miaodi 的作文帖

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9.14
miaodi 发表于 2010-9-14 17:13

Ever since we graduate from university, we have to apply for a job. How to select one job that fit you is a systematic project. To find a(an) appropriate job, we should consider the location of work place, working condition(environments,和后面重复了), traffic condition and the most important one- salary and stability. In my opinion, I have an inclination to have(take) jobs with high salary, even if it is easy to lose. The reason why I think so goes as follow.

First of all, although a job with low paying salary and being high security is more stability(stable) and less high pressed than jobs with high salary but being easy to lose, I still think that I may lose the chance to realize my self-value, if I choose the former as my job(感觉这段话太长了，表达总是不是那么顺畅，还不如开门见山，简单明了。而且都是重复题干内容，有凑字数嫌疑。). Young people, in the thought that they should struggle for a better life, will not be contented by(with) such stable job that leak of opportunity. I like risk because adventure(it) is the(a) distinct spirit of young. I also deem that I will not be discharged by employer if I am really competent to this job, no matter how unstable this work is. Every administrator should have enough and rational reasons to fire his or her stuff, they will not fire an employee whose work and contribution deserve his or her income（感觉是重复上句话）. To prevent from regretting in the future, why not challenge yourself in an exciting job?

Secondly, I admit that ever since you decide to engage in risky job, you face with pressure and maybe someday you really lose your job. In this respect, a safety job seems more appropriate. But who can proclaim（guarantee） that those in stable job will never face the circumstance of losing job? Moreover, to young people, losing job gives them valuable experience, although they may feel a little bitter. Those experience accumulated during their life-time will become their spirit fortune in the future.

In sum, both kinds of jobs have its advantage and drawback, but in the young’s perspective, I still incline to challenge myself to pursue more opportunities and realize my life goal.
总体感觉观点明确，结构完整。个人水平有限，如修改有错，敬请指教！

miaodiUID: 2613113

9.18

hypnosis@1122UID: 2904175

Nowadays, in China, our governments have an inclination to build art museum and musical theater in big cities. However, I have not found the development in Chinese populace’s aesthetic feeling. So to the topic whether government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, my answer is no. The reason why I think so goes as follow.(这句读起来很拗口，the reasons are showed as follow)

First of all, I do not want to deny the value and influence of art on our life. It is true that art, which contains human being’s history and records the evolution steps of us前后不一致（前面可以改成history of human being), is one of the most important parts of the real world. However, simply constructing sort of art museums and music theaters without concerning the education of art major can’t actually enhance our country’s artistic culture, let alone benefit from these projects, because art need to be developed in a systematic way. We should invest in some relative fields of art, such as education, instrumental manufacture, record industry and so on, and we should also support the artists, who have made great achievement in their fields, both in economic aspect and in mental(spitital)aspect. Only in this way can we efficiently propel the development of art.

Secondly, even if building art facilities is necessary to the government, I do not think it is justifiable to give art buildings a higher priority than that of recreational facilities. Since such recreational facilities as swimming pool and play ground are all basic facilities that have huge requirement, government may suffer high pressure from populace if their needs to (for)those places are not contented. And people also can receive fun and happiness from swimming or other kinds of games, so the government does not have the authority to look down upon those activities.

What’s more, more than giving us happiness, recreational facilities can provide a chance to practice our bodies and help us maintain healthy. On football ground, we learn how to cooperate with teammate, how to stimulate the potential chemistry reaction. In swimming pool, our ability to keep balance could be enhanced. In sum, our government should seek a balance between in investing resource to art museum and to recreational facilities.
个人觉得结论应该分出来，尽量多说两句

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9,23

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miaodiUID: 2613113

9.25

miaodiUID: 2613113

9.28

crystalmUID: 2200724

Whether students should study basic course in university? Different people, due to their different background, hold different attitude (attitudes) to this issue. Some people support the statement because basic knowledge is useful and value (valuable), while others think students should pay more attention on (to) their majors and they do not need spend more time on the basic courses. In my opinion, I deem that (是不是和in my opinion重复了？) basic course should be set into the syllabus of university and my reason as following goes.

First of all, basic knowledge, such as math, literature (题目好像说的是science courses) or physics, is important for a student’s development. Math teaches us how to calculate, which is a fundamental skill in common life. Literature helps us write more smoothly and deliver our idea more easily and accurately. If we do not manipulate those skills proficiently, we cannot communicate with others without any obstacle, and make our points be accepted by others, let alone realize our ideals (ideas?).

Secondly, gaining a high score in basic courses is the prerequisite for us to pursue our major study. Take constructing building as an example, if we want to establish a sky crapper, we must dig into (去掉) more deep to set the foundation, the deeper the foundation is, the higher the building will be. Study is the same case, with the insurance of basic theory, we can learn major knowledge quickly, and also can resolve problem easily. And when we explore some unknown fields in nature science the utensil we can use is fundamental principles which we have cognized comprehensively. So we should learn basic knowledge for future study.

Thirdly, those courses also provide us with a chance to broaden our horizon. We, major in academic science, do not have opportunity to contact art or music knowledge. If our universities have an inclination to set such courses, students can not only have a relaxation when they appreciate beautiful work by masters, but also can cultivate their hobbies in those subjects. （好像题目中说的是science courses）What’s more, those courses also benefit students in that they can students more efficient in other course, because of the relaxation.

In sum, I argue that administrators of universities have the responsibility to take basic courses in to their syllabus, this manner can not only benefit the school, but also promote students’ learning ability.

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望回批，thanks a lot

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