9.28号作文--njusls

njuslsUID: 2757819

Nowadays most of the chinese universities do not set basic science courses, like physics and chemistry,as the optional courses. Due to this situation, some people criticize that university students should obtain some rudimentary and essential science knowledge, therefore, they should take basic science course, regardless of their field of concentration. As far as I am concerned, the university should not force all students to take basic sciecnce course.

In order to know the physical world better, we do need some basic science knowledge, but we can achieve that goal with some rudimentary knowledge which have been taught in our high school. It is needless to repeatedly teach these knowledge in university, where every student has been specialized. If there are students who are extremely interested in physics, for instance, they can aquire deepper physical theory through choosing optional courses or taking physics as the second major.

The other reason why I goes against with the suggestion to make basic science course obligatory is that though all students were forced to take the basic science course,
the ones majoring in social science, arts and humanilty, who are lack of outstanding mathmatic skills, still could not learn basic science well. Mathmatics and basic science tightly connect with each other. Seldomly can a student who fails in a mathmatic test get high score in basic science course. To students who specified in arts, learning these courses is so defficult that they even are not able to understand the basic mathmatic formula used in the basic science theory. In contrary, if they spent the time on composition, they would have made a euphonic music already. In additon, fairness may be jeopardised when the students from different majors are forced to study in the same course and take the identical test, becase their mathmatic ablility are in different level.

It is needless and useless to set the basic science course as obligatory course. The university should be a place where everyone is able to find their own interests, unique blinking points and develop the ablility to maximum to be an expert in one or two field, meeting the requirments of specilized job market.

xiaotuffUID: 2685811

不好意思 现在在给予回复

Nowadays most of the chinese universities do not set basic science courses, like physics and chemistry, as the optional courses.(此句要表达两个含义，感觉有些便扭) Due to this situation, some people criticize that university students should obtain some rudimentary and essential （两个词表意一样，有累赘之嫌）science knowledge, therefore（“因此”的逻辑关系在哪里？）, they should take basic science course, regardless of their field of concentration. As far as I am concerned, the university should not force all students to take basic sciecnce course.

In order to know the physical world better, we do need some basic science knowledge, but we can achieve that goal with some rudimentary knowledge which have（has） been taught in our high school. It is needless to repeatedly teach these knowledge in university, where every student has been specialized. If there are students who are extremely interested in physics, for instance, they can aquire (acquire) deepper (deeper) physical theory through(by) choosing optional courses or taking physics as the second major.

The other reason why I goes (go) against with the suggestion to make basic science course obligatory is that though all students were forced to take the basic science course,the ones majoring in social science, arts and humanilty, who are lack of outstanding mathmatic skills, still could not learn basic science well. Mathmatics and basic science tightly connect with each other. Seldomly (seldom) can a student who fails in a mathmatic test get high score in basic science course. To students who specified in arts, learning these courses is so defficult that they even are not able to understand the basic mathmatic formula used in the basic science theory. In contrary, if they spent the time on composition, they would have made a euphonic music already. In additon, fairness may be jeopardised when the students from different majors are forced to study in the same course and take the identical test, becase their mathmatic ablility are in different level.

It is needless and useless to set the basic science course as obligatory course. The university should be a place where everyone is able to find their own interests, unique blinking points and develop the ablility(ability) to maximum to be an expert in one or two field, meeting the requirements(requirements) of specilized (specialized)job market.

楼主应当注意一下拼写错误，还有句式略显杂糅，导致意思表达的不是很明确。虽然长句子可以体现作文水平，但要注意逻辑，尽量把文章写得清晰一些，无论是观点还是论证。整体把握可以，楼主继续加油！

njuslsUID: 2757819

Travelling has become one of the most prevailing ways of entertainment, as well as experiencing, even learning. I  opposite the idea that people benefit more from travelling in their own country than travelling in a foreign country. As far as I am concern, The quality of a travel, wheather you can benefit from the trip, does not depend on the place you are going to visit. It is commonly accepted that wheather it is an beneficial trip means wheather the traveler have released his/her stress, furthermore, gained knowledge from this travelling, ranging from historical, cultural understanding to the spiritual awareness.

Travelling abroad, appreciating distinctive food and landscapes,  and experiencing an exotic culture, surely will bring people great entertainment and knowledge. For instance, being attracted by the mysterious Great wall, the traveller cannot help himself/herself to search for more information about the legend behind this elegant building, which not only help to release the stress by immersing the traveller with the moving story and stunning construction, but also gives a deeper understanding of chinese culture. Meanwhile, a trip in native soil also can be a process of relaxing and learning. Exhausted people in big cities drive to the countryside to enjoy a panic with family, getting away from the crowed traffic and troublesome job, which can also be a wise way to relax. Going to a place famous for its historical relics surly will enrish your understanding of your own cultivation, even the place is only few miles away from your city. Both travelling can benefit the visitors.

No matter where you are going to travel, remember one tip to have an beneficial trip: devote your heart into this travelling without worrying about reality!If a person is full of sorrow and upset about his failure, even visiting the gorgeous Grand canyon or exposed to the endless ocean, to him, is meaningless, because in his eyes, the sea or the cliff is identical--only the place to suicide, and he is not in the mood of appreciating the beauty of nature, obsessing in his own tragedy. It is the extent you immerse in this travelling that effects the benefit you can obtain from it. The more you feel and experience with you heart, the more you will benefit from this trip.

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sorry for late reply

芒果yayaUID: 2759930

9月30号
证明力度不够 说旅行的目的地不重要 重要的是... 可是题目的重点在于aboard or domestically
可能是你的观点不太好写 因为没有反对同意的事来的鲜明啊

njuslsUID: 2757819

10.2号 作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Spending time alone is the best way to relieve stress
错词：occasionally， trapped， conquer
More than two thirds of interviewees, according to one survey conducted by a social study institution, feel stressful, among which more than half of these people choose to spending alone to relieve their stress. It seems plausible that staying all by oneself is the best way to relax, however, as far as I concerned, being with family or friends can be a better way to reduce stress.

Obviously, spending time alone, like having a couple of coffee, watering a comedy movie, or even sleeping, is a good way to relieve stress. But to some people who trapped by their job cannot help themselves to keep thinking about their troublesome from work are not able to have a easy time by their own, in this situation, spending time with family or friends will become a better choice.

Talking with others, including your relatives or friends, surely is a positive way to relieve stress. In this way, not only pressure can be reduced by enjoying the happiness with surroundings, but also some problem causing your stress can be solved by taking some advices. For example, once my aunt could not fall into sleep at night, which brought her tremendous stress, occasionally, my aunt talked with one of her friend who also had the identical sleeping problem. Her friend gave her some advice like drinking some hot milk before sleeping, reading a few pages of book in field she were not interested in and so on, therefore, my aunt's problem was solved by talking with others.

Additionally, the support from others can help people conquer stress more easier. It is rarely deniable that the happiness of our famliy is the most crucial reason for our struggling in this society—to work hard, earning more money. After one year hard work, during the trip abroad with family, seeing the smile on parents' face when having delicious food makes you think that all your payment is worthy, which is the motivation for harder work in the future. Futhermore, some comfort from the friends relieve your stress, too. Two old friends talk about their recent life over dinner, sharing their happiness and sorrow, which makes you have the feeling that no matter what is going to happen, there is always be one person who will support you without any requirement.

In conclusion, spending time with friends or family is a more positive and easier way to relieve stress than being alone.

樾悦UID: 2689181

改好了

njuslsUID: 2757819

10月5号文章
望狠批！！


It has been said that, according to a survey conducted by the World Health Organization, more than half people are suffering from some unhealthy eating habits, like eating too fast, eating irregularly, and over-eating. This serious number lead us to think deeper about the reason causing unhealthy eating habits.

Surely, advertising, which inspires us to buy more junk food, ranging from fried chicken to potato chips which looks tremendous appealing in the advertisments, is one of the factors leading to the unhealthy eating habits. However, it seems too perfunctory to set advertising as the most important cause of unhealthy habits.

As far as I concerned, the fast-paced living pattern of modern people is the most important cause of unhealty eating habits. Nowadays, living conditions or the social statues are considered as the most important feather of happiness. people pay more attention to increase their salary than to prepare a nutritional dinner to achieve healthy body. It is a common example we can see in this society that the employees are struggling to modify project reports without awearing of having dinner, finshing eating the food as soon as possible to get back to work earlier, and rushing to work at morning without breakfast. Meanwhile, there still are the others
who are burdened with considerable stress cannot find a way to relieve the pressure but to eat
excessive sugar and chocolate to cheer themselves up, which gradually lead to unhealthy eating habits. Furthermore, in order to save more time for career or entertainments, people prefer buying some fast food which is convenient but contain highly excessive fat and calories, to consuming fresh vegetables and spending an hour to make a dinner for themselves. This fast-paced living pattern makes people consider that improving the living condition is more important than maintaining health and convenience overweights nutrition.

Of course, there are still some other reasons causing the unhealthy eating habits, for instance, lack of cooking skill for the youth, the popularity of having diet and so on, advertising is just one of these aspects. If we dig these reasons deeper, we can find out the dominant factor causing unhealthy eating habits is the fast-paced living pattern of modern people, which not only effect the concrete life style of people, but also the minds and attitudes towards eating and health.

  

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1005作文批改
It has been said that, according to a survey conducted by the World Health Organization, more than half people are suffering from some unhealthy eating habits, [like举例用such as] eating too fast, eating irregularly, and over-eating. This serious number lead us to think deeper about the reason causing unhealthy eating habits.

Surely, advertising, which inspires us to buy more junk food, ranging from fried chicken to potato chips which looks tremendous appealing in the advertisments, is one of the factors leading to the unhealthy eating habits.【这句子太长了。。】 However, it seems too perfunctory to set advertising as the most important cause of unhealthy habits.

As far as I concerned, the fast-paced living pattern of modern people is the most important cause of unhealty eating habits. Nowadays, living conditions or the social statues are considered as the most important feather？？ of happiness. people pay more attention to increase their salary than to prepare a nutritional dinner to achieve healthy body. It is a common example we can see in this society that the employees are struggling to modify project reports without a
wearing of having dinner, finshing eating the food as soon as possible to get back to work earlier, and rushing to work at morning without breakfast.

Meanwhile, there still are the others who are burdened with considerable stress cannot find a way to relieve the pressure but to eat
excessive sugar and chocolate to cheer themselves up, which gradually lead to unhealthy eating habits. Furthermore, in order to save more time for career or entertainments, people prefer buying some fast food which is convenient but contain highly excessive fat and calories, 不能有逗号to consuming fresh vegetables and spending an hour to make a dinner for themselves. This fast-paced living pattern makes people consider that improving the living condition is more important than maintaining health and convenience overweights nutrition.

Of course, there are still some other reasons causing the unhealthy eating habits, for instance, lack of cooking skill for the youth, the popularity of having diet and so on, advertising is just one of these aspects. If we dig these reasons deeper, we can find out the dominant factor causing unhealthy eating habits is the fast-paced living pattern of modern people, which not only 【effect 应该加S】the concrete life style of people, but also the minds and attitudes towards eating and health.

句子太长，建议三短一长，变换句式而不是不断地定语从句。

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9月30日修改
抱歉,晚了

Travelling has become one of the most prevailing ways of entertainment, as well as experiencing, even learning. I  opposite (Oppose, Opposite好像是形容词吧)the idea that people benefit more from travelling in their own country than travelling in a foreign country. As far as I am concern(concerned), The quality of a travel, wheather (Whether)you can benefit from the trip, does not depend on the place you are going to visit. It is commonly accepted that wheather it is an beneficial trip means wheather the traveler have released his/her stress, furthermore(Furthermore应该是另起一句,要么是个分号要么前面是个句号,所以这里应该不用furthermore), gained knowledge from this travelling, ranging from historical, cultural understanding to the spiritual awareness.(最后一句说得太啰嗦,而且语句通,而且我觉得应该表明这是作者自己的意见,鲜明的表明:I think,否则这个it is commonly accepted,是别人的意见,不是作者的意见. From my point of view, whether it is a beneficial trips depends on whether people can release themselves and gain knowledge, ranging from historical and cultural understanding to the spiritual awareness).0 \% G0 C! [& ^- w% Z
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Travelling abroad, appreciating distinctive (sepecial) food and landscapes,  and (用了and 就不要用,了)experiencing an exotic culture, surely will bring people great entertainment and knowledge. For instance, being attracted by the mysterious Great wall, the traveller cannot help himself/herself to search for more information about the legend behind this elegant building, which not only help to release the stress by immersing the traveller with the moving story and stunning construction, but also gives a deeper understanding of chinese culture. Meanwhile, a trip in native soil also can be a process of relaxing and learning. Exhausted people in big cities drive to the countryside to enjoy a panic with family, getting away from the crowed traffic and troublesome job, which can also be a wise way to relax. Going to a place famous for its historical relics surly will enrish your understanding of your own cultivation, even the place is only few miles away from your city. Both travelling can benefit the visitors.(论述中没有体现比较,建议比较下,虽然作者想说两者都能学到很多,但是呢不能不比较任何东西的.总得比较一下吧) " L6 Z2 d, {4 u1 n/ G()

No matter where you are going to travel, remember one tip to have an beneficial trip: devote your heart into(to) this travelling without worrying about reality! If a person is full of sorrow and upset about his failure, even visiting the gorgeous Grand canyon or exposed to the endless ocean, to him, is meaningless, because in his eyes, the sea or the cliff is identical--only the place to suicide, and he is not in the mood of appreciating the beauty of nature, obsessing in his own tragedy. It is the extent you immerse in this travelling that effects the benefit you can obtain from it. The more you feel and experience with you heart, the more you will benefit from this trip.

文章段数太少,而且有点离题,本文是让作者比较一下双方的优劣,而不能写两者都好.呵呵.缺乏了比较是离题的,拿不到高分的.
文章可能是作者在指定时间内写的,不太完美,建议作者一开始不要限定时间,先自由地写.
文章开头结尾太长,论述显得更少了.不好
建议作者先修改了错别字再贴吧.
一定要比较两个观点!否则就是离题了.

njuslsUID: 2757819

10月7号
When it comes to definition about success, some people will consider achieving their goal as their final aim, while the others take the optimism even when they fail as the considerable success of their life. As far as I am concerned, to remain happy and optimistic is more important than achieving success.

At first, optimism is more important for us when considering the process of achieving success. Seldom can people achieve their goal the first time they try to fight for their success. As taking the common anecdote as an example, Thomas Adison, the inventor, he experienced millions of failures on his way of inventing the electric lamp. Never could he acquire his success without his optimism defeated frustration he suffered from this process. One the other hand, nowadays many people are beated by their upset about failure which leads to many mental disease, even suicide, losing their opportunity of succeeding forever.

Furthermore, remaining happy and optimistic plays a more important role in achieve the ultimate goal of one's life. Contrary to the widely hold opinion that ultimate aim is possessing power or enormous fortune, to me, happiness is the final bonanza one should cherish. Not matter being a truck driver, or a doctor, whether you are chuffed or not determine your quality of life. According to a survey conducted by socialist, the emotional intelligence, such as optimism, is the key factor affacting one's happiness. As one story says, there is one rish merchant who thinks that he is the most miserable person in the world, eagering to find out the prescribe to happiness, and he asks a delightful car driver what is his secret for delightfulness, the driver tell him that seeing the bright side of his life is his method to happiness when suffering difficulties.

Needless to say that success is vital to people as well, ranging from geting a high score in the examination to getting the Nobel prize. To us, achieving success, geting reputation, or accumulating considerable fortune, is one way to demonstrate our social values. Comparing with external affirmation, internal prise is more precious for us, which is not just feel satisfactory about ourself after succeeding, but also believe in ourself in failures that is being optimistic.

If we consider optimism in a different perspective, it is also, to some degree, one way of  success---conquring our frustration caused by failures. Always seeing the bright side and believing in ourselves can bring us success in the end.