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fortitudesagUID: 139374

"Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions."

We can see, listen, smell and taste the real world in which we live very well everyday. Perhaps we all have not thought the problem that what we feel everyday is the facts. Maybe it is not a problem, but long ago many scientists debated fiercely on the problem whether facts are exist as man feel and finally can not reach a conclusion. However, today most people hold the idea that facts are stubborn things and they cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions because they can feel them real everyday. Even thing like these, there is a truth that there really exist kinds of force that can be used by human to write the facts like our ancients to create the history.

Actually, the description and interpretation of facts depend in a large sense on the observer's perspective, judgment, interests, values, etc. There is still a prefect example that would best support the viewpoint described above. Several blinds happened to have a chance to "see" a elephant passing by them, one blind touching the elephant tail thinks the elephant like a rope; another blind  touching the trunk of the elephant regards the elephant as a snake; another blind touching the body of the elephant misdeems the elephant as a wall; and so on. No one can tell what the real elephant is like because their different perspectives from which they have describe the elephant. To cut a long story short, it is the observer's perspective, judgment, interests that determined the description and interpretation of facts.

Facts really are factual things that can not be altered by our wishes or emotions. For example, one little child fear the dog from his childhood because he saw somebody be bitted and be in great pain in his early experience. From then on, once he happens to meet a dog he will be in great trepidation. Everyone now can see that the dog will not disappear because the trepidation of the pathetic little child as the child expected and therefore understand easily that facts cannot be altered by human's wishes. Example like this in our life existed not least than thousands of them. There is another excellent example we almost all face when we were growing up. When you have not prepared very comfortably at the eve of the similar examination, you may be nervous on the examination room. After that you will get a disgusting score.

Then is there not solution to this problem? The answer is no. In the second example though it is impossible for you to improve your knowledge captivity in such a short time, you have other countermeasure to the tackle. Being calm is right. When you are calm, you thinking ability will sustain in a high level which may help you pass the hard circumstance. This is important for us to realize the existed facts and arrange the whole process according to the existed facts and not be controlled by our emotions. In conclusion, a basis requirement of any field of study is respecting facts.

The specula practice that human being fight with the nature will continue while time passed by us without notification. The process may be hard because it is freight with unexpected difficulties which will not be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions. We must realize that these difficulties all are facts that existed without the reliance of human being and must establish our confidence to these difficulties.

zclxUID: 139830

We can see, listen, smell and taste the real world in which we live very well everyday. Perhaps we all have not thought the problem that what we feel everyday is the facts. (这句话是什么意思？是不是whether?) Maybe it is not a problem, but long ago many scientists debated fiercely on the problem whether facts are exist as man feel (从句缺引导词)  and finally can not （cannot?） reach a conclusion(agreement?). However, today most people hold the idea that facts are stubborn things and they cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions because they can feel them real （这个real 指什么？问题比较大）everyday. Even thing like these,（独立的名词组不可以做状语）there is a truth that there really exist kinds of force that can be used by human to write the facts like our ancients （ancestor?）to create the history.（这句话表达令人费解）

Actually, the description and interpretation of facts depend in a large sense on the observer's perspective, judgment, interests, values, etc. There is still a prefect example that would best support the viewpoint described above. Several blinds happened to have a chance to "see" a elephant passing by them, one blind touching the elephant tail thinks the elephant like a rope; another blind touching the trunk of the elephant regards the elephant as a snake; another blind touching the body of the elephant misdeems the elephant as a wall; and so on. No one can tell what the real elephant is like because their different perspectives from which they have describe the elephant. To cut a long story short, it is the observer's perspective, judgment, interests that determined the description and interpretation of facts.（用强调句太绝对化，不好。）

Facts really are factual things that can not be altered by our wishes or emotions. For example, one little child fear the dog from his childhood because he saw somebody be bitted （错字）and be in great pain in his early experience. From then on, once he happens to meet a dog he will be in great trepidation. Everyone now can see that the dog will not disappear because the trepidation of the pathetic little child as the child expected and therefore understand easily that facts cannot be altered by human's wishes. Example like this in our life existed not least than thousands of them. There is another excellent example we almost all face when we were growing up. （这句话太不地道）When you have not prepared very comfortably at the eve of the similar examination, you may be nervous on the examination room. After that you will get a disgusting score.（这一段的主题太不明显，而且在结构上，你是准备递近还是转折？缺乏一个明显的信号词）

Then is there not solution to this problem? The answer is no. In the second（这样的指示容易混淆） example though it is impossible for you to improve your knowledge captivity in such a short time, you have other countermeasure to the tackle. Being calm is right. When you are calm, you thinking ability will sustain in a high level which may help you pass the hard circumstance. This is important for us to realize the existed facts and arrange the whole process according to the existed facts and not be controlled by our emotions. In conclusion, a basis（basic?） requirement of any field of study is respecting facts.（好象把be calm作为countermeasure to the tackle不妥）

The specula （同学，这个词在金山糍粑中的意思是反射镜、子宫镜）practice that human being fight with the nature will continue while time passed by （这个是adv不是prep）us without notification. The process may be hard because it is freight with unexpected difficulties which will not be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions. We must realize that these difficulties all are facts that existed without the reliance of human being and must establish our confidence to these difficulties.

不好意思后面几段没有看的很细，总体的感觉是逻辑连接上不太清晰，特别是比较少信号词
这样别人会看不明白你到底持什么观点，我一直觉得在举例过程中对观点的回溯是非常重要的一环，每段的归纳句对于严谨的论证来说也是必不可少的。另外就是句式上不太丰富，there be结构，may, will用的多了点。

文章的用词还是挺好的，我自己在这方面最头痛。

一起加油啊