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第11次习作 批改
本帖最后由 panmingming2008 于 2011-9-6 21:41 编辑
Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
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I totally disagree with the author's claim that government should fund only for those researches whose consequences are clear. In terms of the essence of research or the reason why should government have a clear picture of research, the argument is unreasonable and absurd. Although a few researches' results have brought some calamities to our human beings, it is just the problem in the way of using scientific technology, scientific research itself is innocent.
To begin with, taking the result of research is clear or not as a factor to determine if government should fund for is a terrible idea. [这个句子有些别扭. 几乎是汉语硬译过来. 要改写.]No one can prove that the investment to any research whose consequence is unclear has no value. We must notice that the essence of scientific research is such a process in which scientists use a logical and systematic way to search for new and unknown information on a particular topic. The invention of Penicillin is such an example that nobody includes Alexander Fleming himself knows what he will find by his experimen
t on bacteriology, not to mention, no one can predict that the result of this research is such a great one, which almost change the whole world and let millions of people away from death. As scientists are search in an undiscovered field, we have no reason to ask them tell us what they will find in the end.
Second, maybe the reason why the author suggests that government should not fund for unclear research is he/she holds the view that investing in some researches which turn to a failure is a waste of money. [句子要从简单造起. 不怕短小, 就怕又长又不清楚.]However, no matter what an experiment's result is, success or failure, it still has value to let government invests in it. For instance, the contrivance of airplane has experienced countless failures until the Wright brothers successfully made the first propeller plane. Although there are so many unsuccessful experiments before the Wright brothers, the huge amount of money government has invested in these failed researches is still desirable, because all these failures do lead to the final success. ( Wright bros的技术发明与美国政府资助与否有关系吗? 例子要与论点有关.)
Finally, it is true that government will fund for some researches whose consequence may cause a calamity to the public without inspecting the research in advance. However, a kind of supervision system can be set up instead of simply holding such recommendation. Government can let someone to supervise and estimate the process of the research they funding for, and through this way, we can successfully avoid the calamity brought by scientific research. Besides, most of calamities made by science are not because the research is harmful to us, but the methods we use might make these disasters happen. If we can use the result of scientific research in some right ways, our society will benefit from it a lot and those unpleasant things will not come true.
In sum up, recommendation made by the author is somewhat irrational; if the government adopt such advice, it is possible that no new discovery will be made. So that, we shouldn’t choose which research to be invested in just by if the research’s consequence is clear or not.
句子要从简短造起.
为文要点是清楚明白. 如果grammar不熟练, 要先从短句写起. 然后对自己不熟悉的语法要点专攻一下, 掌握了一点再学另外的一点. [不是为语法而语法, 而是为把想法表达清楚]
如果你的句子写得清楚, 分数会上来-- 起码不会因为句意不明白而掉到3分以下.
然后再在其他审题\例子方面下些工夫. 例子要与论点相关, 而不是仅仅塞一个例子进来, 与要论证的论点没有直接联系.
想像你跟朋友对话, 这样的例子说明某个道理, 朋友会听得懂吗, 对方会信服吗? |
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