ISSUE183

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ISSUE_183：As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious.

Acquiring motley assortment of knowledge, a process that is considered as either comprehensible or complex and mysterious, is a growing concern among populace in the epoch of rapid social and technological alteration leading to society complexity and psychological displacement. Actually, knowledge of the mass, which is conducted and mastered, make things more complex and more mysterious rather than more comprehensible.

Most conspicuous, many things and phenomena become comprehensible and explainable once we acquire and master the specific knowledge behind them. Kingk woo Song, the president and CEO of E-DUKE CORP., a distinguished high-tech company in Massachusetts, illustrates this brilliantly in the following quotes (with slight adjustment of mine): " More high technology and technique, some assert, more question and danger in the whole world. Other convince that we should master and employ more knowledge and technology, and then dispose the question such as pollution, war and famine, even corruption and degeneration. My argument is that populace should learn and strive to study everything in society, in terms of high technology and profound science, then struggle for let things less complex and mysterious. " Therefore, It is true that individuals should be encouraged to realize that more knowledge, more comprehensible and explainable.

Furthermore, as far as those things or phenomena which are still mysterious to human society are concerned, people will be further confused with the acquirement of all kinds of interpretations and opinions. For instance, the origin of universe or the construct of the Pyramids, which are hardly comprehended and understood in this era, are still marvelous question mark in that there is little know-how and theory to interpret soundly and thoroughly. Finally, we, with the development of knowledge, might find so many problems and questions that are not paid attention over past decades.

However, the difficulties and uncertainty to unveil certain things, human society would necessarily achieve the apposite knowledge to cope with them if given enough time. In the one hand, individuals should accept a well-rounded education to acquire more ideas and concepts. On the other hand, government of all level had better establish a foundation for rewarding those who can dispose and address things under arduous endeavor.

To summarize, not only should scientists and engineers research and study things, but people in society also take the pain to comprehend and understand problems. It is convinced that, soundly and thoroughly, more knowledge, more comprehensible and more explainable.

看到有一位把ISSUE－183拿出来了，我也把我得拿出来。
虽然语言句式和逻辑不差，内容上有待提高
并且自习阅读，发现和第一印象有差别，欺骗E-RATER
－－－自我评价，望指教

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Acquiring motley(strange word maybe excellent) assortment of knowledge, a process that is considered as either comprehensible or complex and mysterious, is a growing concern among populace in the epoch of rapid social and technological alteration leading to society complexity and psychological displacement. Actually, knowledge of the mass, which is conducted and mastered, make(makes) things more complex and more mysterious rather than more comprehensible.(范文里的句子吗)

Most conspicuous, many things and phenomena become comprehensible and explainable once we acquire and master the specific knowledge behind them. Kingk woo Song, the president and CEO of E-DUKE CORP., a distinguished high-tech company in Massachusetts, illustrates this brilliantly in the following quotes (with slight adjustment of mine―――＞　I paraphrase that is ok ): " More high technology and technique, some assert, more question and danger in the whole world. Other convince that we should master and employ more knowledge and technology, and then dispose the question such as pollution, war and famine, even corruption and degeneration. My argument is that populace should learn and strive to study everything in society, in terms of high technology and profound science, then struggle for let things less complex and mysterious. "( 我觉的证明不了你的论点) Therefore, It is true that individuals should be encouraged to realize that more knowledge, more comprehensible and explainable.

Furthermore, as far as those things or phenomena which are still mysterious to human society are concerned, people will be further confused with the acquirement of all kinds of interpretations and opinions. For instance, the origin of universe or the construct of the Pyramids, which are hardly comprehended and understood in this era, are still marvelous question mark in that there is little know-how and theory to interpret soundly and thoroughly. Finally, we, with the development of knowledge, might find so many problems and questions that are not paid attention over past decades.

However, the difficulties and uncertainty to unveil certain things, human society would necessarily achieve the apposite knowledge to cope with them if given enough time. In(on) the one hand, individuals should accept a well-rounded education to acquire more ideas and concepts. On the other hand, government of all level had better establish a foundation for rewarding those who can dispose and address things under arduous endeavor.

To summarize, not only should scientists and engineers research and study things, but people in society also take the pain to comprehend and understand problems. It is convinced that, soundly and thoroughly, more knowledge, more comprehensible and more explainable.(he he this sentence  copy mine of course not)
结构很好，　论证不充分，　个别单词用的合适吗？

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谢谢指点

本来就是使用模版嘛
不过这个模版是借鉴加上我自己总结的
我现在只要是联系结构语法和句子
内容慢慢来啊