求批改！实在不知怎么提高写作啊！拜托了！！！

FalynaUID: 2896101

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits.



As the development of food, there are more and more kinds of food at present. But some of them are unhealthy. Some people think that it was caused by the advertising. In my opinion, advertising is one of the reasons but not the main one.

First of all, a person’s eating habits is affected by his or her living environment and life style. To have a healthier and better meal, we need to spend much spare time to prepare. However, it is obviously impossible in this society at present. Because in many people’s opinion, it’s much better to use the same time on earning money than preparing for food. This is caused by the social pressure and competition. Thus, the kind of efficiency food such as KFC is their best way to save their time. Worse more, not only preparation needs time but also the skill learning needs it. In contrast, junk food doesn’t need it. That’s why some people prefer junk food instead of healthy food.

In another hand, the cultural and traditional ideas have changed through the young generation. It’s more important to have a nice taste meal than to have a healthy one. For example, there was a survey made by the Children’s hospital proved that 95% of the youth like fast food best instead of many kinds of traditional and healthy food. That’s because the food tastes in fast food restaurant are more attractive to the kids and youths. Undoubtedly, it may shape the youths’ eating habits after eating these foods for a period.

Thirdly, it’s well known that junk food costs less money than healthy food. The example of my sister may support my opinion. There are many things she wants to purchase (e.g. handbags, purses, shoes, clothes, etc.) which may cost her a huge amount of money. So she needs to spend less on other aspects in order to have enough money. On her way, she chooses spending less on food. Therefore, junk food is her best and most efficient way for her because the price of it only costs her 20 Yuan per meal instead of that for 30 Yuan for healthy food.

In conclusion, there are many reasons may cause the unhealthy eating habits. As I confirmed, having less time, the changes of cultural and traditional ideas as well as the prices of food are the main reason for this.

FalynaUID: 2896101

没有人来帮帮我吗。。。拜托了。。。:dizzy:

xiewuUID: 2546363

In my opinion, you mentioned too much about money both on the first and the last paragraph, actually,  sometimes it won’t cost a lot to buy healthy food.
哈哈，装一下逼，54我吧~~
我也不是专家，但主要楼主能在考场上30分钟写出这样的文章啊。。。。

FalynaUID: 2896101

3# xiewu 难道我这篇算可以的么。。。我9.12写作才21啊。。。10.23就要考了，不知道怎么提高啊T-T