第一次计时写独立作文，麻烦各位大仙改一下~另有几个问题想请教~

sylvia_loveUID: 2459477

185的题目，计时30min写的。7.9考试，一直把重点放在口语和听力上，现在才来准备作文。:L 麻烦各位看一看改一改。any valuabe suggestion will be highly appreciated. Thank you.
另外，我有一个问题：我这篇作文是不是太casual了？因为之前考过G，所以不知道T的作文到底需要正式到什么程度？

148. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing games teaches us about life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Growing up in any part of the world, we learn our first lessons about the world through things seemingly trivial. It is hard to tell how much we have learnt from our childhood favourite games. However, if there is one thing we can tell about games, that is they prepare us for life.

The most important thing games have showed us about life is happiness. When we are playing games, either alone or with others, we gain pure happiness from the games themselves. Happiness roots from simple things: we do not need fancy cars, mansions, or designer clothes to be happy. What we need is, surprising to many grow-ups, the ability to appreciate little things in life, as we did when we were 5 years old playing with teddy bears or train models.

Games also teach us about trade-offs in life. While we all consider it axiomatic that we cannot have everything we want, it still bothers us a lot when we find ourselves in such situations. If I want to be rich, I have to study hard as a student, and be devoted to my work in the future, unless I am blessed to be a Gates. I first ran into such notion when I was 7 playing hide and seek with my cousin Ann. As my father used to tell me, and hereby I quote, "If you don't want her to find you, think hard and find a perfect place to hide."

In addition, I believe games are of high significance today when we are in the era of globalization in that they allow us to develop a sense of teamwork. A perfect example would be World of Warcraft, a popular online role-play game. Players need to form a team to play the game and battle with other teams. Each team member occupies specific function and supports each other through the game. Such experience without doubt provides players with self-identification as part of the team and enables them to understand the fact that higher achievements can be made with a team.

Life is complicated, and so complicated that we always try to help our progenies to get ready for it. I guess that may be one of the many reasons why our ancestors created games in the first place, and luckily, it really does work.

strhaoUID: 2993812

我也是7.9考的  写的不错呀 O(∩_∩)O~