layla的作文本

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8.12

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虽然没一组过，不过一直都有学习你的作文~~不知道可以不可 互改一次~~

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钢炮已经改好

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Jill（蚊子）已改好~~~
向你学习啊

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已改好~

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多谢你帮我改的8.12的作业呢~~~

:)你8.12的作业很多人都改了，我就来试下你8.14的作业吧~~

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8.17

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多谢批改~~~

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插队弱问一句，这个小组要达到什么标准才能参加么？可以自由回复吗？另外，我不太会回帖，如果我想引你的作文的一段话，只能复制粘贴过来吗？



2# layla1989

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8.26

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给你改好啦....

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41# layla1989
   Under the trend of globalization, people in many countries are becoming more and more interested in foreign staff, such as imported food, foreign lifestyle, foreign TV programe and so on. Fortunately the development of communication and tranportation technology provide modern peope(people) various methods to learn about the foreign countries they interested in. Among all those methods, newspapers and magazines are the most traditional way to receive information from the outside world. However, when compared with other ways, the way of newspapers and magazines is far from the best.
   I have to admit that gaining knowledge about foreign countries through reading newspapers and magazines do have some irreplaceable advantages. Before the publishments, newspapers and magazines must get through the review of Press and Publication Administration and obtain the ISSN. This process can help the readers get rid of some unqualified information providers, which means that all the magazines and newspapers in the market can satisfy the basic quality requirements. However, on the other side, the fact that all the publications must get the permissions of government agencies give governments chances to manipulate the content of publications and limit the spread of information that don’t favor the government but is real.
  There are still many benefits people can obtain from other methods to get to know the foreign culture but not from newspapers and magazines. For instance, people can see pictures and read lines which is shot and written by others in the magazines. Feelings expressed by authors are real but personal. People can never know their own feelings unless they experience by themselves. No matter how clear the pictures are and how vivid the discription is, reading at home can never compared with the feast of eyes, hands,ears,nose and mouth that brings by traveling abroad. Besides, the amount of information provided by the internet is much more abundant than by newspapers and the experience and feelings obtained by watching foreign movies, TV plays and programs are more direct than reading magezines.
  As a conclusion, except the channels I mentioned above, there are still many ways for people to get to know foreign culturs. Each channels have their own advantages and disadvantages, so it is arbitrary to come to the conclusion of which way is the best.

文章的观点是It is arbitrary to come to the conclusion of which way is the best.对于托福写作是否有点模棱两可？最好指出Newspapers and magazines are not the best way吧.
第二段的段首句是advantages，但第二段的很多内容都是disadvantages, 可再分一段
总之还是不错滴，记得帮我回改哦~~~