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song123456UID: 133578

I basically agree with the statement that an individual must account for their own actions and the milieu in which one live has an impressing effect on his or her behavior. However, I strongly disagree with the opinion that the concept of 'individual responsibility' is a necessary fiction. In my observation, both outside forces and one's own making play a large part in forming people's behavior.

First of all, it must be admitted that the environment of one's life can make deep impression on our behavior. First, we learn from the environment, consciously or otherwise. An child learn to talk and walk by imitating the activity of his parents and as he grows up, he learn knowledge, skills, and ideas from his family, teachers and communities that are around him, which will determine his behavior and outlook. At the same time, as a unit, a society tends to affect the behavior of its members in order to keep it as a whole through transmitting some common ideas and values called culture to its members. Thereby, the behavior pattern of an individual is inevitable be regulated by the society. For example, crime activities is always prohibited by law and patriotism encouraged.

But before leaping to the popular conclusion that people' behavior is largely determined by power from outside not of their own characteristic, it may be well to look more closely at the matter. The role of disposition in forming one's behavior should not be ignored. Why some people who are not well-to-do themselves would like to help others as far as they can while some sociopath would harm others as their path to joy? There no outer forces compel them to do so. All go to show that the traits of people have equally strong imprints on their behavior patterns.

Another analysis should be added that the effects that environment put on people are also influenced by their makeup. The environment girding an individual is a rather complex wrap-up of diverse viewpoints on various issues, good or evil, moral or immoral, and orthodox or heterodox. Then, it is up to one to analyze and determine which sides he want to stand by or to develop his own positions on these issues, in which one's character features will have an overwhelming role. In other words, it is due to people to response to the condition. For instance, in the case of the issue about the role of science, an optimistic person may more likely believe that, by and large, science will do good for human beings while a pessimistic one may approve the opinion that science will destroy us.

To conclude, as a member of a society, one's behavior is bound to be subject to outside forces--culture. At the same time, any individual is a distinct one who fundamentally differs from others in makeup so that his behavior is also a part of his own making.

paisleyUID: 64183

basically agree with the statement that an individual must account for their(应是his吗，你前面用的是an individual) own actions and the milieu in which one live has an impressing effect on his or her behavior. However, I strongly disagree with the opinion that the concept of 'individual responsibility' is a necessary fiction. In my observation, both outside forces and one's own making play a large part in forming people's behavior.

First of all, it must be admitted that the environment of one's life can make deep impression on our（前面用one's，这里就应该用his） behavior. First, we learn from the environment, consciously or otherwise. An（应是a） child learn（少s） to talk and walk by imitating the activity of his parents and as he grows up, he learn（少s） knowledge, skills, and ideas from his family, teachers and communities that are around him, which will determine his behavior and outlook. At the same time, as a unit, a society tends to affect the behavior of its members in order to keep it as a whole through transmitting some common ideas and values called culture to its members. Thereby, the behavior pattern of an individual is inevitable be regulated by the society. For example, crime activities is（直接说crimes are就可以了） always prohibited by law and patriotism （少is always，要和前面平行）encouraged.

But before leaping to the popular conclusion that people'（拼写错误） behavior is largely determined by power from outside not of their own characteristic, it may be（be多余） well to look more closely at the matter. The role of disposition in forming one's behavior should not be ignored. Why some people who are not well-to-do（？？什么意思） themselves would like to help others as far as they can while some sociopath would harm others as their path to joy? There no outer forces compel them to do so. All go to show that the traits of people have equally（equally这个结论没有经过论证） strong imprints on their behavior patterns.

Another analysis should be added that the effects that environment put on people are also influenced by their makeup. The environment girding an individual is a rather complex wrap-up of diverse viewpoints on various issues, good or evil, moral or immoral, and orthodox or heterodox. Then, it is up to one to analyze and determine which sides he want to stand by or to develop his own positions on these issues, in which one's character features will have an overwhelming role. In other words, it is due to people to response to the condition. For instance, in the case of the issue about the role of science, an optimistic person may more likely believe that, by and large, science will do good for human beings while a pessimistic one may approve the opinion that science will destroy us.

To conclude, as a member of a society, one's behavior（这句话的主语是one's behavior，跟前面a member of a society并不吻合，得换换） is bound to be（be应去掉） subject to outside forces--culture. At the same time, any individual is a distinct（dinstince是“杰出的”distinctive才是"不同的"） one who fundamentally differs from others in makeup so that his behavior is also a part of his own making.


总的来说不错! 语言和内容都过关了。木耳写了篇不错的，可以参考https://bbs.gter.net:8080/bbs/sho ... amp;threadid=131521

还有好几篇别人写的(这个题目很多人都写过),你可以自己找找

song123456UID: 133578

谢谢paisley！我现在严重超时， 还有20天， 不知能不能达到45分钟的速度