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本人第一次。。。求拍砖。。。越狠越好。。。呃。。。好吧。。。
It is more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals.
Although human beings are confronted with limited space and air-polluted conditions, land of endangered animal should not be eroded concerning the negative effect of such behavior. Diversity of animal species、balance of natural system and reponsibility for our offsprings are the main fators that take into account
To begin with reserving land for human beings will inevitably give rise to the loss of inhabit of endangered animals. Since it is quite hard for endangered animals to accommodate to the harsh environment nowadays, loss of inhabitat is possibly lead to the extinction of it. Furthermore the resereved land may destroy the biological environment which endangered animals lived in and thus endangered animals like panda are vulnerable to be attacked due to the lack of hidden places. In a nutshell reserving land may cause the acceleration of the extinction of endagered animals and diveristy of animal species is likely to decrease.
Besides eroding land of endangered animal is harm to the balance of ecological system.
Based on Darwin’s evolution theory, the deceased number of specific endangered animal induces the proliferation of its native predator. Taking biological chain into account, link of predator chain is broken and the whole biological is undermined. The dramatic fact is that human being, founder of broken chain , will at last be punished by nature as well.
Last but not the least we have to be responsible to our offspring. Hardly could any of us faces the embarassed scene our descendents have little knowledge about panda, tiger or carnary for these once endangered animals extinct thousand years ago. And at that time we will be the cirminals in history. So rather than usurping the land of endangered animal, we should spare no effort on protecting them. The problem of limited space could be solved accounting to the widom of human being and rapid devolopment of science and technology.
All in all concerning factors mentiond above we should protect the inhabitat of endangered animals instead of reserving land for ourselves.

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题目是什么啊。。。。

onlybenUID: 2842362

题目是第一句话么。。。

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已批改~~
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对了，伱给我批改的里面有些我显示的是乱码~

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先做个记号，改的时候好找，顺便占楼。

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5# 梦梦小精灵细细
不太懂。。。什么意思。。。

onlybenUID: 2842362

The claim that students would receive a better, effective education when attending class for 11 months of a year is based on the fact more time is spent on learning , more knowledge is learned. Better and effective education, however, should be judged by the fully development of students rather than quantity of learning knowledge. Thus the claim seems to be suspicious due to the following reasons
First of all long term study is not equal to learning efficiency. 11 months of a year study is inevitably leading to reduction of vacation time. I concede that long term may somehow help students to gain more knowledge, on the contrary it is likely to evoke the resistance of study due to the decreased time of vacation. What is more students are going to be tired of learning hence it is hard for them to keep concentration on learning. Teachers as well are deprived of
the opportunity to communicate with fellow staff because of teaching experience conference which is often holded during the long vacation. Thus the decrease of learning efficiecy is hardly to be avoided.
Besides idea of long term study ignores students’ self development and career training ability. With such teaching stratergy, students are restricted to school 11 month a year. Hardly can they involve in social activities concerning the limited self-control time. And it may give rise to the loss of social recognition and counts against to their striving for social status. As far as I know colledge students are required to take part in social practise activity on summer vacation as a way to training social responsibility and help them adapt to social life. And as a medical student I once joined a volunteet practising program and serveed as an agent advocating Aids prevention for 2 months. My job was to hand out condoms and porpanda safty sexual intercourse. Communication skills and self-confidence was promoted through the experice as a volunteer. It helps me to gain social regonition as well. So students should be given more time to do what they interest in and grow in their own way.
In a nutshell better and effective training is composed of quality studying both in school and society. Simply by extending the time students learning in school may force students to gain more knowledge. Such stratergy, however, impedes the devlopment of students into independent and reponsible social charater.

第二次作文

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The claim that students would receive a better, effective education when attending class for 11 months of a year is based on the fact more time is spent on learning , more knowledge is learned.（把整个题目重抄一遍不大好吧，最好做下改动哦） Better and effective education, however, should be judged by the fully（full） development of students rather than quantity of learning knowledge. Thus the claim seems to be suspicious due to the following reasons
First of all long term study is not equal to learning efficiency. 11 months of a year study is inevitably leading to reduction of vacation time. I concede that long term may somehow help students to gain more knowledge, on the contrary it is likely to evoke the resistance of study due to the decreased time of vacationWhat is more students are going to be tired of learning hence it is hard for them to keep concentration on learning. Teachers as well are deprived of 7 u' X" z' w, n( V' O% S! f2 Y
the opportunity to communicate with fellow staff because of teaching experience conference which is often holded during the long vacation. Thus the decrease of learning efficiecy is hardly to be avoided.6 R+ ~# p% r3 S, Z4 Q4 |
Besides idea of long term study ignores students’ self development and career training ability. With such teaching stratergy, students are restricted to school 11 month a year. Hardly can they involve in social activities concerning the limited self-control time. And it may give rise to the loss of social recognition and counts against to their striving for social status. As far as I know colledge students are required to take part in social practise activity on summer vacation as a way to training social responsibility and help them adapt to social life. And as a medical student I once joined a volunteer practising program and serveed as an agent advocating Aids prevention for 2 months. My job was to hand out condoms and porpanda safty sexual intercourse. Communication skills and self-confidence was promoted through the experice as a volunteer. It helps me to gain social regonition as well. So students should be given more time to do what they interest in and grow in their own way.( n' ~: m6 A! B8 A6 N9 a
In a nutshell better and effective training is composed of quality studying both in school and society(这句话好像没有主语） Simply by extending the time students learning in school may force students to gain more knowledge. Such stratergy, however, impedes the devlopment of students into（from being） independent and reponsible social charater.
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