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gambellUID: 122696

49"Imaginative works such as novels, plays, films, fairy tales, and legends present a more accurate and meaningful picture of human experience than do factual accounts. Because the creators of fiction shape and focus reality rather than report on it literally, their creations have a more lasting significance."

第一次超过600words,用了1hour,自己小改了一下

Imaginative works such as novels, plays, films, fairy tales, and legends bring people amounts of fascinating stories including some are based on the true matters. Not only for the pretty use of words and copious scenes of imagination, but also due to the deeply meaningful thoughts, great literal works attract people deeply and give them a even more impression than rigid historic report. However, the literal characters also decide that they can not embody the facts and human experiences as accurate as factual works do.

Admittedly, many great novels, plays, films, fairy tales, and legends have influenced people by generations since most of them teach people some valuable knowledge of life or in some other important fields to human. By absorbing those cherished spiritual possessions, people's behavior and thinking mode would have a change more or less and therefore, waves of the trends have been spread to the whole society and passed down from one generation to another. Some treasures in literal realm can be taken for instance, some of which even created the base of the form of modern societies. First, Bible, the most catholic scripture in western world, has been molding people's actions for thousands of years even some of today. From the gripping ancient stories with valuable gospels that claim the noble aspects of human nature such as love, kindness and forgive, many people get their spiritual beams and find goals of living. Another great work in human culture, Wars and Peace, also make people think deeper about the war by its anxiety about people's future.

However, valuable thoughts and more lasting significance could not mean the more accurate content of human experiences and facts. Since holding an aim to attract readers or audience and a goal of illustrate a meaning more impressionable, author of literal works usually garble the true events or even make up a non-existed one to distort what the truth should be in the history or in common life. And, reverie and vision as necessary elements of literature would surely reduce fiction of accuracy. By the matter, if one who wants to get a exact description went to read these kind of reading or seeing similar sorts of displays may get a totally false concept about what he/her needs. On the contrary, historic researchers make the report of history in an accurate even rigid way to preserve the integrity and correctness of history. For their aim is to recover every detail in a incident happened hundreds or thousands year ago, no need and no allowance is laid down to write the facts with subjective points of view and therefore, factual works surely embody the meaning pictures of human experience much more exactly. Nowadays many films produced in Holly Wood concentrate on important historical affairs, but most of them are in the way to be described as so-called epics in which crucial events are always carried by the ones. Which is only a fabricated saga.

Moreover, with the emphasis put to literal influences, effects of factual accounts should not be neglected either. Analyzing both success and failure in history noted in factual accounts such historic report can help people make sage decisions when facing important situation since history is always a circle in the world that too much similarities can be found between previous age and present one. Francis Bacon, British philosopher once said. "History makes man wise."

Literal works and factual accounts have their own superiority, and how to use them depends on people's final goals. With great former ones, one can learn insightful opinions and thoughts of the author through interesting stories, while with the latter ones, experiences would be drawn out to benefit present deciders.
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1.承认文学巨作会给后人带来深远影响。
2。指出文学作品在客观性上的不足及时是报告的客观性。
3。进一步提出客观报告特别是历史报告的影响也很重要。

gambellUID: 122696

顶一顶，别掉了

blake_wangUID: 9871

1, your reasoning is too complicated to be clarity,or rather verbose to some extent.

ken0405UID: 124994

49"Imaginative works such as novels, plays, films, fairy tales, and legends present a more accurate and meaningful picture of human experience than do factual accounts. Because the creators of fiction shape and focus reality rather than report on it literally, their creations have a more lasting significance."

第一次超过600words,用了1hour,自己小改了一下
你的中文逻辑挺清楚的哟。分类讨论的类型。

Imaginative works such as novels, plays, films, fairy tales, and legends bring people amounts of fascinating stories including some are based on the true matters. Not only for the pretty（有这样用的吗？） use of words and copious scenes of imagination, but also due to the deeply meaningful thoughts, great literal works attract people deeply and give them a even more impression than rigid historic report. However, the literal characters also decide that they can not embody the facts and human experiences as accurate as factual works do.（however后面应该是你的主题）

Admittedly, many great novels, plays, films, fairy tales, and legends have influenced people by generations（？） since most of them teach people some valuable knowledge of life or in some other important fields to human. By absorbing those cherished spiritual possessions, people's behavior and thinking mode would have a change more or less（，） and therefore, waves of the trends have been spread to the whole society and passed down from one generation to another. Some treasures in literal realm can be taken for instance, some of which even created the base of the form of modern societies. First, Bible, the most catholic scripture in western world, has been molding people's actions for thousands of years even some of today. From the gripping ancient stories with valuable gospels that claim the noble aspects of human nature such as love, kindness and forgive, many people get their spiritual beams and find goals of living. Another great work in human culture, Wars and Peace, also make people think deeper about the war by its anxiety about people's future. （好，但是分析的太捞了，个人意见）还有，个人意见，complexity of issue在于imaginative的，为什么他会比bare figure 和facts更好呢？？

However, valuable thoughts and more lasting significance could not mean the more accurate content of human experiences and facts. （好，清楚）Since holding an aim to attract readers or audience and a goal of illustrate a meaning more impressionable, author of literal works usually garble the true events or even make up a non-existed one to distort what the truth should be in the history or in common life. And, reverie and vision as necessary elements of literature would surely reduce fiction of accuracy. By the matter, if one who wants to get a exact description went to read these kind of reading or seeing similar sorts of displays may get a totally false concept about what he/her needs.（好，可是有没有例子支持呢？） On the contrary, historic researchers make the report of history in an accurate even rigid way to preserve the integrity and correctness of history. For their aim is to recover every detail in a incident happened hundreds or thousands year ago, no need and no allowance is laid down to write the facts with subjective points of view and therefore, factual works surely embody the meaning pictures of human experience much more exactly. Nowadays many films produced in Holly Wood concentrate on important historical affairs, but most of them are in the way to be described as so-called epics in which crucial events are always carried by the ones. Which is only a fabricated saga.（好，具体哪个电影/titanic？可以）

Moreover, with the emphasis put to literal influences, effects of factual accounts should not be neglected either. Analyzing both success and failure in history noted in factual accounts such historic report can help people make sage decisions when facing important situation since history is always a circle in the world that too much similarities can be found between previous age and present one. Francis Bacon, British philosopher once said. "History makes man wise."（呵呵，这段应该是上段的延伸才好，看看怎么说更好？你的进一步，不够充分，是不是？）

Literal works and factual accounts have their own superiority, and how to use them depends on people's final goals. With great former ones, one can learn insightful opinions and thoughts of the author through interesting stories, while with the latter ones, experiences would be drawn out to benefit present deciders.
(603words)

1.承认文学巨作会给后人带来深远影响。
2。指出文学作品在客观性上的不足及时是报告的客观性。
3。进一步提出客观报告特别是历史报告的影响也很重要。
如果你马上要考试，建议用45分钟写，因为可以看出你的逻辑满清楚的哟。好好加油！就是后面的不充分，因为那才是你的观点的，应该也是重点的

gambellUID: 122696

谢谢两位的修改
1。看来水平还不够，字数上去了，内容确冗长了。
2。pretty 好像有些别扭，用skilled如何
3。对于你第二段后面的那句话，我这一段的内容在于论述文学类作品由于用生动的内容和优美的词藻作为传达思想的手段，能够是更为广泛的人接受，从而作出深远的影响，这一点比factual accounts要好，其实现在才发现重点在于广泛，写的时候却弄成great thoughts了，郁闷啊
4。第三段我发现如果在中间用一个例子衔接起来回显得更紧凑更有说服力，用Brave Heart这部电影，因为在里面民族英雄被夸大，还和本应相差一百多年的英国女王来了场“跨越时空”的恋情
5。第四段，还是第四段，再次建议专门讨论这一段的用法，很迷惑。
最后，再次感谢
我还有十几天就要考了，时间不够，对于把所有的题目都列一编提纲的目的可能完成不了了，因为argu现在发现不容忽视
老天啊，给我一天100 hours吧