issue167 （revised by paisley）

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In this issue, the speaker asserts that a effective political leader can not tell truth all the time. The speaker further states that completely honest is not a useful virtue for politician. Although everyone has been taught from teachers and parents that honest is a good virtue and should follow it all along. However, from a empirical standpoint, it is not all ways in our favor to do so. Sometimes, too honest can even spoil things rather than make things better. As for political leaders, I fully support the speaker's assertion. But it is based on the benefits of citizens and the society as a whole.
First of all, in some case, what we need is not the truth, but the good result. For instance, once our state's protect systems have some problems and can not operate normally. If our leader tells this incidence truthfully to the citizens, what would happen on us? It is highly possible that some terrists take advantige of this opporturnity to destruct our country, and some opposity state may also make an attact on us. However, if our leader keep this secrete, and of course nobody will know but the leader himself, nothing would happen at that time. After the system comes to normality, our leader also can tell the whole thing to the outsides.
Besides, it is the natural of leaders to keep their status as a idealism and protect it from being spoiled, although we know there is no prefect man in the world. In many case, leaders would hide something which might influence their leadership or speak part of the truth in his own way. It is reasonable for those leaders to do this for the bad information about them could deter their leadership. In addition, different people have different ideas about the same thing, some may support this, the other may support the opposite, such as the development of technology and the protection of environment, the best way to solve this problem is that the leader keep idea to quell the two part of people. In fact, he or she can concentrate on the development of technology because it is badly needed.
However, in most case, political leaders should honest to the citizens. Credibility is the fundamention on which political leaders can work smoothly and effeciently, without which government can get little support from its citizens. Besides, always lieing to its citizens must inspire the discontent of them for everyone want to know the true situation of his or her nation and eventually lead the leader to go down.
In sum, complete honesty in every case can not make an effective political leader. In fact, every leader has something unknown to others on the purpose of his own or the interests of the whole nation. Nevertheless, in most case leader should honest to the citizens in order to get their support and credibility. Once the lies is disclosed which is not in favor of citizens and the whole society but he or she own, it must come to the end of the leader's profession.

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可是题目呢？

paisleyUID: 64183

In this issue, the speaker asserts that a(应是an) effective political leader can not tell truth all the time. The speaker further states that completely honest（应是complete honesty，否则不能做一句话的主语） is not a useful virtue for politician. Although everyone has been taught from teachers and parents that honest（应是honesty） is a good（无须good，否则和virtue重复了） virtue and should follow it all along. However, from a（应是an） empirical standpoint, it is not all ways in our favor to do so. Sometimes, （应加个being，否则形容词不能做主语）too honest can even spoil things rather than make things better. As for political leaders, I fully support the speaker's assertion. But it is based on the benefits of citizens and the society as a whole.

First of all, in some case, what we need is not the truth, but the good result. For instance, once our state's protect systems（这个词组有点费解，指的国防还是别的什么吗？） have some problems and can not operate normally. （前面用了once，句子还没有完，应用逗号）If our leader tells this incidence truthfully to the citizens, what would happen on（一般用to） us? It is highly possible that some terrists（拼写错误） take advantige of this opporturnity to destruct our country, and some opposity state may also make an attact on us. However, if our leader keep this secrete, and of course nobody will know but the leader himself, nothing would happen at that time. After the system comes to normality, our leader also can tell the whole thing to the outsides.
不一定是“敌对分子”在作怪，还可以谈一下大众恐慌的负面因素。比如亚洲金融危机的加深，和大规模的恐慌心理也有极大的关系。

Besides, it is the natural of leaders（应是it is natural for leaders） to keep their status as a idealism(不能说把status保持在理想主义,这样说不通,不如maintain their status as ideal as possible) and protect it from being spoiled, although we know there is no prefect(拼写错误) man in the world. In many case(少s), leaders would hide something which might influence their leadership or speak part of the truth in his own way. It is reasonable for those leaders to do this for the bad information about them could deter their leadership. In addition, different people have different ideas about the same thing, some may support this, the other may support the opposite, such as the development of technology and the protection of environment,(此处应用句号.) the best way to solve this problem is that the leader keep (少the) idea(这个词用得太浅了点) to quell(太凶狠了吧?) the two part of people. In fact, he or she can concentrate on the development of technology because it is badly needed.
这段只是对现象的陈述，对高官为何隐瞒很多事情作出了解释.但是这样是否合理呢?是否合法呢? 这篇ISSUE是规范性的分析，而不是实证性的分析，也就是说，要你说什么是好的，什么是对的，而不是要你说，我们的社会是如何如何的。所以为他们辩护的话，就有点离题了，除非你这段开头说明这一点，而且不需要花太多笔墨，因为本来不是重点，而且如果要写也应该在后面提出对策,或者剖析根源,分析其害处. 而后半段"个人有不同的看法"其实可以单独成段，论述为什么不需要永远说真话。永远说真化的代价是很高的，在中途不说真话可以节约时间精力去让人们达成一致的意见.这是个好论点，可惜你没注意。

However, in most case(少s), political leaders should (少be) honest to the citizens. Credibility is the fundamention(用foundation好拉) on which political leaders can work smoothly and effeciently, without which government can get little support from its citizens. Besides, always lieing(好象不是这样的吧?我一时也搞不清楚了，用telling lies避过去吧) to its citizens must inspire the discontent of them for everyone want(少s) to know the true situation of his or her nation and eventually lead the leader to go down.


In sum, complete honesty in every case can not make an effective political leader. In fact, every leader has something unknown to others on the purpose of his own or the interests of the whole nation. Nevertheless, in most case leader should honest to the citizens in order to get their support and credibility. Once the lies is(应是are) disclosed which is not in favor of citizens and the whole society but he or she own, it must come to the end of the leader's profession(句子太长了，语法成分有点混乱，建议改短)

意见基本上在上面了。你的IDEA还是有的，但是需要把他们理清楚。