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发表于 2011-3-11 22:26:25 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
厄,狠批再狠批哈~
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本帖最后由 cacovil 于 2011-3-12 09:24 编辑

厄,终于写完了,还是没够字数,第一次写,写的不好,请狠批。。。。谢谢


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Do you agree with the following statement? In order to be more financially responsible when we are adults, we should learn how to manage money at a young age.




In modern society, there is no doubt that financially management is closely related to on our life. Especially people used to invest in real estate, funds etc. So financially responsible has a great influence on our life. Children learn how to manage money do good to financially responsible when they grow up.
The use of credit card is getting more and more popular. Some young adults who don't have money concept constantly use credit cards. However, credit cards are easy to get and hard to pay off. They are often fall into a financially nightmare without good handle of their money. If young children get into the habit of money management, these things cannot be happen. In china, for example, children often have lucky money which given to children as a lunar New Year gift. Parents generally take away the lucky money. If parents can bank the money or teach the children for the funds, the children would have a sense of finance.
In addition, Increasing recognize of money, young people understand the essence of money. If parents don't let a child presses of the money, the child will not desire of money. When the child matured, she or he would not go on a criminal path. And there still have more important to focus on, like family love, friendship etc. On no account parents shouldn't give children too much cash disposable, it will lead to children acquires wasteful habit and cause aborninable affect. So the money should be required to buy necessities.

So, as I see it, it pays to manage money in young age. Due to financially management, children cannot waste money and can reduce the probability of crime. And parents should not offer much money to children.

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发表于 2011-3-12 21:05:45 |只看该作者
3.12  TPO 19 综合写作


The lecture apparently refutes the points illustrated in the reading passage. According to the professor, he thought buzzing has a good expression of consumers, the reading contents an opposite stand that buzzing has a lot of dispute and many critics would like to ban it.

The first point the reading passages express that it has incorrect information about buzzed product. And the professor uses to cast doubt on reading is that formation of buzzing convey accuracy information to consumers. Because buzzer are not faker who cheat consumers that products have fake praise. The company actually hire the people who was used the product truthful and who genuine think the product is good for recommendation. So buzzer can provide correct information about articles.

Another evidence the speaker adopts to contradict the passage is that buzzing is benefit to customers. However, the reading states that it suits the manufactures, but it could really harm consumers. But consumers always have a lot of questions about price, services and how long buzzers use the product. If the buzzer cannot answer these questions, they will don't paid.

The last point the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading is that consumers who believe buzzing will be more trustful and open to people, which differs from the statement in the reading that buzzing lead to harmful effect on social relationships. However, buzzing is not a hidden agenda, they recommend really good product. So consumers will trust them and have a good expectation of honesty.

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发表于 2011-3-13 09:03:20 |只看该作者
The lecture apparently refutes the points illustrated in the reading passage. According to the professor, he thought buzzing has a good expression of consumers(有点奇怪?顾客的好表达?impression 印象吧?), the reading contents an opposite stand that buzzing has a lot of dispute and many critics would like to ban it.
The first point the reading passages express that it has incorrect information about buzzed product(建议改成buzzed product has incorrect..那个it有点怪怪的) . And the professor uses to cast doubt on reading is that formation of buzzing convey accuracy information to consumers. Because buzzer are not faker who cheat consumers that products have fake praise. The company actually hire the people who was used the product truthful and who genuine(副词?) think the product is good for recommendation. So buzzer can provide correct information about articles. . M: b; V/ f  e- P
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Another evidence the speaker adopts to contradict the passage is that buzzing is benefit to customers. However, the reading states that it suits the manufactures, but it could really harm consumers. But consumers always have a lot of questions about price, services and how long buzzers use the product. If the buzzer cannot answer these questions, they will don't paid.(pay)( P& A2 c& M0 Q2 j$ d( L
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The last point the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading is that consumers who believe buzzing (buzzer)will be more trustful and open to people, which differs from the statement in the reading that buzzing lead to harmful effect on social relationships. However, buzzing is not a hidden agenda, they recommend really good product. So consumers will trust them and have a good expectation of honesty.

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The lecture apparently refutes the points illustrated in the reading passage. According to the professor, he thought buzzing has a good expression of consumers, the reading contents an opposite stand that buzzing has a lot of dispute and many critics would like to ban it.最好不要用professor是个 part-time buzzer)(; f  d7 E$ ~1 t) c; @# i
) E% A, B1 ?& V( q( R' GThe first point the reading passages express that it has incorrect information about buzzed product. And the professor uses to cast doubt on reading is that formation of buzzing convey accuracy information to consumers. Because buzzer are not faker who cheat consumers that products have fake praise. The company actually hire the people who was used 语法错误是HAS!![/color]the product truthful and who genuine think the product is good for recommendation. So buzzer can provide correct information about articles.
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Another evidence the speaker adopts to contradict the passage is that buzzing is benefit to customers. However, the reading states that it suits the manufactures, but it could really harm consumers. But consumers always have a lot of questions about price, services and how long buzzers use the product. If the buzzer cannot answer these questions, they will don't paid., c; S4 n# p/ }7 c7 {5 [3 [

) t' ~. d: y* P' VThe last point the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading is that consumers who believe buzzing will be more trustful and open to people, which differs from the statement in the reading that buzzing lead to harmful effect on social relationships. However, buzzing is not a hidden agenda, they recommend really good product. So consumers will trust them and have a good expectation of honesty.感觉句形上可以再多一些变化 加油了 第一次不错了

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发表于 2011-3-16 22:37:09 |只看该作者
独立写作 1.It is more important that a government should spend money on education of young children than on university?

Nothing is more important than to receive education and government spare no effort to improve the education, So government spend more money on education. Compare to invest on university, personally, I consider that government should use more money on education of young children. There are numerous reasons to explain that.

The first reason for me to choose on education of young children is solid foundation have a great influence to young children. The age in childhood is easy to absorb new knowledge, what knowledge the people provide, what knowledge the children received, and how much the knowledge the people offer, how much the children absorbed. For this reason, infrastructure of education to young children is more important than to the university.

Another evidence for government spend money on education of teenagers is young children are the future of the nation which concern the society development. It is said that children is the flowers of the nation. If flowers grow up healthful, It is conceivable that the future society will be prosperity. On the other hand, A child who was educated prominent, s/he will repay back to the community for it bring up.

Last but not lest, government should spend money not only for the soft facilities but also for hard facilities on education of young children. Soft facilities means good teachers and source of study. There is no doubt that it is the foundation of education. Hard facilities defined the books which used to provide knowledge and the education equipment like computers and projectors are also closely related to children’s achievement.

To summarize, young children are worth for government to invest money on than university. Due to the young age is the significant period to lay a foundation and have a great effect to the child’s future. Besides, young people also is the society’s foundation. If the government invest to children, it must be invest two aspects which is soft facilities and hard facilities. After these argument, It is not difficult to draw the conclusion that only choosing invest on education of young children is sensible.

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发表于 2011-3-17 19:49:20 |只看该作者
首先我先道歉,今天实在是电脑不给力,我到现在才登上网页,作文改迟了/(ㄒoㄒ)/~~/(ㄒoㄒ)/~~谢谢帮我改作文

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一起加油哦~~~

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