求各G神帮忙看下我能得多少分 不用修改 就看看， 万分感谢！

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写的第2篇ARGU，超时严重先不管。。  希望大家能帮看下得多少分  3。5分甚至4分有希望吗？  谢谢！

题目：ARGUMENT79 - The following appeared in a magazine for the trucking industry.
"The Longhaul trucking company was concerned that its annual accident rate (the number of accidents per mile driven) was too high. It granted a significant pay increase to its drivers and increased its training standards. It also put strict limits on the number of hours per week each driver could drive. The following year, its trucks were involved in half the number of accidents as before the changes were implemented. A survey of other trucking companies found that the highest-paid drivers were the least likely to have had an accident. Therefore, trucking companies wishing to reduce their accident rate can do so simply by raising their drivers' pay and limiting the overall number of hours they drive."

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According to the content of the notion that the arguer took, we had known that  he recommended that trucking companies should increase the revenues of the drivers and definite the driving time per week in order to reduce their accident rate.But in my opinion, it is groundless because of the following illustrations that I want to take on.
Initially,The maganize did't give a  creditable evidence to show how high the annual accident rate is in the Longhaul trcking company and therefore we can't harness the statistics to point out some problems.
Maybe the authorthought that an tremendously pay increase to drives will led to decline the number of accident by the survey conducted in the following year. I think, however, it is not objective seeing that some other conditions such as the roads ,those we don't know how flat they are, havn't be counted in seriously.
Subsequently, limiting the overall number of hours they drive is futile. If they want to avoid the accident through decreasing the hours we drive,  why don't they ride bikes or even go somewhere on foot? The key is when they drive and how skillful they do. Someone who is keen on drving on a bent road at night will have more chance to meet with an accident  than who does on a smooth road in the diurnal time.
In sum, the statement presented by the arguer is inconvincible.I have figured out the defects in his presentation all the above and he should cogitate and consummate the conclusion that trucking companies being about to reduce their accident rate only by accreting their drivers' pay and limiting the  hours they drive with more cogent data.

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ETS有官方的评分标准，楼主可以先自行对照一下，感觉一下自己符合哪个分数段。

GRE Scoring Guide: Analyze

an Argument

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Score 6

A 6 paper presents a cogent, well-articulated critique of the argument and conveys meaning skillfully.

A typical paper in this category

• clearly identifies important features of the argument and analyzes them insightfully

• develops ideas cogently, organizes them logically, and connects them with clear transitions

• effectively supports the main points of the critique

• demonstrates control of language, including appropriate word choice and sentence variety

• demonstrates facility with the conventions (i.e., grammar, usage, and mechanics) of standard written English but may have minor errors

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Score 5

A 5 paper presents a generally thoughtful, well-developed critique of the argument and conveys meaning clearly.

A typical paper in this category

• clearly identifies important features of the argument and analyzes them in a generally perceptive way

• develops ideas clearly, organizes them logically, and connects them with appropriate transitions

• sensibly supports the main points of the critique

• demonstrates control of language, including appropriate word choice and sentence variety

• demonstrates facility with the conventions of standard written English but may have minor errors

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Score 4

A 4 paper presents a competent critique of the argument and conveys meaning adequately.

A typical paper in this category

• identifies and analyzes important features of the argument

• develops and organizes ideas satisfactorily but may not connect them with transitions

• supports the main points of the critique

• demonstrates sufficient control of language to express ideas with reasonable clarity

• generally demonstrates control of the conventions of standard written English but may have some errors

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Score 3

A 3 paper demonstrates some competence in its critique of the argument and in conveying meaning but is obviously flawed.

A typical paper in this category exhibits ONE OR MORE of the following characteristics:

• does not identify or analyze most of the important features of the argument, although some analysis of the argument is present

• mainly analyzes tangential or irrelevant matters, or reasons poorly

• is limited in the logical development and organization of ideas

• offers support of little relevance and value for points of the critique

• lacks clarity in expressing ideas

• contains occasional major errors or frequent minor errors in grammar, usage, or mechanics that can interfere with meaning

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Score 2

A 2 paper demonstrates serious weaknesses in analytical writing.

A typical paper in this category exhibits ONE OR MORE of the following characteristics:

• does not present a critique based on logical analysis, but may instead present the writer's own views on the subject

• does not develop ideas, or is disorganized and illogical

• provides little, if any, relevant or reasonable support

• has serious problems in the use of language and in sentence structure that frequently interfere with meaning

• contains serious errors in grammar, usage, or mechanics that frequently obscure meaning

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Score 1

A 1 paper demonstrates fundamental deficiencies in both

analysis AND writing .

A typical paper in this category exhibits MORE THAN ONE

of the following characteristics:

• provides little or no evidence of the ability to

understand and analyze the argument

• provides little or no evidence of the ability to

develop an organized response

• has severe problems in language and sentence

structure that persistently interfere with meaning

• contains pervasive errors in grammar, usage, or

mechanics that result in incoherence

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Score 0

Off topic, in a foreign language, merely copies the topic,

consists of only keystroke characters, or is illegible, blank, or

nonverbal.

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NS

Blank

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2# 海王泪

那个 谢谢斑竹  不过我之前就看过了    可是无法衡量出来啊  毕竟太主观了```  能否帮忙看下可以得多少分。。