[求助] [写作]官方范文，简简单单得高分？ [复制链接]

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发表于 2015-9-1 23:20:07 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

托福官方满分范文里有一些文章的用词和句式写得非常简单，但是后面的标注都是

This is a 5 point essay

比方说Topic62的第一篇：

Friends are very important in everyone's life. But there are different types of friends: some of them are very intelligent, some have a good sense of humor and some are reliable. What I want most is the friend who has a good sense of humor.

Humor is a very important character of a person, because a person who is humorous can always bring you happiness. I have a friend, who is not very intelligent and reliable, but he is one of my best friends, just because he has a good sense of humor. Whenever you call him, talk with him, he always tells you some funny jokes that make you laughing. Even though you are in a very bad mood, he can make you laugh and forget the sad things. A friend with a good sense of humor is very optimistic; they can make your world full of light.

If a person doesn't have a sense of humor at all, that's really bad. No matter how intelligent he is, no matter how reliable he is, he will never bring you happiness, although he can help you solve a few problems, his world is without laughter. In my class there is a very smart guy, but because of his lack of humor, we don't like to play with him, although it seems that he knows everything.

Friend plays a very significant role in everyone's life. But humor is the most important character in a friend, because humorous friends make you happy and see the world optimistically. They make your world full of hope, and full of laughter.

也许是我功力尚浅看不出来，我感觉本篇逻辑和行文都很简单，字数也才266，和大家分析得高分作文的行文思路也不是特别符合，怎么是满分作文呢？还是我的这个版本是过时的？这里附上。

请各位大牛指教>_<