【写作小组】tgrabbit 作业贴

tgrabbitUID: 3508598

新手开始练写作，第一次写，还超时，很多口水话，很渣，求狠批

论点：technology designed to make our life simpler really realizes its goal.

1. video call technology which targeted to make face to face communication easier and effective fulfills its target.

2. the utilization of multi-media technology in class helps demonstrate elusive knowledge in a vivid and interesting way

3. contextual computing technology assists to alert people according to different contexts and let them focus on important issues.

结尾：although some technology may bring complication, from a broader perspective, it indeed makes our life simpler and more effective.

tgrabbitUID: 3508598

终于写完了，求狠批

teenylUID: 3459749

改好啦~3-23

tgrabbitUID: 3508598

艾玛，3.26的题目写得太纠结了。。。感觉写不粗来东西。。。

论点： to remain happy & optimistic is more important than to achieve success itself

分论点1：to remain positive attitude guarantees one's continuous efforts in iterative process. 现如今，成功做成一件事不是一蹴而就，而是时间相对长需要多次迭代的过程。过程中可能遇到各种各样的失败，乐观的面对失败的心态才能保证最后的成功，而非遇上失败直接放弃或改变方向。举web developing例子。

分论点2：to keep optimistic towards attitude is key to survive in modern society. 现代社会竞争激烈，很有可能失败。乐观的心态确保在激烈的竞争中可以存活。以乔布斯被剔除苹果和大学生学业压力大自杀的例子佐证。

结尾：强调下以上内容。。。

康师傅蛋酥卷UID: 3347155

3.26 已改，我刚刚下课所以现在才改完，不好意思，建议写在里面，因为我语法不是很好，所以也不知道语法有没有错误，见谅见谅哈~
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ArchiChuangUID: 3459191

已改。求楼主指导。

tgrabbitUID: 3508598

4.2 综合写作  痛恨我的延迟症！！！

tkt111UID: 3453443

第一次评价综合，你写的应该比我好多了，所以我似乎跳不出太多毛病，如果能加入更多的细节或许会更好？