issue154 关于教育的问题 请指教

blueseaheartUID: 127701

154. "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."人的教育是一项系统的教育工程，这里包含着家庭教育、社会教育、集体（托幼园所、学校）教育，三者相互关联且有机地结合在一起，相互影响、相互作用、相互制约.
父母和小区都必须参与到地方的学校中。教育太重要了以至于不能把教育完全交给一群职业教育者.

Schools are not "islands unto themselves." They are part of the fabric of a community. And formal education in school could be necessary and first important to children, yet, we need to be aware that our family and the community have equal responsibility to raise and educate the children. Therefore, Effective education involves close linkage between schools, families, and the larger community.

Since families play a critical role in their children’ growth and development, it seriously requires family-school collaboration, which is a cooperative process of brings together school staff, parents, and children, to maximize resources for child achievement and development. Parent involvement in school means that parents are actively or passively engaged in school’s affairs and help parents more fully participate in their children’s education both at home and at school through a variety of activities. First, educators need to learn a great deal about families from which their students come, such learning is useful for teachers to more fully understand their students’ characters and behavior. Thereby, they can better manage and reduce students’ inappropriate behavior by cooperation of parents and teachers. Secondly, through some programs parents learn how to supplement schoolwork by instructing their children at home in academic tasks such as reading and math. Third, parents’ regular meeting with staff can help address some problems and propose some plans. Finally, parents can serve as volunteers in social affairs, such as classroom aides, and even parents can develop a high degree of involvement. For instance, as a member of school development committee, parents can make a decision about some important problems. In a word, parents and staff share two-way information during the children’s process of learning and it is obvious that students are more successful in school (higher test scores, higher grades, better attendance, more positive attitudes and behavior, higher graduation rates) when their parents are actively involved. Parent involvement promotes a healthy and consistent learning environment by establishing mutual goal between parents and educators and developing activities that bridge home and school.

When this partnership is extended to include the larger community, the benefits are greater yet. New age calls for the genuine community involvement, because of the drastically growing divorce rate, the increasing unwed mother, and the diminish/reduce of parents’ spare time. If community members together concern about those miserable children, they undoubtedly benefit a lot from community throughout their life. The community also provides a unique resource, the opportunity to bridge the gap between the “real world” and that of the school. Students are able to see the connection between the curriculum in the school and the skills that are required in the real world. And communities offer a wide range of resources that are valuable to schools and the families they serve. These resources include people who volunteer their time in the school, organizations that offer enrichment opportunities, businesses that offer career-related information and workplace experiences, and agencies that provide various social services for students and families. Further, such activities are also conducive to children’s learning: 1) open other community facilities and churches as neighborhood-based safe havens and meeting sites for parent-teacher conferences and other school-related gatherings 2)use businesses and community organizations to help students with special projects; 3) sponsor bands, athletics, arts programs, clubs, and other wholesome activities for students. Perhaps most important is that when responsibility for children's learning is shared by the school, home, and community, children have more opportunities for meaningful, engaged learning.

Schools don't operate in a vacuum. Parent and community involvement are essential ingredients -- perhaps the most crucial components -- of building stronger schools and increasing student achievement. Parents and communities have a mutual responsibility to become involved in schools and to open and carry on dialogues. When families and community members volunteer their time and talent in the schools, both schools and students increase their capacity to do more and to do it better," Strong families and strong schools make strong communities. Strong communities make a strong nation!

blueseaheartUID: 127701

1开头
第一段：父母在local schools 中的重要性。
第二段：为什么社区必须卷入到local school 中？
4 结尾
请拍砖!

Ivy0929UID: 149906

1,which is a cooperative process of brings(bringing) together school staff,
2,Thereby, they can better manage and reduce students’ inappropriate behavior by cooperation of parents and teachers. they指的是educator吧，也就是teacher,应该改为：by cooperation with parents.
3,to maximize resources for child achievement(成就？在这里不恰当吧) and development.
4,First, educators need to learn a great deal about families from which(应该是where) their students come

我觉得第二段里得分论点太多了，不够集中，或许可以从孩子的启蒙教育开始论述。
第三段，社区的作用，我认为可以把实践的作用放在前面，然后进一步论述社区有利于单亲家庭孩子们的psychological health（这个观点很棒！）。

另外，我觉得有一些短语用得很好，像：
to maximize the available resources
businesses(companies)  that offer career-related information and workplace experiences
啊，又学了两招：）

就这样，我也在准备作文，水平还有待于提高，又不恰当之处，见谅：）

blueseaheartUID: 127701

谢谢Ivy0929的意见。
第二段我主要讲父母参与到学校中的好处。所以只摆了很多观点，没有很好的扩展。说实在的
也不知怎样写。
第三段更不知如何写才好，毕竟对于我们来说社区的概念很淡薄。
继续欢迎拍砖。

jorgeUID: 108878

楼主 MM ,麻烦你下次可以不用　"拍转" 这两个词吗?  :)

另外的参考资料:

parents' behavior may greatly affect there children...

good study-atmosphere  plays an important role in learning

guys who participate juvenile crimes always come from these families which lost there parents

木耳UID: 123036

结构不错，语言也很好，不过我觉得大的出发点有一点偏。

你这篇文章的中心其实就是一个词：合作。
先谈学校应和家庭合作，举了很多例子说明其好处。
再说这种合作扩展到社会（When this partnership is extended to include the larger community,）又会如何。

文章没有解决一个根本问题：教育的真正内涵和最终目的。就事论事的成分多了一些，比如
1 manage and reduce students’ inappropriate behavior by cooperation of parents and teachers.
2 use businesses and community organizations to help students with special projects;
3 sponsor bands, athletics, arts programs, clubs...

看你的简述好像还行：人的教育是一项系统的教育工程，这里包含着家庭教育、社会教育、集体（托幼园所、学校）教育，三者相互关联且有机地结合在一起，相互影响、相互作用、相互制约.

但文章没有触到实质性问题。

要想文章深刻就要先就题目对自己发问：
教育的目的和内涵是什么？
怎样做到？
有哪些方式方法？
哪个是最好的？
学校在这个过程中起到什么作用？
家庭和社会又是什么作用？
没有了家庭和社会的作用教育会怎样？
现实的教育存在什么样的问题？
怎样解决？
解决方案可行性如何？
。。。
我只是没有逻辑的想了一些。你也可以这样做，然后把这些问题的顺序逻辑化，再一一回答，一篇文章的提纲也就出来了。

这样做要求有质疑能力，发散思维能力和抓住事物关键的洞察力和分析力
第一点保证可以提出问题，第二点保证可以提出很多问题，第三点保证充分全面而不跑题

还有就是语言有些啰嗦，再简化一些。
楼上的几位说得都不错。
四分肯定有了，五分不敢讲。