求改作文啦。。。。各位老大帮忙了

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In contemporary society, TVs are becoming more and more important in everyone’s life, and no one can ignore their influence. however it is not completely true to say that newspapers will be replaced by televisions, in fact newspapers have their own characteristic power attract us to buy them and  read them.
    first of all, newspapers are lack of distance of our life. Unlike watching television you should stay in bad or sit on a sofa, you can even read a newspaper in every places and time that you want. Everyday i always notice many citizens buy newspapers in the street and read them on their way to business. During that time, they can easily know many important events which has happened yesterday and achieve enough souses to communicate with their partners with confidence which will not led them be regard as dull people.
   Then, in comparison with television, newspapers can give us more space to understand the news with our own opinion. Have you realized that you are influenced by the backward songs, attractive pictures and moving speeches when you sit in front of your television? Every TV program has their own attitudes and you will be subconsciously or unconsciously instilled them。 Newspapers, obviously, are lake of this kind of function to impact us although they also have their attitude.
   Finally, newspapers can help us make full use of the time to find the important news because we only need to glance at every headline and only choose the one which I am interested to read. In another word, you do not have to spend much time watching those meaningless commercial advertisements each 30 minutes.
   In conclusion, it’s by no means that televisions are with no help. What I want to say is that reading newspapers is a very important ways to receive information maybe better than watching television.

这篇文章写的很没有感觉。。。想到后天过生日   还多了一天假         就心向往之。。。哈
费了好多时间啊。。。。

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额。。。今天都很忙啊

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation (plane, train, bus)?

In contemporary society, the method of communication is developing rapidly. However there is a heated discussion that should we be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation. Many people deem that the noise that we make when we use mobile phone will subconsciously or unconsciously influence the others and let them feel uncomfortable. So in my opinion, although using mobile phone is our rights no matter where and when we are we should care about our behavior.
First of all, obviously, no one can demand the others whether he/she can use mobile phone, have you ever seen a person calling with someone in a bus with a loud voice even drown out the sound of the bus. Have you ever slept in a train while a person was making a phone call above you? Admittedly you must feel very angry and aggressive, and you must want to throw his mobile out of the window. But you can’t, the only thing you can do is just stay there and listen. So think about the feeling, it is by no means that we must not allow people use their mobile, my point is just turn down the voice, and consider about the others.
In fact, we hold the reason that we should keep and use our mobile in public. Here is the investigation made by NY University, it mentioned that nowadays there is almost 40000000 people talking with mobile per hour. The expert once claimed that we are living in a world which can not without mobile. Maybe your friend needs your help, may be your parents miss you, maybe your boss ask you to do something, with a mobile, you can response at the first time and let them satisfied.
Moreover, nowadays mobiles have much additional ability such as watching films, listening to the music or reading books. Mobiles have becoming parts of our life, and these functions will never affect on the others.
In short, we need mobile no matter where we are including the public.
今天写的完全没有感觉   感觉要多背点东西了

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In contemporary society, the method of communication is developing rapidly. However should we be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation becomes a heated discussion . Many people deem that the noise that we make when we use mobile phone will subconsciously or unconsciously influence the others and let them feel uncomfortable. So in my opinion, although using mobile phone is our rights no matter where and when we are， we should care about our behavior.
% h+ B7 v4 Z" b/ zFirst of all, obviously, no one can demand the others whether he/she can use mobile phone, have you ever seen a person calling in a bus with a loud voice even drowning out the sound of the bus； Have you ever had a bad sleep in a train because a person above you made phone calls all the night? Admittedly you must feel very angry and aggressive, and you must want to throw his mobile out of the window. But you can’t, the only thing you can do is just stay there and listen. So think about the feeling, we should by no means abandon
peoplefrom using their mobile, my point is each passenger should turn down the voice, and consider about the others.
; A! R8 C8 D% o; S7 q/ @6 M In fact, we hold the reason that we should keep and use our mobile in public. Here is the investigation made by NY University, it mentioned that nowadays there is almost 40000000 people talking with mobile per hour. (这个例子你是怎么找到的，太强大了)The expert（of the programme?） once claimed that we are living in a world connected with mobiles. Maybe your friend needs your help, may be your parents miss you, maybe your boss ask you to do something, they use a mobile to call you or send short messengs, you can response at the first time and make them satisfied.
8 b9 T  z" g3 a1 ?  Q( W Moreover, nowadays mobiles have much additional ability such as watching films, listening to the music or reading books. Mobiles have becoming a part of our life, and these functions will not possibly affect the others.
+ f! L3 |9 l: X$ {' Q6 P: l5 X In short, we need mobile no matter where we are including the public.* 结尾最好再点点中心论点 T3 g

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation (plane, train, bus)?

In contemporary society, the method of communication is developing rapidly. However there is a heated discussion that （whether)
should we be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation. Many people deem that the noise that we make when we use mobile phone will subconsciously or unconsciously influence the others and let them feel uncomfortable. So in my opinion, although using mobile phone is our rights no matter where and when we are we should care about our behavior.

First of all, obviously, no one can demand the others whether he/she can use mobile phone, have you ever seen a person calling with (to)
someone in a bus with a loud voice even drown out the sound of the bus. Have you ever slept in a train while a person was making a phone call above(near by) you? Admittedly you must feel very angry and aggressive, and you must want to throw his mobile out of the window(后面这半句就不要了吧，个人认为太不和谐了，哈）. But you can’t（can not do that), the only thing you can do is just stay there and listen. So think about the feeling, it is by no means that we must not allow people use their mobile, my point is just turn down the voice, and consider about the others.
(in my point of view, people should showing concern about others feeling and turn  their phone ring down as possible as they can)

In fact, we
have been hold the reason that we should keep and use our mobile in public(语序有些问题）. Here is the investigation made by NY University, it mentioned that nowadays there is almost 40000000(40,000,000数字记得逗号，或者直接 40 million) people talking with mobile per hour. The expert once claimed that we are living in a world which can not without mobile(phone). Maybe your friend needs your help, may be your parents miss you, maybe your boss ask you to do something, with a mobile, you can response at the first time and let them satisfied(例子感觉缺了点什么）.
Moreover, nowadays mobiles have much additional ability（ addition function to use) such as watching films, listening to the music or reading E-books. Mobiles have becoming parts of our life, and these functions will never affect on the others.$ i, d, x1 C6 J% f* |
In short, we need mobile no matter where we are including (in)
the public


文章写得不错，比较有条理，小问题还是有一些， 可以看得出LZ的进步得非常快啊，加油啊