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雪夭UID: 142334

98 Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past."

Should colleges and universities offer more courses about contemporary culture? The speaker claims that such lessons has direct relationship of human beings. I concede that people should learn those relevant knowledge, however, it is impossible to weaken the importance of traditional culture.

Admittedly, the modern society is full of contemporary culture, such as music, television and films, so that if a person desires to touch with the communities and gains knowledge, one must understand such culture. The main value of contemporary culture is that it can convey information, which related to people's life. For example, with the development of advertisement, human beings can know new products by watching television, and what most important is that the content of advertisement contains original ideas, special plot and various knowledge which can impact people's thought immediately. In addition, new forms of music also explore unknown world of human techniques and emotion, which reflect the social change and the communication among nations. It is true that contemporary culture helps people connect with the society and learn a great deal of information.

However, considering the process of cultural developing, colleges and universities have the responsibilities to offer arts and literature courses of the past. Although the kind of recent culture is different from traditional one, the pivot inherits pith of arts and literature of past time. If a person desire to understand contemporary culture, one must learn traditional one to understand the cultural origin, process and new theories. For example, a well-known movie "Gone With The Wind" comes from the famous literature. To better understand the background and the plot of movie, people can read the novel while special emotion and feeling cannot be expressed by screen but words. Moreover, teaching traditional culture help students to appreciate modern culture. When a person have profound knowledge of arts, he o r she might feel easy to understand the music and advertisement, which full with creative ideas. Considering cultural succession, such lesson is crucial to be offered.

In addition, because traditional culture has less relevance to people's modern life, however it is unwise to overlook its historical value. In the past life, people have little right to express individual will or resist authorizes, while arts and literature became a way of reflecting hidden society and personal opinion. For instances, Picasso, a famous painter reflected his attitude of anti-war in works; Mark Twain, America writer, his satire criticize the bad influence of industrialization on workers' life. By learning those masterpieces, the history and society are replayed in front of us. Culture is a hidden line of human evolution, if people neglect it, human root will be gave up.

Understandably, traditional culture represents history and contemporary culture reflects modern life. It seems has no relationship; nevertheless, human beings serve as a bridge connect the two part. Although, courses, such as music, film and so forth have effects on human life directly, it is impossible to deny the usefulness of art and literature in the past, because it is human origin.

so猫UID: 148633

98 Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past."

Should colleges and universities offer more courses about contemporary culture? The speaker claims that such lessons hashave direct relationship of human beings. I concede that people should learn those relevant knowledge,; however, it is impossible to weaken the importance of traditional culture.

Admittedly, the modern society is full of contemporary culture, such as music, television, and films, so that不觉得这里有目的的逻辑关系吧 if a person desires to touch with the communities and gains knowledge, one must understand such culture. The main value of contemporary culture is that it can convey information, which related to people's life. For example, with the development of advertisement, human beings can know new products by watching television, and what most important is that the content of advertisement contains original ideas, special plot and various knowledge which can impact people's thought immediately. 和culture的关系呢？！ In addition, new forms of music also explore unknown world of human techniques and emotion, which reflect the social change and the communication among nations. It is true that contemporary culture helps people connect with the society and learn a great deal of information.

However, considering the process of cultural developing, colleges and universities have the responsibilities to offer arts and literature courses of the past. Although the kind of recent culture is different from traditional one, the pivot inherits pith of arts and literature of past time. If a person desires to understand contemporary culture, one must learn traditional one to understand the cultural origin, process and new theories. For example, a well-known movie "Gone With The小写 Wind" comes from the famous literature还是用novel吧 literature是总的范畴. To better understand the background and the plot of movie, people can read the novel while special这个修饰好奇怪 emotion and feeling cannot be expressed by screen but words. Moreover, teaching traditional culture help students to appreciate modern culture. When a person have profound knowledge of arts, he or she might feel easy to understand the music and advertisement, which full with creative ideas. Considering cultural succession, such lesson is crucial to be offered.这段的例子和traditional还有modern有什么关系啊？！ 不明白咧~~~

In addition, because自己看 前后的分句间根本没有因果关系啊 traditional culture has less relevance to people's modern life, however it is unwise to overlook its historical value. In the past life这个life要了干吗, people have little rights to express individual will or resist authorizes, while arts and literature became a way of reflecting hidden society and personal opinion. For instances, Picasso, a famous painter, reflected his attitude of anti-war in works; Mark Twain,an America writer, his satire criticize the bad influence of industrialization on workers' life这个句子的主语有问题. By learning those masterpieces, the history and the society are replayed用主动语态 in front of us. Culture is a hidden line of human evolution, if people neglect it, human root will be gave up这句话什么意思啊 不明白 什么give up啊~~.

Understandably, traditional culture represents history and contemporary culture reflects modern life. It seems has no relationship; nevertheless, human beings serve as a bridge connecting the two part. Although, courses, such as music, film and so forth have effects on human life directly, it is impossible to deny the usefulness of art and literature in the past, because it is human origin.
全文的逻辑方面我觉得很不错了 现在要注意一些段落内的逻辑联系~~~
加油哈~~~~~~~~


老兄也帮我看看我的吧~~~~~

so猫UID: 148633

不谢
主要是我太喜欢gone with the wind了~~
所以这个问题我一眼就发现了~~~ 呵呵

dezhiUID: 156141

98 Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past."

Should colleges and universities offer more courses about contemporary culture? The speaker claims that such lessons has（这里应该用have） direct relationship of human beings（此句觉得别扭）. I concede that people should learn those relevant knowledge,（这是应该用句号，否则出现语法错误） however, it is impossible to weaken the importance of traditional culture.（我觉得此句有问题，用it is impossible不太好）

Admittedly, the modern society is full of contemporary culture, such as music, television and films, so that if a person desires to touch with （用wants to gain access to如何？）the communities and gains knowledge, one must understand such culture. The main value of contemporary culture is that it can convey information, which （少了is，或者直接去掉逗号和which）related to people's life. For example, with the development of advertisement, human beings can know（用get to know更好吧） new products by watching television, and what most important（这里应该是what is the most important，不过有些罗嗦，不如用the most important） is that the content of advertisement contains original ideas, special plot and various knowledge which can impact（这个词能作动词吗？） people's thought immediately. In addition, new forms of music also explore unknown world of human techniques（音乐和技术也有关联吗？） and emotion, which reflect the social change（用复数比较好吧） and the communication among nations. It is true that contemporary culture helps people connect with the society and learn a great deal of information.

However, considering the process of cultural developing, colleges and universities have the responsibilities to offer arts and literature courses of the past. Although the kind of recent culture is different from traditional one, the pivot inherits pith of arts and literature of past time. If a person desire to understand contemporary culture, one must learn traditional one to understand the cultural origin, process and new theories. For example, a well-known movie "Gone With The Wind" comes from the famous literature（literature是集体名词吧，用在这里合适吗？）. To better understand the background and the plot of movie, people can read the novel while （为什么用while，不如用for the simle reason that）special emotion and feeling cannot be expressed by screen but words. Moreover, teaching traditional culture help（用helps） students to appreciate modern culture. When a person have （用has）profound knowledge of arts, he o r she might feel easy to understand the music and advertisement, which（问题同前，加is或者去掉逗号和which） full with （full of或filled with，没有full with这个搭配）creative ideas. Considering cultural succession, such lesson is crucial to be offered.

In addition, because traditional culture has less relevance to people's modern life, however it is unwise to overlook its historical value（这句中的连词用的不妥）. In the past life（可去掉life）, people have（应用过去式had） little right to express individual will or resist authorizes, while arts and literature became a way of reflecting hidden society and personal opinion. For instances, Picasso, a famous painter reflected his attitude of anti-war in works; Mark Twain, America writer, his satire criticize the bad influence of industrialization on workers' life. By learning those masterpieces, the history and society are replayed in front of us. Culture is a hidden line of human evolution, if people neglect it, human root will be gave（gave是give的过去分词吗？） up.

Understandably, traditional culture （这里应该加that引导定语从句，要不然…）represents history and contemporary culture reflects modern life. It seems has（这又是严重问题，不成句呀！It seems to have） no relationship; nevertheless, human beings serve as a bridge connect（该用connecting） the two part（加s）. Although, courses, such as music, film and so forth have effects on human life directly, it is impossible to deny the usefulness of art and literature in the past, because it is human origin.
本文思路清晰，并且运用了排比举例的方法，不错；
但最大的问题是，很多句子不是句子！也就是没有使用从句，而是按照汉语的思维直接写出来，造成两个谓语等类似情况，这个问题一定要解决呀；
另外有一些单复数，过去分词的低级错误，希望作者今后加以改进！

雪夭UID: 142334

谢谢楼上，我的语法啊
可惜时日不多啊