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发表于 2011-3-9 14:36:07 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 ferrywinGTI 于 2011-3-24 22:01 编辑

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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is clear that more and more people enter into college, including students and workers. There are many reasons, including for career preparation, one new stage of life and learning more knowledge, and so on.
Among so many reasons, the career preparation may be at the first place on the list. Everyone needs a job to survive and make life meaningful in the society. But nowadays, it is full of competition. So early making good preparation for career is one course for students. It is the best way for common people to attend college to get knowledge and skills which is needed in actual job. Students also can have experiences by internships at positions in companies or factories. Good preparation in college can provide better job. Learning more knowledge should be at the second place. There are great developments in our world. There should be lots of knowledge for us to get. The college is the best place and chance. There are lots of resources to use and peers to communicate. Teachers can show us right way to study and tell us the outline of knowledge. We can use less energy and time to learn more. For example, there are many people who quit jobs to go back to college for study, because they lack enough materials and good tutors for their self-study. At present, college life is considered the most important stage for persons in modern world. Adolescents can enjoy the journey for several years. They can join in many activities with freedom and no pressure.
According to above discussion, college study as one essential stage of life provides the best environment to learn knowledge and can make better preparation for better career. Everyone should try hard to attend college.
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发表于 2011-3-10 23:10:22 |显示全部楼层
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Although teachers play a very important role in our learning, including good habits, knowledge and right thinking, parents are the best teachers in my opinion. There are many reasons listed below.
At first, parents are our closest persons. There are no obstacles between us from the beginning to grow up. We believe and admire them and can easily do what they tell us. They always make sacrifices for us without any hesitation. They train us with good habits, tell us their experiences and try their best to make us go on the right way.
The other one is that before we grow up, we spend the most time with parents. They teach us more. We watch them do lots of things, listen to their talk and mimic their behaviors. We learn more with no purpose in this way. For example, the first word “mama” or “dad” we learnt is from our parents. If the parents are cleaner, the children mostly have the same character. If the parents are happy ones, the children cannot always feel sad.
The last one is that parents are the most understood by us. We can easily accept what they say. We can learn more from their interests and experiences. For examples, there are many families having the same interests and have the save sports together. There are also many families in which children have the same jobs like their parents.
According to all above, we can conclude that parents are the first and best teacher in our life.
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发表于 2011-3-20 00:23:22 |显示全部楼层
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3.Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the development of society, many new things emerge to adapt the requirement of work and living. Some things are very good, such as computer, high-speed transports, advanced medical treatment. But some are bad. For example, food has become easier to prepare. Making food becomes one step to make stomach full. It seems to go back to original society.
Nowadays, every activity has been separated to several activities to make the origin one more suitable for the social development. Traditionally, there are lots procedures to make food, including purchasing, washing, cutting and cooking. But at present, only one of them is just left. People do not need to go to the market to choose the best materials, wash and cut according to their own preference. They just need to put the half-done materials to the pans.
The less participation in the whole procedure, the more harm hidden in the food. People do not know the plants or meats where they are from and whether they are fresh and safe. The nutrients are less than fresh ones. People cannot judge whether the food has been washed in the right way with right materials. Sometimes the food just goes through water. Sometimes the food is washed by poisonous materials. Sometimes the food is cutting by sick persons or dirty persons. The buyers may use the unqualified food to cook.
The interests of cooking go away. Cooking like organizing components. Interests are in each step and the whole cooking. After diet is determined, purchasing, washing, cutting and cooking then can be organized. How to judge good vegetables and meats is a good course. People learn and practice well. They can get the joy of accomplishment after each purchasing. Washing well also can give the joy. Cutting should be decided by how to cook. Small pieces are suitable for frying quickly; big stocks are suitable for boil for long time.
Anxiety increases without the help of relaxation of cooking. The stress of work and living is very strong in modern time. Cooking should be enjoyable and give relaxation. If people do cooking like work, they cannot get their minds and thoughts away and accumulate their stress and anxiety.
Food becoming easier to prepare brings potential harm, make less interesting and increase anxiety in the life of persons who take the easier foods as most important parts of their foods. It has not improved the living level, but makes life worse.
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发表于 2011-3-21 00:52:56 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 ferrywinGTI 于 2011-3-21 00:54 编辑

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4.It has been said, “Not every thing that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

Children always are told that reading more books can get more knowledge. But adults always are taught that more experiences can give more knowledge. The question that which source is more important of knowledge is debated among different persons. There are many details of both of them.
Books are important in people’s lives. Babies get lots of knowledge when parents read from books to them. Students learned more when school study by books under teachers’ guild. When growing up with stronger ability of self-study, books give more knowledge. Books are convenient for persons to learn. Getting knowledge from books is easy to achieve. Books can be got by bookshops or libraries or friends or internet, and so on. Knowledge can be got at any time, such as sitting in the bus, short break of work, leisure time, and so on. Various kinds of knowledge can be got by reading books. History books provide history knowledge. Geography books provide geography knowledge. Literature books provide literature knowledge. But books always tell the past and the other persons’ ideas, not is certainly fit to oneself.
Experiences are also important in people’s lives. Babies learn how to walk by them. Babies learn how to talk by them. Students learn how to make friends by them. When experiences are much enough, learning more from experiences is easier. Knowledge of experiences is always fit to the person who really goes through them. But there are some limitations to learn knowledge by experiences. It is not easy. Particular experience just can happen at particular time in particular environment. It cannot be repeated. By this way just can get limited kinds of knowledge.
Actually, knowledge contained in the books is the experiences of previous people. It is condensed and categorized to simple stories or principles for persons to understand and hold. Knowledge learned by books is learned by experiences. Both sources are important to humans. Books are more important for children. When others’ experiences are accumulated enough by books, personal experiences are more important for persons.
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发表于 2011-3-23 00:37:53 |显示全部楼层
5th Mar.22

5. A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

People are arguing that a company wants to build a large factory near our community which they live in for a long time. Some think it will bring many benefits to the community, but others think it will do more harm. The influences are very obvious.
A large factory can absorb a number of labors. Some are local, and some are nearby. Persons who live in the community or nearby do not need to go far away to find jobs. If they work in the factory, they can earn their lives and take care of their families. They do not make sacrifice if they do not work at far place. They can live happier. So the community will be more stable.
A large factory also can make contribution to local economy. More people making money here will consume some. The shops relating to eating, housing, entertainment, and so on will be more. More bosses and workers of them can earn money in the shops. Also local government can get more taxes from the running. The government uses the money to facilities for people buying from local companies. Another attribution to local economy is made.
But a large factory will change the composition of the community’s micro-culture. More workers from any other places with different costumes will live here. They will unintentionally break the local micro-culture with their own habits. But local people will try their best to maintain it unchanged. So sometimes this will cause conflicts.
And a large factory will bring traffic and pollution troubles to the community. More people, more traffics. This will make traffic jams more frequent. And this will generate more air pollutants and noise problems. Pollutants from the factory, such as waste water, air pollutants, solid wastes, will be problems for the local environment. This will have very bad influence on the health of people.
In summary, the advantages and disadvantages of a large factory built in our community exist at the same time. According to our community culture which is that we prefer clean air and water than lots of money. So I oppose the factory at the side of all.
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发表于 2011-3-24 21:55:30 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 ferrywinGTI 于 2011-3-24 22:08 编辑

2011年3月24日 周四
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Is it better to spend money on traveling than to save money for the future?
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     People always say that making preparation for the future is very important. And some insist on saving money for future with the purpose of being ready for something else unexpected. They also consider spending money on traveling not to be responsible for future. Although they have reasons, they ignore several important effects of traveling as follows.
     First, traveling will accumulate many experiences. Persons who are on journey will learn more views, cultures, ideas, and so on. They help travelers indirectly feel what they are. Different views will help them understand the earth. Different cultures will help travelers learn skills of how to communicate with people who hold different background. Different ideas will enrich travelers’ thoughts and open their mind. Darwin is an example that traveling help him develop Darwinism.
     On the other hand, traveling will make many friends. There are lots of strangers who will be encountered in the short or long journey. After talking or doing something together, some of them become friends. It is said that friends are the largest fortune. Friends will share some information, such as interests, resources, even happiness or sadness. Friends will help each other at some urgent moment. Friends are useful for now, also for the future.
     Last but not least, traveling will produce more creative fruits. Artists like to spend time on the long journey. They watch the sights, people and study life with the mood of relaxation and pleasure. Masterpieces always come out from the real life. The influence of travelling is also the same as to common people. Persons who are easy and happy will get much surprising results overcoming difficulties. This can enhance their confidence. Confidence will make more achievements. This is good for developments in the future.
     According to the discussion above, it is clear that money for traveling is the active way of make preparation for future. But saving money always waits something bad or uncertain to happen, and then this can make a remedy or do a favor. It is a passive way for preparation of future. Based on the analyses, it is believed that money for traveling rather than for saving is a better preparation for future.
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发表于 2011-3-25 22:54:29 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 ferrywinGTI 于 2011-3-25 22:55 编辑

2011年3月25日 周五:
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Do you agree with the following statement? Government should pay more attention on health care issues than on environment issues.
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     Nowadays, climate change has been the very hot topic all over the world. Its focus is environment change, which is the prominent factor of climate change, caused by human. There are lots of actual catastrophes happened in the real world one by one. Environment should be at the top of the issues list concerned by all the governments and people. It cares about our present and future.
     Polluted environment will lead to many health problems. At present, environment pollutions make the water, air and food worse. They are very necessary for people to live. Once people have these contaminated things in bodies, this is equivalent to eat or drink or breathe poisons. Persons will have serious health problems about all organs. Some will die of urgent diseases. Some will die of tortures from illness gradually. For example, patients with lung cancer are always exposed to dirty air, like factory waste gases, vehicle gases, smoke and so on. Our health problems would not decrease apparently, unless the environment becomes better by decreasing waste water and waste gases dramatically.
     Present environment problems will seriously affect the existence of our next generations, even us in the future. Once environment is damaged, more energy will be put into making a remedy, but some repair maybe even not take into effect. Polluted environment can lead to many genetic diseases. Some will happen on ourselves and pass on to our children by genes. They corrupt the whole human. Environment which humans depend on for very long time gradually lose balance by its own problems. For instance, the polluted air changes the whole air layer surrounded our planet chemically and mechanically. The total energy of sunshine, which is the main energy source, reserved in the air is changed. The balance among atmosphere, ocean and land is changed. The air flow patterns are gradually changed. Once this change becomes a trend on the high way, doing everything to make up is nothing. Our health and lives rely on the good environment.
     Above discussions give us powerful evidents of environment issues relating to our health and future. This shows to everyone on the earth that to protect our environment is not just at the first place of all governments’ cares but also our duty.
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发表于 2011-3-26 21:16:06 |显示全部楼层
2011年3月26日 周六:
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Do you agree with the following statement? The purpose of television should be all educative, not entertain.

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     Nowadays, most parents criticize the contents on TV are entertain, and they consider the purpose of television should be all educative and TV as a good tutor for children. But generally speaking, although TV has a very deep influences on audiences, it is not the only way of education and just one part of activities in people’s lives. People need not only study along with life, but also entertainment along.
     TV plays a very important role in people’s lives. After its invention, people totally live in a different world. It provides so much information. The amount of it is much more than before and the contents are about different areas, even about the opposite of earth. Persons learn lots by watching TV. TV also broadcasts fun. Persons after long time work can enjoy this by watching movie, listening songs and getting other programs. At present, TV is already one part of human lives.
     As what is said above, TV having many functions is not the main and key method of providing education. Education can be got in school or church, also by books of self-study. Learning knowledge in school is the best way of education. Persons can find friends with the same purpose and interest. They can help each other and share knowledge, then promote their study.
Persons need entertainment all the time and TV is one of them. Study, work and having entertainment compose the life. They form a life circle. Study makes preparation for better work. Work makes preparation for better living with more money. Entertainment is one way to use it. After enjoying entertainment, persons will have more energy to study and work. Once there is no entertainment, there is no purpose of study and work. For now, comparing with newspaper and talking, TV transports most entertainment in the most convenient way.
     According to the discussion above, TV plays an important part in modern life with powerful influence. It is also the main source of entertainment. So it is very convinced that the purpose of television should be educative and entertain. Some channels focus on education, and others focus on entertainment. Audiences have the rights to choose.
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发表于 2011-3-26 21:50:59 |显示全部楼层
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In the reading, there are three evidences for the teenager in the portrait for sale is Jane Austen, who is one of the most famous all English novelists. But according to the lecture, the conclusion is opposite, which argues that the girl in the protrait is not sure be Jane Austen. There are also three reasons listed to support.
First, the time is not right. In 1882, Austen's family gave permission to use the protrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. But Jane Austen died in 1817. So the speaker think that her family did not see her as teenager.
Second, the family of Austen is a very large one. Cassandra has many sisters as teenager. So it is not evidently proved that the one in the protrait resembles Austen is right.
Third, the time of the stamp on the back of the work tells us that it is sold by someone. Calculating the time, Austen should be older not teeage.
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In the reading, there are three evidences for the teenager in the portrait for sale is Jane Austen, who is one of the most famous all English novelists. But according to the lecture, the conclusion is opposite, which argues that the girl in the protrait is not sure be Jane Austen. There are also three reasons listed to support.
First, the time is not right. In 1882, Austen's family gave permission to use the protrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. But Jane Austen died in 1817(听错了). So the speaker think that her family did not see her as teenager.
Second, the family of Austen is a very large one. Cassandra has many sisters as teenager. So it is not evidently proved that the one in the protrait resembles Austen is right.
Third, the time of the stamp on the back of the work tells us that it is sold by someone. Calculating the time, Austen should be older not teeage.虽说你把所有点的关键处都讲到了,但毕竟综合有225的字数要求。
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发表于 2011-3-27 11:24:08 |显示全部楼层
改3.26独立。才疏学浅,见谅!

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发表于 2011-3-27 11:53:12 |显示全部楼层
其实只是大概听到了,很多细节还是没抓住。
综合字数不是要求150-225的吗?
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发表于 2011-3-27 23:14:45 |显示全部楼层
不好意思改晚了哈~~

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1月30号IBT要给力啊~~

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发表于 2011-3-28 10:10:42 |显示全部楼层
我这么说吧。我写的文章内容就是我听懂的全部内容+一点推理。所以其实我只能听懂60-70%左右。关键不是在把听到的所有细节都写在文章上,而是把你组织好的argument逻辑写出来。只要按照逻辑来反驳reading passage,你这篇文章听懂的这几点完全够写一篇integrate了。你要展示在文章的不是你听懂多少,而是逻辑!!
练完一篇后对比一下范文,形成自己的模板,就基本差不多了。我觉得你的听力和语言已经很不错了,需要加强的只是文章的组织。

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发表于 2011-3-28 19:53:24 |显示全部楼层
谢谢
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