issue159 快考试了，帮忙看一下哩！

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issue159"The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."
重点帮忙看一下行文的逻辑，谢谢了^_^

When machines were first used in industry, the majority of handed crafter felt released from heavy hand working.  Time elapsing, and since 1958, first computer were invented in Pennsylvania, humans found they would never be annoyed with statistics numerous and dull.  With machines population and further development, they substitute humans in many fields; meanwhile, a fervid discussion arises that whether the human minds or machines are superior.  In my opinion, the human minds are always more intelligent, for machines are only good assistants in human's daily life.

Undeniably, the human mind is a big treasure, in which contains knowledge, experience, originality and so on.  According to an accurate scientific research, there are 100,000 chemical reactions taking place in one second in a human brain when human is thinking.  Some scientists even demonstrated that human still has deep potential, for the human minds are developed only five percent on average, and the best is Einstein’s mind that had been developed ten percent.  How miracle it is!  When some ideas are sparkling in human mind, Newton's Theory of Gravity, Aristotle’s psychological views, Franklin's steam ship, Leonardo Daphnia’s Menials, all the productions come from the little sparkle lighting in the mind.  At the base of predecessor's creation, we absorb as much as knowledge we can, analyze what may be good to us or useless, pick up what we need, learn to avoid tramp of errors, add our own idea instead of simply imitation, then create a new thing that combines knowledge existed and our original thoughts together.  In this case, humans now enjoy the Internet, the transport tools, the electrical equipment, etc. which is from the human mind, the big treasure.

While machines are so sophisticated and really help humans a lot, they cannot surpass human mind, that is, good tools of human minds, for they lack of thinking and creation.  As known to all, computers can calculate several billions of data in one second, which may take thousands of people ten years working day by day; trucks can transport heavy rocks to hundreds of miles away while even the strongest persons in the world together cannot move the rock any more; robots can go to explore some deep excavated caves, whereas it is too dangerous for humans to do.  Machines do good jobs, saving people time, energy, even life; however, they can only go ahead, repeating what people have programmed for them, without thinking.  They will never know how heavy the calculation is, how tired to move those rocks, or what kind of danger they may meet in those unexplored caves.  No consideration, no complaints.  Even, has anyone heard that a machine can invent something new?  Their job is to produce the human's invention, and what they can do is only this.  Therefore, although machines can do many things that human cannot, they are still helpers.

However, some people try to do something bad to others with other machines.  Nowadays, various viruses are spreading on the Internet, which has led to heavy loss not only in individual’s documents but also in some key apartments of nations.  Some murders even use machines to make feints to puzzle the detectives.  Such events are so widely-seen that humans are a bit fearful of machines, resulting in the thought that machines may be superior to human minds.  In this case, we call for the right usage of those machines and avoid crimes and pities.

All in all, without machines' help, human society could not develop in such a dramatic speed; however, if there were no human mind, machines would not know what to do.  Thus, machines will not lead human mind; yet, if only we used them in right way, society would better and increasingly modern in future.

danahUID: 144289

首先，这篇作文你用了多长时间完成，而且考试的时候，众多因素，你觉得写得了如此多么？

你的逻辑分析得不错，论证也不错！

继续努力！

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谢谢鼓励：）
超了一点点时间，
如果是在考场的话，可能最后两段就会合成一段了吧。
看来还是要严格控制时间啊。。。

happycarolUID: 132552

issue159"The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."
重点帮忙看一下行文的逻辑，谢谢了^_^

When machines were first used in industry, the majority of handed crafter felt released from heavy hand working. Time elapsing, and since 1958, first computer were invented in Pennsylvania, humans found they would never be annoyed with statistics numerous and dull. With machines population and further development, they substitute humans in many fields; meanwhile, a fervid discussion arises that whether the human minds or machines are superior. In my opinion, the human minds are always more intelligent, for machines are only good assistants in human's daily life.

Undeniably, the human mind is a big treasure, in which contains knowledge, experience, originality and so on. According to an accurate scientific research, there are 100,000 chemical reactions taking place in one second in a human brain when human is thinking.(仅仅把化学反应多的例子感觉不能说明人脑聪明吗，要是加两句分析说明这是机器模拟、人工智能根本无法想象的复杂和精巧，望尘莫及的是不是要更好点？) Some scientists even demonstrated that human still has deep potential, for the human minds are developed only five percent on average, and the best is Einstein’s mind that had been developed ten percent. How miracle it is! When some ideas are sparkling in human mind, Newton's Theory of Gravity, Aristotle’s psychological views, Franklin's steam ship, Leonardo Daphnia’s Menials, all the productions come from the little sparkle lighting in the mind. At（是不是on?我的语法很差不敢确定：）） the base of predecessor's creation（s）, we absorb as much as knowledge we can（as much knowledge as we can）, analyze what may be good to us or useless, pick up what we need, learn to avoid tramp of errors, add our own idea instead of simply imitation, then create a new thing that combines knowledge existed and our original thoughts together. In this case, humans now enjoy the (powerful)Internet, the （convenient）transport tools, the (safe？呵呵，这个有点勉强)electrical equipment, etc. which is from the human mind, the big treasure.

While（Although？） machines are so sophisticated and really help humans a lot, they cannot surpass human mind, that is, good tools of human minds, for they lack of thinking and creation. As known to all, computers can calculate several billions of data in one second, which may take thousands of people ten years working day by day; trucks can transport heavy rocks to hundreds of miles away while even the strongest persons in the world together cannot move the rock any more; robots can go to explore some deep excavated caves, whereas it is too dangerous for humans to do. Machines do good jobs, saving people time, energy, even life; however, they can only go ahead, repeating what people have programmed for them, without thinking. They will never know how heavy the calculation is, how tired to move those rocks, or what kind of danger they may meet in those unexplored caves. No consideration, no complaints. Even, has anyone heard that a machine can invent something new? Their job is to produce the human's invention, and what they can do is only this. Therefore, although machines can do many things that human cannot, they are still helpers.
这段写得很好阿！把“机器为人类确实能做很多事情，但是他们不可能超越人类，仅仅是不能思考的工具”这个观点分析得很透彻，赞一个！

However, some people try to do something bad to others with other（去掉把？） machines. Nowadays, various viruses are spreading on the Internet, which has led to heavy loss not only in individual’s documents but also in some key apartments of nations. Some murders even use machines to make feints to puzzle the detectives. Such events are so widely-seen that humans are a bit fearful of machines, resulting in the thought that machines may be superior to human minds. In this case, we call for the right usage of those machines and avoid crimes and pities.（这段感觉是不是偏了？你说人类利用机器做坏事情，让人觉得机器很强大，总觉得有点怪，本文重点是要说机器和人类谁更强。我觉得这段，最好举一个现在人工智能发展非常快，如神经网络就能从医学角度模拟人脑中神经元的触发过程等，非常近似于人脑工作，但是由于人脑的规模如你前面提到的复杂性无法达到，很多机器有一定的智能化了。。。）

All in all, without machines' help, human society could not develop in such a dramatic speed; however, if there were no human mind, machines would not know what to do. Thus, machines will not lead human mind; yet, if only we used them in right way, society would better and increasingly modern in future.

呵呵，不好意思，因为自己水平太次也只能改到这个程度，希望能对你有点帮助。

leemeng2004UID: 154535

我也觉得倒数第二段好像和题目的关系不大，不好意思，不知道说的对不对

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呵呵，因为倒数第二段写的时候时间已经来不及了，所以草草收场了，两位的建议很好，谢谢哦^_^