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caichongbaobaoUID：136935

106"All students should be required to take at least one course in ethics, even if taking the course means a decreased emphasis on academic subjects."
The speaker contends all students should be required to take at least one ethics course, and I tend to agree, since ethic is an essential part in human race. However, these classes should not be learned at a cost of decreased emphasis on academic subjects. Both kinds of courses are necessary to cultivate people useful to the development of society.(60)
  
The courses in ethics should be one of the required because of the content, the function and the situation that need it. Ethics, defined as the study of standards of conducts and moral judgement, make students tell kindness from meanness. Moreover, it is more effective to restrain one’s action than laws. While the latter can maintain safety superficially by warning of punishment for doing wrong, the former is a standard in one’s heart: people will hardly do anything they regard disgraceful, for the prison in heart is more severe than the one in reality. In addition, high technology and decline in moral aspect calls for the courses badly. The more academic knowledge we get, the more demand for ethics: while the high technology used to improve people’s living can bring convenience and comfort, the same stuff used for wars and terrorism causes damages, catastrophes and even the destroy of human beings. For example, gunpowder can be used in the fireworks that entertain people, for national defense that protect people’s life and property also for invasion that brings misery. Nowadays, youngsters find fun without considering moral rules, and some of them attain goals through unjustified means. These phenomena also demand the class of ethics, they are to taught that healthy minds and moral behavior are the major differences which part men from animals.(222)

  The academic subjects are important, too. We cannot sacrifice it to assure the study of moral standards. First, one without academic knowledge does little to the society in this period demanding it, since more and more manual labor is done by machine. Although one may be kind and warm-hearted, he cannot find a satisfactory job and even has difficulty in making a living. Thus it is another tragedy we must avoid. Second, learning some academic may help students get a better understanding of ethics. Take history for example. When we Chinese learned the life in the old society, we will cherish today’s democracy and fair. Third, academic knowledge provides proper methods to do charitable deeds according to ethics. If a person is getting electric shock, the kind without physics common sense, probably lose their lives as well when they try to pull the person away from the wire. But the one knowing that can save others without hurting himself/herself.(159)

In sum, both moral standards and academic knowledge are essential for the formation of useful people. The former plays a role of a guide that keeps students from doing wrong, and the latter is assurance for earning money and doing contribution to the society. It is school’s responsibility to emphasize both of them, and ignorance of either of them is not wise.(503)

caichongbaobaoUID：136935

怎么没有人帮我改呢55

feier521UID：109747

However, these classes should not be learned at a cost of decreased emphasis on academic subjects. Both kinds of courses are necessary to cultivate people useful to the development of society.我觉第一段的第二句话和第三句话之间衔接不好：道德课不应该上，如果代价是削弱了学术课。―― 两种课程都是必要的。
其他部分我觉得都写的挺好的。第二段，从道德的定义，科技时代和青少年的现状，来阐述道德课的必要性；三段，从就业、理解道德、提供做事的合理方法三个方面阐述学术课的必要性。

这种题材我觉的不好写。
向宝宝学习！：D

ken0405UID：124994

106"All students should be required to take at least one course in ethics, even if taking the course means a decreased emphasis on academic subjects."
你没有catch the complexity of the issue. You should think more deeply about the words “At least” and “all”

The speaker contends all students should be required to take at least one ethics course, and I tend to agree, since ethic is an essential part in human race. However, these classes should not be learned at a cost of decreased emphasis on academic subjects. Both kinds of courses are necessary to cultivate people useful to the development of society.(60) （说需要ethic和academic subjects）

The courses in ethics should be one of the required because of the content, the function and the situation that need it.（？？？？，你要表达什么？最好具体一点，为什么需要ethics，哦说的是时代条件需要它） Ethics, defined as the study of standards of conducts and moral judgement（judgment）, make students tell kindness from meannes。递进？？没有这个逻辑？？？ Moreover, it（不要用it，用ethics） is more effective to restrain one’s action than laws. While the latter can maintain safety superficially by warning of punishment for doing wrong, the former is a standard in one’s heart: people will hardly do anything they regard disgraceful, for the prison in heart is more severe than the one in reality.（这个不错） In addition,（在说现在由于decline in moral而需要它） high technology and decline in moral aspect calls for the courses badly. The more academic knowledge we get, the more demand for ethics: while the high technology used to improve people’s living can bring convenience and comfort, the same stuff used for wars and terrorism causes damages, catastrophes and even the destroy of human beings. For example, gunpowder can be used in the fireworks that entertain people, for national defense that protect people’s life and property also for invasion that brings misery.（我觉得用911terriorism好些，还有就是cloning） Nowadays, youngsters find fun without considering moral rules, and some of them attain goals through unjustified means. These phenomena also demand the class of ethics, they are to taught that healthy minds and moral behavior are the major differences which part men from animals.（最后这句话含义太大，需要进一步说明）(222)
这一段，我认为可以分开写，一说需要性，二说有用性。你的给人感觉东一下，西一下，很不好。

The academic subjects are important, too. We cannot sacrifice it to assure the study of moral standards.（再说academic的重要） First, one without academic knowledge does little to the society in this period demanding it, since more and more manual labor is done by machine. Although one may be kind and warm-hearted, he cannot find a satisfactory job and even has difficulty in making a living. Thus it is another tragedy we must avoid. Second, learning some academic may help students get a better understanding of ethics. Take history for example.（this example can not support your opinion） When we Chinese learned the life in the old society, we will cherish today’s democracy and fair.（第2条无法说明问题，没说清楚） Third, academic knowledge provides proper methods to do charitable deeds according to ethics. If a person is getting electric shock, the kind without physics common sense, probably lose their lives as well when they try to pull the person away from the wire. （how can the acdemic knowledge make it happen？But the one knowing that(what, please use the exact name) can save others without hurting himself/herself.(159) ( I think that you did not present your idea clearly and powerfully.我是你的话，我会说it is unwise to ignore the academic knowledge. first Without academic knowledge, individual can not survive in this real world, not to mention thriving. Second， With academic knowledge, human can make progressive strides forwards. It is the academic achievements that makes our lives better. For example, in medical field. finally, the academic knowledge and ethics are not mutually exclusive. The development of academy can dramatically accelerate the step, which the ethics marches. for instance, in the second world war, conquer the fascism. Hitler. Cloning brought a further comprehension of human nature to human

In sum, both moral standards and academic knowledge are essential for the formation of useful people(??????). The former plays a role of a guide that keeps students from doing wrong( 我觉的你的文章没有好好说明这一点), and the latter is assurance for earning money and doing contribution to the society. It is school’s responsibility to emphasize both of them, and ignorance of either of them is not wise.(503)

ken0405UID：124994

科学技术有利于ethics的好例子，no idea
the high-tech equippments employed in police 帮助 attack the crime.？？？
再有说需要ethics可以说
the threaten from the nuclear weapon.
and the pollution.

happyman2000UID：136936

The speaker contends all students should be required to take at least one ethics course, and I tend to agree,(我感觉后面再接点什么的读着才舒服！) since ethic is an essential part in human race. However, these classes should not be learned at a cost of decreased emphasis on academic subjects. Both kinds of courses are necessary to cultivate people useful to the development of society.(60) 开头不错，观点鲜明。不过审题有点问题！

The courses in ethics should be one of the required because of the content, the function and the situation that need it.（你要说的是ethics的contents and functions符合ｓｉｔｕａｔｉｏｎ的需要，是吗？） Ethics, defined as the study of standards of conducts and moral judgement, make students tell kindness from meanness. Moreover, it is more effective to（我觉得用ｉｎ更合适点！） restrain one’s action than laws. While the latter can maintain safety superficially by warning of punishment for doing wrong（ｂｙ　ｐｕｎｉｓｈｉｎｇ　ｔｈｅ　ｇｕｉｌｔｙ）, the former is a standard in one’s heart: people will hardly do anything they regard （ａｓ）disgraceful, for the prison in heart is more severe than the one in reality. In addition, high technology and decline in moral aspect calls for the courses badly. The more academic knowledge we get, the more demand for ethics: while the high technology（ used to improve people’s living，这和后面重复，可以取掉！） can bring convenience and comfort, the same stuff used for wars and terrorism causes damages, catastrophes and even the destroy（ｄｅｓｔｒｕｃｔｉｏｎ） of human beings.（改成这样如何！while the high technology ｉｓbringｉｎｇ　ｈｕｍａｎ convenience and comfort，the same stuff ｃａｎ　ａｌｓｏ　ｂｅ　used for wars and terrorism，causｉｎｇ damages, catastrophes and even ｄｅｓｔｒｕｃｔｉｏｎ of human beings.　） For example, gunpowder can be used in the fireworks that entertain（to entertain） people, for national defense that protect people’s life and property also for invasion that brings misery. Nowadays, youngsters find fun without considering moral rules, and some of them attain goals through unjustified means. These phenomena also demand the class of ethics, they are to taught that healthy minds and moral behavior are the major differences which part men from animals.(222)

The academic subjects are important, too. We cannot sacrifice it to assure the study of moral standards. First, one without academic knowledge does little to the society in this period demanding it, since more and more manual labor is done(replaced) by machine. Although one may be kind and warm-hearted, he (or she,不要歧视女同胞哟！) cannot find a satisfactory job and even has difficulty in making a living. Thus it is another tragedy we must avoid. Second, learning some academic may help students get a better understanding of ethics. Take history for example. When we Chinese learned the life in the old society, we will cherish today’s democracy and fair. Third, academic knowledge provides proper methods to do charitable deeds according to ethics. If a person is getting electric shock, the kind without physics(physical) common sense, probably lose their lives as well when they try to pull the person away from the wire. But the one knowing that can save others without hurting himself/herself.(159) 再仔细审审题，提干并没有说academic study不重要呀！

In sum, both moral standards and academic knowledge are essential for the formation of useful people. The former plays a role of a guide that keeps students from doing wrong, and the latter is assurance for earning money and doing contribution to the society. It is school’s responsibility to emphasize both of them, and ignorance of either of them is not wise.(503)结尾还可以！

我觉得你要想两方面都强调的话，你可以说：一，我赞成所有学生至少学一门道德课；二我反对过于强调道德课学习，甚至以损害专业学习为代价。在第二点中，不要过多论述专业学习的重要性，人家也没说他不重要，重点要谈道德学习的局限性。损害专业学习来学习道德课，收效不显著，得不偿失。