issue133 （revision by feier）

feier521UID: 109747

刚刚好四十五分钟，改了一下
The problems of modern society have led many people to complain: 'We live in terrible times.' Yet, given the choice, no one today would prefer to live in any other time.

Generally, I agree with the speaker of the title statement that the times we are living in now is in some sense terrible, for the serious pollution, unending unemployment, the explosion of the population, and so forth. However, it is almost impossible for everyone to go back thousands of years to live another life like our ancestors.

On one hand, admittedly, it is the science and technology which bring human beings much more comfortablity（comfort） and help us to explore the unknown world better than ever before.（前面让步，后面转折terrible things） It is also them that bring many negative influences, such as the green-house effects, the nuclear weapon, and the explosion of big metropolises. Human beings (are删掉) just live in a world full of terrible things; and it seems that there are no good and efficient solutions for some problems. For instance（举例的是什么，是terrible things 还是no efficient solutions？而你只是列举了terrible things，要不你那句solutions 就放到后面）, as the wide use of insecticides and other chemical reagents, most of which are poisonous, the balance of the nature is disturbed, and many species are in the danger of extinct（extinction）. Moreover, when the poisonous chemical reagents（chemicals就可以了） are eaten by people （along with food and water别扭，along with好像跟的是people）, they would do fatal harm to people, such as the disaster in Japan in 50s. When people drank the water contained lead, they got horrible disease: the infants are congenitally deformed babies when they were born. Thereby, when science and technology bring us cars, televisions, computers and many other innovations to make our life much more efficient and comfortable, they also bring us terrible things, which, however, seem more and more serious.

On the other hand, as the society is more and more complicated and the competition is severer, human beings are now under unprecedented pressure from every facet of the society. In this personal capacity emphasized society（in this society emphasizing personal capacity, 会不会好一点？）, individuals must study and work diligently all the time to keep their jobs, to support their families and the like. Take the students in China now for example. Students in China now（重复）, whatever pupils, middle school students or college students, have to study industriously （with little spare time是不是有点多余？）（in order） not to be eliminate(d) through selection and to keep the pace with continuous change of the county. Compared to their parents, they live busier and higher-pressure lives.（还是坏处。）

However, ironically（删掉一个）, there is almost no one who likes to go back to the ancient times when（although） many people are complaining:"we live in terrible times. That is in that although people are living in the clamorous cities full of crimes and pollution, they can not bear the lives without TVs or cars; although many man（men） are suffering from insomnia as（？） the sever competition, they can not live lives without rivals and achievements in their careers. Human beings are the creators as well as the products of the society. In most cases, one would only suit the society in which he lives （his or her life不如删掉）. For example, though America is more developed than China, one Chinese who is living in America would likely to cherish his or her Chinese traditions and cultures, as he or she has been instilled Chinese morality and standards since he or she was born（这个例子不合适。Other time而不是other country，所以说你要前后比。）. So, if one went back to the ancient times, he would have not only complains（时态） about the material circumstance but also the culture and traditions. And often, the latter is more unbearable.

In conclusion, maybe people would complain this or that in modern times; and it is also the truth that life is sometimes terrible now. It is more than difficult for one to go back to the ancient times to live another kind of life.

你的观点是人们不可能live another time，所以我觉得这应该是主要论述部分，而你却把“今天的 terrible things” 论述了两段！
呵呵，这一方面我也不知道该如何掌握，
改的不对的地方，请指出！！

告诉你一个秘密：我挺喜欢吃木耳的！：）

angeikimUID: 4857

谢谢非非老弟^_^

ken0405UID: 124994

木耳可是好东东哟
大家多多的吃！：）

木耳UID: 123036

你的观点是人们不可能live another time，所以我觉得这应该是主要论述部分，而你却把“今天的 terrible things” 论述了两段！

其实我本想写成balance的，不过一是开头没表达清楚，二是时间不够了。就写成了这样。还有现在再看这道题，似乎着重写不可能live another time好一些，因为题目中没有明显的比较，而是转折关系。
F兄改得很好很细，一贯的作风啊！再次感谢。以后有问题还要请大家多多指教。