Issue70

hongt007UID: 112222

70"In any profession—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."

I believe it's too extremist  to simply says that in any profession-business,politics,education,government and so on their leaders should setp down after five years. In the ear of rapid social and techonologcial change leading to increasing life complexecity and physocolocical displacement, both positive and negative effects among persons in different fields call for a balance between experience and vagor.

First of all,the experience of old managers is neccessary in order to alllow our society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate and digest the masses  experience and knowledge they have. It perhaps takes them tens of years and great pains to acquire these valuable experience. It's only their meritorious experience that  can guide our forward direction and make us avoid  many serious mistakes. Giving them the necessary power is a good way for better  using  their precious experience. For instance, we can see many old person still stay on the top of power and lead our struggle for our aims. Many great presidents,  for example Lossiful,  drive us forward for far  more than five years. His great courage and abundant experience give us numerous courage and firmly belief to conquer our  powerful enemy. This illustrates the point that our societies of knowledge and techonology is at a stage in whcih that
lots of old famous persons contribute great to our society.

Simply put, without their guidance, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of information overload and lose our forward way. Perhaps it has some benefit for some special realm.But in my experience, I never see any enterprise has so strictly rules that those in power must step down after five years.Bill Gates,the president of the best software company, Microsoft, has been there for more than ten years. It's the same condition of IBM. Without them, I think we can't see today great Microsoft and IBM.It's them and only them can make the wonder. No one can say let them retire only after five years is a wisdom decision simply according to the  rule.

But, in another sense,over emphasis the importance perhaps make us conservative and lose vigor. Today society is a constantly changing society, perhaps some old useful experience becomes out of date and inaccurate. it's a useful way to draw young people in the leadership. this is a useful and proper way for some fields to revitalize enterprise. They can bring new concepts and ideas to the enterprise. Perhaps these are neccessary. For exmaple, we can see many bad-managed coopration revitalized by new leaders. And this a common way to some companies.

In conclusion, the key of question in not whether simply change the leadership but well deal with the experience of old leader and vagor of young man.We must remember what the purpose of chaning leader is, and that there are different conditions in different realms. We must search a balance between them according to the concrete condition, not simply a rule.

hongt007UID: 112222

Oh,my god, why don't anyone check my article?

paisleyUID: 64183

才几分钟啊？每天帖上来的文章那么多，有些朋友的文章要到两天以后才有人改。请你首先为他人服务吧，这是互助的论坛！

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木耳UID: 123036

1 extremist or extreme?
2 alllow or allow?
3 It's only their meritorious experience that can guide our forward direction and make us avoid many serious mistakes  有点绝对了最好加上in most cases
4 person or persons?
5 "best software company"" Simply put, without their guidance, our society would find itself bogged down ..."太绝对了
6 has been there  
   has been in power(in his position)
7 It's them and only them can make the wonder
   It is only these elites who can make the woders.你是想用强调句吧？
8 let them retire or letting them?wisdom or wise?
9 emphasis the importance or emphasis on the importance of ...?
10 Today society or Nowadays, society?
11 the key of question or the key to question ?
12 change or changing?deal or dealing?leader or a leader?

写得还不错，你也改改我的吧。

glidingshUID: 110700

如果有不对的地方，很多包含，也清指出来
我也是大菜鸟一个，呵呵

I believe it's too extremist to simply says that in any       profession-business,politics,education,government and so on their leaders should setp down [setup down?] after five years. In the ear of rapid social and techonologcial [technological] change leading to increasing life complexecity [complexation] and physocolocical [physical ?]  displacement, both positive and negative effects among persons in different fields call for a balance between experience and vagor [vigor].

First of all,the experience of old managers is neccessary in order to alllow [allow? Typing mistake] our society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate and digest the masses experience and knowledge they have. It perhaps takes them tens of years and great pains to acquire these valuable experience [experiences]. It's only their meritorious experience that can guide our [us] forward direction and make us avoid many serious mistakes. Giving them the necessary power is a good way for better using their precious experience. For instance, we can see many old person [persons]  still stay on the top of power and lead our struggle for our aims. Many great presidents, for example Lossiful, drive us forward for far more than five years. His great courage and abundant experience give us numerous courage and firmly[firm] belief to conquer our powerful enemy. This illustrates the point that our societies [society]of knowledge and techonology [technology] is[are] at a stage in which [which] that
lots of old famous persons contribute great to our society.

Simply put, without their guidance, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of information overload and lose our forward way. Perhaps it has some benefit for some special realm[realms]. But in my experience, I never see any enterprise has so strictly rules that those in power must step down after five years.Bill Gates,the president of the best software company, Microsoft, has been there for more than ten years. It's the same condition of IBM. Without them, I think we can't see[imagine, is it better?] today great Microsoft and IBM.It's them and only them can make the wonder. No one can say let them retire only after five years is a wisdom decision simply according to the rule.

But, in another sense,over emphasis the importance perhaps make us conservative and lose vigor. Today society is a constantly changing society, perhaps some old useful experience becomes out of date and inaccurate. it's a useful way to draw young people in the leadership. this is a useful and proper way for some fields to revitalize enterprise. They can bring new concepts and ideas to the enterprise. Perhaps these are necessary . For example[example], we can see many bad-managed coopration [cooperation] revitalized by new leaders. And this a common way to some companies.

In conclusion, the key of question in not whether simply change the leadership but well deal with the experience of old leader and vagor [vigor]of young man.We must remember what the purpose of chaning [?]leader is, and that there are different conditions in different realms. We must search a balance between them according to the concrete condition, not simply a rule.

hongt007UID: 112222

非常感谢木耳兄提出的意见与建议，非常不好意思，我前一段由于某些原因一直不能上网，所以没来得及回复大家的贴子，非常感谢大家的关怀与鼓励，我以后也会多多修改别人的文章的，虽然我不是大牛,大家一起共同努力吧！

hongt007UID: 112222

问一下，木耳熊你的文章是不是发到我的邮箱里了，我现在用的邮箱是hongtao@ict.ac.cn

hongt007UID: 112222

I'm sorry,弄错了，木耳兄原是大牛，不是我的那位小兄弟！

hongt007UID: 112222

非常感谢glidingsh提出的意见！

hongt007UID: 112222

大家有什末好方法可以减少考试时大字的错误率啊？

白色翅膀UID: 139024

70"In any profession—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."

I believe it's too extremist to simply says that in any profession-business,politics,education,government and so on their leaders should setp down after five years. In the ear of rapid social and techonologcial change leading to increasing life complexecity and physocolocical displacement, both positive and negative effects among persons in different fields call for a balance between experience and vagor.

First of all,the experience of old managers is neccessary in order to alllow our society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate and digest the masses experience and knowledge they have. (Perhaps,提到前面来）It perhaps takes them tens of years and great pains to acquire these valuable experience. It's only their meritorious experience that can guide our forward direction and make us avoid many serious mistakes. Giving them the necessary power is a good way for better using their precious experience. For instance, we can see many old person（-s) still stay on the top of power and lead our struggle for our aims. Many great presidents, for example Lossiful, drive us forward for far more than five years. His great courage and abundant experience give us numerous (numerous不太好吧）courage and firmly belief to conquer our powerful enemy. This illustrates the point that our societies of knowledge and techonology is at a stage in whcih that
lots of old famous persons contribute great to our society.

Simply put, without their guidance, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of information overload and lose our forward way. Perhaps it has some benefit for some special realm.But in my experience, （直接说） enterprise has so strictly rules that those in power must step down after five years.Bill Gates,the president of the best software company, Microsoft, has been there for more than ten years. It's the same condition of IBM. Without them, I think we can't see today great Microsoft and IBM.It's them and only them can make the wonder. No one can say let them retire only after five years is a wisdom decision simply according to the rule.

But, in another sense,over emphasis the importance （THE IMPORTANCE OF WHAT 第一句你就省：））perhaps make us conservative and lose vigor. Today society is a constantly changing society, perhaps some old useful experience becomes out of date and inaccurate. it's a useful way to draw young people in the leadership. this is a useful and proper way for some fields to revitalize enterprise. They can bring new concepts and ideas to the enterprise. Perhaps these are neccessary. For exmaple, we can see many bad-managed coopration revitalized by new leaders. And this a common way to some companies.

In conclusion, the key of question in not whether simply change the leadership but well deal with the experience of old leader and vagor of young man.We must remember what the purpose of chaning leader is, and that there are different conditions in different realms. We must search a balance between them according to the concrete condition, not simply a rule.
建议多用些关联词

hongt007UID: 112222

谢谢，的确多用些关联词可以加强行文的逻辑连贯性！练习时总是出现些拼写错误，大家有神末好方法可以改正啊？

xbdebbUID: 142129

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[B]大家有什末好方法可以减少考试时大字的错误率啊？ [/B]

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白色翅膀UID: 139024

我觉得是习惯，有的人打字习惯打完后看看对不对，虽然有点花时间，平时多注意