Issue31 花在研究上的钱就是好的，不管结果。。。请批评。。。

yellowchildrenUID: 134407

Issue31
Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial

The speaker is over-generalized and assertive. Whether money spent on research is a good investment or not depends on many factors and the result of the research is an indispensable factor that we should be considered. Besides the main factor, many other factors need to be considered. I disagree that speaker's assertion that any investment on research is always good regardless of any condition.

Admittedly, It is all kinds of research that make science and technology advance significantly and ultimately make society progressive. The nature and goal of the research is to explore and solve problems, which determine that research itself is a good thing and thus provides us more freedom out of problems. For example, the input in research is regarded as an important standard of appraisement and comparison among colleges and the large amount of funds input in research shows the force of college, and thus every college values the research and put much money on it. It shows, from college’s attitude towards research, that money spent on research is usually a good investment. In addition, in the long run, any research, if used correctly, would ultimately benefit to people and make progress to society.

However, although research itself is good, not all money spent on research is always a good investment. After all, the word investment involves the ratio of   input and output. Thus, before a research is decided to make, the result of the research must be considered. A research without result or with a vague or bad result would mean return as zero or little, which obviously could not be called a good investment. Considering the importance of the result, we always do feasible report to explicate that the result is explicit and feasible in order to avoid a waste of money before making research. Besides, when the result is bad and do harm to people, investment should not be taken as a good one. For example, when Japan invaded into China during 1930s and 1940s, they spent much money on the research of chemical poisoned gas for the sake of mutilating more Chinese people. For the inhumanity action, can we say it is a good investment only because of the nature of research itself? Certainly not.

Finally, While the result of research is an important and essential element for a good investment, but not the only one. There are some other factors, besides the result, that should be taken into account, such as the cost, the number of people, and propriety, and so on. On the one hand, the cost is also a factor that should not be neglected by people. As an example of a firm, while the result of the research developed by the firm is good and definitive, we do not think the investment good if the costs are beyond the extent that the firm can afford and thus other researches besides this or even the whole firm would be affected by this research. In other words, considering the costs should be taken as a practical action from the angle of the overall situation. On the other hand, the propriety between the immediate problems and long-term problems solved by research is the factor that we should be taken into account. If neglecting the immediate problems and firstly spending on the research of the long-term problems, many trivial but immediate problems may be not to be solved in time and thus could lead to make a serious problem to erupt, which is harmful and can not be considered as a good investment.

In sum, in the long run, money spent on any research used correctly is a good investment. The approval to ignoring the result of research may be used as a perfect pretext by someone who actually does things harmful to society and people in the name of research. We should demonstrate the research by analyzing its aspects of any sorts before deciding to make a research.

hehuiUID: 134334

文章结构是不错的，意思表达也基本到位。
但你现在的主要问题是语法、句子结构的问题，找一些 native的文章 看看会有很大帮助。

还有：用GRE词汇是好事，但不要堆砌，比如importantly 和 essentially 没必要一起用，不要故意让句子看起来很复杂。

下面简单改一些语法、句法问题：


The speaker is over-generalized and assertive. Whether money spent on research is a good investment or not depends on many factors and the result of the research is an ndispensable factor that we should be（去掉be)cosidered. Besides the main factor, many other factors(many others) need to be considered. I disagree ( to the speaker's assertion)that speaker's assertion that any investment on research is always good regardless of any condition.

Admittedly, It is all kinds of research that make science and technology advance significantly and ultimately make society progressive(make sb. do). The nature and goal of the research is to explore and solve problems, which determine(s) that research itself is a good thing and thus provides us more freedom out of problems. For example, the input in research is regarded as an important standard of appraisement and comparison among colleges and the large amount of funds input in research shows the force of college, and thus every college values the research and put much money on it.(这个句子表达的意思太多，还是分开写好） It shows, from college’s attitude towards research（from college's voice), that money spent on research is usually a good investment. In addition, in the long run, any research, if used correctly, would ultimately benefit to(去掉to) people and make progress to society.

However, although research itself is good, not all money spent on research is always a good investment. After all, the word investment involves the ratio of input and output. Thus, before a research is decided to make(before making a decision of a research), the result of the research must be considered(这句话不太合理，因为结果是不能预期的，加个possible). A research without result(有这样的研究吗） or with a vague or bad result would mean return（去掉） as zero or little, which obviously could not be called a good investment. Considering the importance of the result, we always do feasible report to explicate that the result is explicit and feasible in order to avoid a waste of money before making research. Besides, when the result is bad and do harm to people, investment should not be taken as a good one. For example, when Japan invaded into China during 1930s and 1940s, they spent much money on the research of chemical poisoned gas for the sake of mutilating more Chinese people. For（from) the inhumanity action, can we say it is a good investment only because of the nature of research itself? Certainly not.

Finally, While the result of research is an important and essential(去掉） element for a good investment, but not the only one. There are some other factors, besides the result,（去掉插入语，因为你前一句已经说了） that should be taken into account, such as the cost, the number of people, and propriety, and so on. On the one hand, the cost is also a factor that should not be neglected by people. As an example of a firm, while the result of the research developed by the firm is good and definitive, we do not think the investment good if the costs are beyond the extent that the firm can afford（if the cost is too high to the company) and thus other researches besides this (去掉besides this因为前面有other)or even the whole firm would be affected by this research. In other words, considering(去掉considering) the costs should be taken as a practical action from the angle of the overall situation. On the other hand, the propriety(这个词不妥...） between the immediate problems and long-term problems solved by research is the factor that we should be taken into account. If neglecting the immediate problems and firstly spending on the research of the long-term problems, many trivial but immediate problems may be not to be solved in time and thus could lead to make a serious problem to erupt, which is harmful and can not be considered as a good investment.

In sum, in the long run, money spent on any research used correctly is a good investment. The approval to ignoring the result of research may be used as a perfect pretext by someone who actually does things harmful to society and people in the name of research. We should demonstrate the research by analyzing its aspects of any sorts before deciding to make a research.

yellowchildrenUID: 134407

HEHUI。。。谢谢。。。真是一语中的。。。我觉得我最大问题是好多想说的话都不知道怎么表达，实在英文功底蛮差的，而且想说什么要想一会才能用英文表达出来，不能一下子反应出来用英文怎么说。。。也就是最近开始准备考G才看了点NATIVE文章，也就老外280和孙远的工具箱。。。你有没有觉得不错的NATIVE文章推荐一下。。。我第一次看你的文章就觉得英文表达不错，用词也不错，不象我这样说个话绕的不行，还老是就那么几个词。。。

yellowchildrenUID: 134407

仔细看过改的，都挺好，就是两个地方继续请教：
1\For example, the input in research is regarded as an important standard of appraisement and comparison among colleges and the large amount of funds input in research shows the force of college, and thus every college values the research and put much money on it.(这个句子表达的意思太多，还是分开写好）

这样写，可不可以?
For example, the input in research is regarded as an important standard of appraisement and comparison among colleges. Also, the large amount of funds input in research shows the force of college, and thus every college values the research and put much money on it.

2\还有这句也继续请教：
considering(去掉considering) the costs should be taken as a practical action from the angle of the overall situation.
去掉CONSIDERRING好像就成了THE COST被看成一个实际行动，好像不通。。。

alexandra8204UID: 138807

写的挺好 字数也不错:)

2/或者写成Costs should be also considered practically from the angle of overall.
just some suggestion:)
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