d2 B
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All in all, based on what I has been discussed above, although consumers have already made a decision about what they would like to choose. A good advertisement can still have an impact on their idea by using some certain promotable methods. What’s more, to make advertisement more efficient, we have to abstain those negative actions which would have oppositional effects.(作文写得越来越好了，以前也改过你的作文，看你的作文一点也没有停顿，语意非常清楚， 反正以我现在的水平是没找到什么错误。。。佩服。。我还要有多久才能像楼主这样啊。。)