Issue39，求拍

stormmapleUID: 2774850

TOPIC: ISSUE39 - "The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vastly overrated: most people could learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree."
WORDS: 475                                DATE: 2010/3/31 21:58:34
Based on the assertion that one had better learn by himself rather than attending a college or university as they could learn more, the writer's indication draws attention to a widely discussed topic: which is better, college life or self education? In my opinion, systematic college education metod, hardware, facuty,  and well-arranged curriculum would do much better than  the adventure of a non-experience tutor's studying in how to teach himself at home.
While teaching oneself, the utmost and ultimate problem is: what to learn, and how? In the case that not everyone is taught to teach- although ones may have some idea about the subject they are engaged to learn- they have no idea about the courses that they should learn. For example, in order to master chemistry to a degree, one should learn or at least know about inorganic chemistry, organic chemistry, analytical chemistry, physical chemistry, and so on. That is to say, one should not only know the subject, but also every branch of it- if the branch is essential- and that is the serious weakness that a home-made curriculum may have.
Besides the weakness in curriculum, enough resources in teaching is beyond possibility and one's ability. Providing "What to learn" is settled,  "How to learn" is still up in the air. For instance, a systematic and experimental subject like chemistry, it is insuffecient to master it without enough experience in experiment and practice. But according to ordinary condition one could not manage to receive enough experience by himself. Like chemical reagent, chemical instrument, skilled oprator and maintainer, they're essential in experiment but exceeding one's capability to equip them all- but they are common in common collages and universities.
Brushing all the negative factors aside, the thought of learning by oneself fail to provide the surroundings and atomsphere of research and study that inspire  green hands into skilled researchers and experts and that is rich in collages and universities. Teamwork, discussion, inspiration and communication plays the vital role in research. Only one brain is limited to implement an idea and realize it. The birth of a ripe theory is just like a product from an assembling line, one thought is fulfilled by the thinkers at the line, each have a component and install it on the thought which succeeded from the one before, therefore a complete thought emerges. So in order to have a brilliant future in research one should attend collages and universities to step into the atomsphere of research.
In summary, a home made educator- and at the same time a learner- is unable to provide enough resources and a well-arranged curriculum about learning. Without solution to what to learn and how to learn, a education that teach by oneself instead of studying in university and collage, with the lack of both hardware and software support ,is doomed to be unfruitful.

sunflower_irisUID: 2720580

Based on the assertion that one had better learn by himself rather than attending a college or university as they could learn more, the writer's indication draws attention to a widely discussed topic: which is better, college life or self education? In my opinion, systematic college education metod, hardware, facuty,  and well-arranged curriculum would do much better than  the adventure of a non-experience tutor's studying in how to teach himself at home.(首先看题目，进入大学的intellectual benefits are overrated，那么你就要明确，进入大学的intellectual benefits是什么，显然题目中认为进入大学的benefit是get a degree，那么你要说明的就不只是比较college life and self education，而是在大学学习不止于pursuing a degree对不对？你也旨在说明这一点是不是？)
While teaching oneself, the utmost and ultimate problem is: what to learn, and how?（显然题目针对的是要进入大学的学生，我们有理由相信很多人已经具备了自我学习的能力，在之前的教育中他们已经知道怎么去学习，接下来的论述中你所说的是没有具有这种能力的人，是不是应当分情况说，有些具备这种的能力怎样，没有的又怎样） In the case that not everyone is taught to teach- although ones may have some idea about the subject they are engaged to learn- they have no idea about the courses that they should learn. For example, in order to master chemistry to a degree, one should learn or at least know about inorganic chemistry, organic chemistry, analytical chemistry, physical chemistry, and so on. That is to say, one should not only know the subject, but also every branch of it- if the branch is essential- and that is the serious weakness that a home-made curriculum may have.
Besides the weakness in curriculum, enough resources in teaching is beyond possibility and one's ability. Providing "What to learn" is settled,  "How to learn" is still up in the air. For instance, a systematic and experimental subject like chemistry, it is insuffecient to master it without enough experience in experiment and practice. But according to ordinary condition one could not manage to receive enough experience by himself. Like chemical reagent, chemical instrument, skilled oprator and maintainer, they're essential in experiment but exceeding one's capability to equip them all- but they are common in common collages and universities.（我看懂了你的逻辑，不在于说基本的what to learn or how to learn，而在于what’s more to learn and how to learn better，是不是？）
Brushing all the negative factors aside, the thought of learning by oneself fail to provide the surroundings and atomsphere of research and study that inspire  green hands into skilled researchers and experts and that is rich in collages and universities. Teamwork, discussion, inspiration and communication plays the vital role in research. Only one brain is limited to implement an idea and realize it. The birth of a ripe theory is just like a product from an assembling line, one thought is fulfilled by the thinkers at the line, each have a component and install it on the thought which succeeded from the one before, therefore a complete thought emerges. So in order to have a brilliant future in research one should attend collages and universities to step into the atomsphere of research.
In summary, a home made educator- and at the same time a learner- is unable to provide enough resources and a well-arranged curriculum about learning. Without solution to what to learn and how to learn, a education that teach by oneself instead of studying in university and collage, with the lack of both hardware and software support ,is doomed to be unfruitful.
我很喜欢你段落里的分析和发展的例证，如果错别字能再少一点的话：）
回到开始的问题，你所论述的问题是大学学习的好处，那么你需要说明，大学学习不是为了pursuing a degree，而是在取得degree的过程中得到更好的学习对不对？然后说明为了大学学习更好地学到知识。在大学学习最大的好处是不仅仅提供了书本知识，还有教学和交流过程，更广泛的专业学习课程，注意，要比较的话，就一定要说出在校学习所得到的自学得不到的东西，不只是degree，还有其他，像你说的那样，对不对？