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Accompany with the development of society, the(改成a) increasing number of advertisements are beginning emerge in our modern life. And about (as for)the phenomenon of the advertisements are fashion and to change with each passing day, so many problems are worth considering carefully. There is a heated debate with soaring volume about whether advertisements make produce seem better than they are. As far as I convinced the theme is true. So I agree advertisements make products seem better than they are.  (这后面两句就直接合成一句就OK了,)


To begin with, in order to be most effective an advertising campaign people often make the better advertisements than realistic products. While clients looked the advertisements especially beautiful flash appearances, people would interest in those products. For example, I once watched an advertisement about a kind of sandwich in the television which is such beauty and looked delicious. I am willing to obtain this kind of sandwich when I looked the advertisements after.(前面两句从I once开始到after结束，同一个意思说了两遍) One day, I eventually eat this sandwich in restaurant but I do not satisfy myself what I taste. (前句的表达有问题哦，satisfied with the sandwich.)Why is it? I get the answer about that I think because although (句子赘述了，中式思维比较严重)the sandwich looked so good at my sense, the taste is less good than the imagining of mine. The luxuriance advertisements give me fault thought. The realistic is not the same as the advertisements

In addition, advertisements give us the advantages of products and blind to the disadvantages when we looked. Sometimes products in order to attract customers have to exaggerate the advantages and contract(cover就行了) the disadvantages. Last year, I once buy a bookcase, while the salesman and the product’s advertisement told me the quality of the bookcase is firm. But when I came back home with the bookcase I found which were not fit me, it is so small for me and the frame is too short to my height. The bookcase is a child bookcase. What(形容词的感叹句式要用how) ridiculous about it. So you can see, in order to attract people the advertisements always exaggerate the advantages and blind to the disadvantages. It is not so good in realistic comparable the advertisements.

To sum up what has been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion the advertisements is less good than the products in society. So I hence my opinion advertisements make products seem better than they are.

   文章总体都不错，举的例子也很好，只是个别句子的表达要注意。