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这是第一篇作文 最经典的champion 社会活动还是教学的那片 帮忙改下 感激不尽




Champion sports and social activities or classes and libraries?

Have you ever seen a person who graduated from college is poor at every sport? Have you ever seen a young man who is lacking of the responsibility to the society? Have you ever seen a nerd who is always working hard but never take part in the social activities? If you have seen that, you may know the answer of the debate . Now, it is time we explore the truth that sports and social activities are as important as the classes and libraries.
The first reason can be obviously seen is that a healthy body is the basis of . For example, I have a very good friend who is intelligent and also very struggling, he once has worked for 3 whole day s without a rest .And what has happened? He has gone because of overworked all the time. I was shocked when I receive this massage and then i know a health body is wealth. So I consider that financial supports on sports are necessary.

Secondly, most people would agree that person we need is a person who is a man of value. So which person is a man of value? The answer is who has responsibility to the entire society. As Bill Gates, a really successful man , found a foundation to give a hand to most of the person who need ,Since we don’t have the power as him , a responsible man is all we need, so to champion the financial of social
activities is a wiser choice.

Then some people may neglect that classes and libraries have already been invested a lot , while the invest to sports and social activities lack always .Although classes and libraries are significant as well ,our attention should be focus on what lacks more.

In a word
, from what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

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好心人们。。。。