马上要考托福了，大家能不能帮忙点评一下作文?

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还有几天就要考托福了，写了几篇文章但自己每次都看但总是看不出怎么改，麻烦大家帮忙看下哈

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Question:in order to be well informed,people must get information from different  news resources.
In the age of the information, the images of people who are reading the latest newspapers with also bread and hot coffee in their hands during the morning, and those who open the radio in their cars with the station of news are very familiar to everyone. To business and political people, getting the instant news and information from outside seems much more vital. As the approaches to these news are becoming plentiful, people can not stuck into only one of them.
It is manifest that the information provided by different sources is diverse. As people know, the refreshing time of the information in the internet and newspaper is not the same since the printing and delivering really delay the speed of information emission of the newspapers. Moreover, the formation of the information is different while some computer-based or radio-based emission can provide news in forms of sound and video which can give people animated experiences of getting news. As a result, possible to read according to the need at diverse situation, people will require more sources of news.
Granted, absorbing information in different types of sources can really cause some problems such as the repetition of information, the greater consumption.  But all of these concern can still be solve as the function of people to filter the repetition quickly(since information is always presented with big title in the front pages of the news), and many free accesses of information such as internet and radio.
As far as I concerned, if people want to be a well-informed in the society now, absorbing information from different approaches is essential since the content, the time, and the forms the information offered are diverse and what we can expect is even more approaches which used to satisfy the advanced needs of the people in the future.

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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so
much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Nowadays, since the use of the computers becomes more and more pervasive, the both sides brought by the internet are under great debate. Some people might consider that the tremendous information will really cause trouble, but meanwhile, still lots of supporter states that the great and instant information from internet help them in many aspects.
Admittedly, the internet truly gives us not only valuable messages but also negative and useless messages such as the violence and the extreme view points. However, all those diverse messages train the modern people with the ability to filter out the “dirt” and discriminate between the bad, good and irrelevant by their own standard. In fact, there are many people now do not really have this ability. Thus, in their daily lives, they are 农not easier to be troubled when they face many information which comes from the stock markets, or numerous predictions for the real estate.
Moreover, since now people are getting more and more incisive, it is not enough for the people who make argument or write books with only one perspectives. For instance, if a writer now wants to compose a comment for the other people’ books, he might not only include the judgment he made about literacy but also the condition of the selling of the books, the comments of the readers, or the influence the books to the society. Therefore, the big amount of information of internet will help a lot.
In conclusion, as the internet’s numerous information provide modern people convenience and good capability, it is not difficult to agree that this information will not trouble people in some severe way.

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Quetion: who is much influencial in the education of studens?teachers or friends?
Recently in the society, many newspapers and medias give their attention to the issue of children’s education. Some parents use a big amount of money to let their children to be in a good school, and some parents choose to teach the children by themselves because of the incredulity of the school teachers. In the parents eyes, the capability of the teachers in the school really affect the children’s growth.
Since all the children are very young in age, they always can not discriminate between what to listen and what not to listen. As well, their learning habits, thinking patterns and the value towards the world are not formed. The teachers who teach these children might be really vital as the students consume all of their time in the schools rather than their families. Moreover, as reason that the teachers are adults and the friends are having same age as themselves, it is more likely for the children at this age to obey to the people who have more power and who can let them be afraid.
For another point of view, admittedly, the friends will affect the students because the students might mimic the others to gain popularity in the friends, or influent by the majority since everyone is doing it. However, it is not exaggerated to say that the behavior of the majority is dependent on the way the teachers is teaching and the requirement they give. It is convincing that in the movies of the Chorus, when the teachers teach students with constant blame and abuse, all of the students might be always indignant and just try to plan how to defeat the furious teachers. But when the teacher Clement who use his love and humor to win the students, they become more positive with ambition.
In conclusion, as the teachers affect the majority’s behavior of the students, and teachers are really powerful and let the student be afraid of, it is reasonable to perceive that why so many parents want to find the best teachers for their own children.