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"No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."

一个领域一开始的发展需要经验丰富的人来研究，这就需要别的领域的经验和知识
发展中也需要其他领域的知识经验作为基础
当发展到一定程度时，要靠其他领域来启发以有新的突破
所以……
In the junior time of a field of study, in the developing time of it, as well as
in the top-developed time of it, how does the study advance? Or how can it gain  its goal rapidly at one time? The question is not hard for us to answer---it only depend on the knowledge and experience which are from other field of study can the study develop well.

In the beginning of a study field, it all depend on other field. Since for the beginning, the thing may always goes as a baby that was born not a long time, therefore it do not have the ability of growing by itself. Although it has its own leg that can be uesd to walk, in addition it has its own arm that can be used to put on its clothes, for the lack of experience that how to use them and what's more it has no clothes in fact, the little baby still can not grow up. What it need is not only the basic things such as food and clothes, but the knowledge of how to use the food as well as live and develop in the world and the knowledge may often come from other person such as its mother. So does the study in a field. Frankly speaking the junior of a study goes in the same way of the baby. When it was firstly put forword and should grow as well as others, the information and experience from others unquestionnably paly an important role in this periond.

Furthermore, in the prosess of the study, the information from other field also plays an important role. No field of stuedy is single. There a number of examples can be used to explore this point of view and I here only take the physics science for example :) ,in lots of times, scientists need some maths tool to approve their theory, as a result, maths is unavoided in the study of physics and this may explan why scientists in physics always attach more importance to maths.

In addition, at the top-developed time, things are all developed well enough and can not achieve more from the image. The knowledge from other field can often give the scientists some inspiration which can break the limit of their own field and then help them obtain some unexpected results.

Finally, the above are all explan that just one field can not live and grow up, what we should do is to compromise all kind of knowledge from all parts of field together, only from this can the our science develop well.

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和范文比较了一下
好象不是一个档次的：（

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别灰心：）
我看就还不错哦：）
多写就好了

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我得观点恰好相反
1.在一个科学领域的发展初期，应该打好基础，形成自己的特点。越是早期，越容易收到别的领域的影响，如果一开始就引进别的领域的知识和经验，就会丧失掉自己的个性。
2。当一个领域发展到一定程度的时候，就需要借鉴别的领域的经验和知识，寻找新的突破创新。比如当今的科学界出现的学科交叉。这些学科都是又自己深厚的基础的，如果一起步就学科交叉，就不叫学科交叉，就叫学科吞并，弱肉强食了

我是这么想的，不对的地方继续讨论

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楼上的GG说的很有道理啊
觉得我的思路总是很窄打不开：（555555
而且这一篇用了很长时间呢
有一个小时：（

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一样一样，我现在也只会写中文，一用英文就·······嗨。。。。：＋）

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In the junior time（你想说初期吗？改成initial stage/begining/the early days好些） of a field of study, in the developing time of it, as well as
in the top-developed time of it, how does the study advance（怎么觉着你把状语放前面很别扭，放后面不好吗？）? Or how can it（it指代不明。人可以gain the goal，但是field of study就不恰当了。） gain its goal rapidly at one time（大多数成功不是可以一下子取得的，觉得你把gain it's goal改成“取得很大的进步”这样的说法会比较委婉一些）? The question is not hard for us to answer---it only depend（s） on the knowledge and experience which are from other field of study can the（the是定指，你前面有吗？改成one） study develop well.

In the beginning of a study field, it all depend（s这样的错误下次不再指出，自行更正） on other field. Since for the beginning, the thing may always goes as a baby that was born not a long time （ago）, therefore it do not have the ability of growing by itself（这句你自己读着不别扭吗？改成to raise itself）. Although it has its own leg that can be uesd to walk（that后面不要，直接改成for walking）, in addition it has its own arm（同上,——>for dressing） that can be used to put on its clothes, for the lack of experience that how to use them and what's more it has no clothes in fact, the little baby still can not grow up（这个短语是长大的意思，主要是生长发育，我觉得改成develop into a mature person好点）. What it need is not only the basic things such as food and clothes, but the knowledge of how to use the food as well as live and develop in the world and the knowledge may often come from other person such as its mother（我觉得用母子的例子不很恰当。学科与学科间是一个横向的平行关系，而你这样的比喻就成了纵向的了。后人当然要借鉴前人的经验）. So does the study in a field. Frankly speaking the junior of a study goes in the same way of the baby. When it was firstly put forword and should grow as well as others, the information and experience from others unquestionnably paly an important role in this periond（单词怎么拼的啊！）
你这段的意思是好的，用类比的方法来说明问题也是好的。但是，表达不清爽，而且类比不太恰当。.

Furthermore, in the prosess of the study, the information from other field also plays an important role. No field of stuedy is single. There a number of examples can be used to explore this point of view and I here（hereby） only take the physics science for example :) ,in lots of times, scientists need some maths tool to approve their theory, as a result, maths is unavoided in the study of physics and this may explan why scientists in physics always attach more importance to maths.
这段就一句话？这就算完了？没头没尾的。。。这段观点很好啊，谈到学科间的联系，为什么不展开呢！

In addition, at the top-developed time, things are all developed well enough and can not achieve more from the image. The knowledge from other field can often give the scientists some inspiration which can break the limit of their own field and then help them obtain some unexpected results.
这种就是没有论据和论证过程的结论，非常弱。

Finally, the above are all explan that just one field can not live and grow up, what we should do is to compromise all kind of knowledge from all parts of field together, only from this can the our science develop well.

1.单词误拼请你下次自己先检查了再发上来。否则别人给你看文章那么多错词很恼火。天气热了，体贴一下GG好不好？
2.你在语言清晰表达方面还存在一些问题。我不是说不好，但是都希望你能尽量提高，不是更好？
3.AW无它，就是写议论文。高考前议论文写过不少吧，就那样的。论据论点论证过程一个都不能少。

好MM，再加油吧！

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万分感谢GETRYYGG感动的说
看的很细心啊
我会改的：）

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倒数第二和第三段
怎么展开？

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我是这样想的：
倒数第二段：现在流行的趋势学科交叉啊，比如现在最热的人类基因组图谱，就是生物学和计算机结合的产物啊。
倒数第三段：这个更多了，比如，正是由于高质量的镜片打磨工艺（物理上的）的出现，使生物学有了向微观方向发展的可能（break the limit of their own field）,诞生了一门新的学科，微生物学。