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发表于 2004-7-8 12:24:09 |只看该作者
速度啊。考试的时候一定会比你练习的时候充裕的,一来你可以提前看题目,省去考g思考提纲的时间。二来万一有幸是你曾经研究过的题目,就等着惊喜吧。赫赫。

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发表于 2004-7-11 23:38:05 |只看该作者
今天刚写了篇作文,请大家提出宝贵意见:)Topic185:You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
Between a house and a business, which would you purchase when you have enough money? Facing this question, different people may hold diverse opinions. Personally , I will definitely support buying a house. I deem that a house will bring us more benefits than a business. The following are reasons to back up my viewpoint.

First of all, buying a house almost has no risks. As it known to all, the business is a kind of highly risky activity. Meanwhile, a profitable business needs careful running and thoughtful management. Otherwise, the businessman will go bankrupt. On the contrary, buying a house is a another situation. As a concrete object, the house remains its value, namely, it will not depreciate in a twinkling.

In addition, buying a house can make life more comfortable. Sharing with a nice house, your families can watch TV together in the spacious living room and eat meals in the near dining room. As a result, the house always overflows with laughter. Obviously, owning a house makes your families more harmonious.

Furthermore, price of the house you bought may increase out of surprise. The place where your house is located may be less developed when you purchases it, but several years later, it becomes an industrialized city. With the rapid development of its economy, accordingly, the price of houses here will increase largely. Consequently, you will earn much money without any efforts.

Of course, purchasing a business may have its own merits, such as improving abilities, gaining more experiences or earning extra money. But if all the factors are contemplated, I think the advantages of buying a house carries more weight than those of purchasing a business. Hence, it is easy for us to draw the conclusion that buying a house is superior to purchasing a business.
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发表于 2004-7-13 22:56:09 |只看该作者
(Between a house and a business, which would you purchase when you have enough money?) Which would you purchase when you have enough money, a house or a business?Facing this question, different people may hold diverse opinions. Personally , I willwould definitely support buying a house. I deem that a house willwould bringbrings us more benefits than a business. The following are reasons to back up my viewpoint.

First of all, buying a house almost has no risks. As it known to all, the business is a kind of highly risky activity. Meanwhile, a profitable business needs careful runningmanipulation and (thoughtful)inappropriate adjective management. Otherwise, the businessman will wouldgo bankrupt. On the contrary, buying a house is (a) another situation. As a (concrete object)real property, the house remains its value, namely, it willwould not depreciate in a twinkling.

As the utilization appearing in many of paragdigms, writers frequently use the word "would" and " might" instead of "will" and "may" , respectively.
Therefore, I would like not to point out such error in the following paragraph of your essay.



In addition, buying a house can make life more comfortable. Sharing with a nice house, your families can watch TV together in the spacious living room and eat meals in the near dining room. As a result, the house always overflows with laughter. Obviously, owning a house makes your families more harmonious.

good operation for the varience of sentence patterns.

Furthermore, price of the house you boughtbuy may increase out of surprise. The place where your house (is located) locates may be less developed when you purchases it, but several years later, it might becomes an industrialized city. With the rapid development of its economy, accordingly, the price of houses here will increase largely considerably. Consequently, by selling the house you will earn much money without any efforts .

Of course, purchasing a business may have its own merits, such as improving abilities, gaining more experiences or earning extra money. But if all the factors are contemplated, I think the advantages of buying a house carries more weight than those of purchasing a business. Hence, it is easy for us to draw the conclusion that buying a house is superior to purchasing a business.

My propositon: 1) make use of Microsoft Word software to srutinize errors in syntax before pasting it on this board
2) make use of "金山词霸" to better word choosing

I hope that helps.
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发表于 2004-7-13 23:39:33 |只看该作者
Thanks for your attention! dijest, do you continue writing these days?
I am expecting your second composition!
(It seems our board is nearly deserted, so let us make it active:))
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发表于 2004-7-15 10:44:52 |只看该作者
楼上的相互修改很有好处,希望能继续。
也希望能提出具体的问题。
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发表于 2004-7-15 19:47:37 |只看该作者

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29. By distinguishing himself as a judge in Arizona, Sandra Day O'Connor caught President A                                   A              B                                                              C
Reagan's attention and was appointed the first woman justice on the Supreme Court.
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答案是A: himself。 为什么不对呢。

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发表于 2004-7-21 08:35:03 |只看该作者
这组的人哪儿去了?
爱情无需刻意去把握,越是想紧紧地抓牢自己的爱情,反而容易失去自我,失去原则,失去彼此之间本来应该保持的宽容和谅解,爱情也会因此而变的毫无美感。
每个人都希望自己拥有幸福美满的婚姻和爱情,但是爱是需要能力的,这个能力就是让你爱的人爱你。

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发表于 2004-7-26 16:57:44 |只看该作者
我们这个组人气不旺的原因:
1 大家过于serious。其实有什么问题尽管提出来好了,互助小组的成员未必能解决的,但至少可以给你出出主意。每天到这来逛逛,聊聊心得体会,放松一下也是好的。看看回复数目到100多的组,也不一定要解决每一个问题。
2 不能给出标准答案的问题,我们不妨讨论讨论。比如hislying最近的那道题,我就是因为不知道该怎么说,迟迟不发帖子。其实我最大的困惑是:你是不是打错了,怎么这话看过去那么别扭。
3 没有趁热打铁。在我cnjsksk改了文章后,我们已经活跃起来了,可后来因为自己的原因,没及时贴我的second composition,冷了兄弟们的心。hsliying发了文章后,又没有人理。

我估计再没人说话,我们这就死定了。我们幸运的在gt路上成为战友,让我们互相支持,一路向前。

sigh~~,一口气说了这么多正经话,我服了自己了。
接下来,应cnjsksk的建议,发我的second composition.我知道一定有人看的,因为我们组的回贴数虽然低,浏览数却不低,这说明每天有很多哥们来光顾,只是羞于启齿。
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发表于 2004-7-26 17:01:08 |只看该作者
Topic: some people think studying in a university is worthwhile only because you can get a degree. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give specific reasons to support your answer.

I strongly disagree with the assertion studying in a university is worthwhile only because of the degree. In fact, what a degree can reflect is the basic criterion required by the level of university education; hence there are more valuable things that one is not able to understand barely through a degree.

First of all, studying in a university is a process of disciplining one's ability to learn. During the period of learning in college, students have to accomplish the task including numerous courses, experiments, investigations and so forth, which is obviously a formidable work comparing with that they have encountered in high school. Therefore, in order to overcome these difficulties, they are forced to master the knack of assign their day-to-day life. Indeed, for the purpose of making sure graduates are competent to acquire knowledge which might be unfamiliar, complex, but necessary to solve practical problems, this suffering experience serves as a preparation for the challenge faced in the future life.

Secondly, unlike the education before college, students in university have the opportunity to contact with experts. Especially in famous universities, prominent professors can not only instruct knowledge of certain subjects, but also convey the distinct perspective to understand and the subtle method to solve problems. Undoubtedly, the masters' wisdom obtained by students is an abiding wealth.

Thirdly, given the fact that students in a university come from different areas or even different countries, learning how to deal with the relationship with others is another worthwhile course in university. For example, when I studied in a university, four of my roommates came from the south part of China where the average temperature is much higher than that in my hometown. As a result, they often open the window even in the night of winter, which I can not tolerate. After vehement quarrelling without gaining any result for several times, I tried to explain patiently the harm of this habit to the person sleeping near the window in winter, and then the situation changed. On the other hand, I gradually do not feel so bad when they open the window.

To sum up, it is superficial to view the worth of studying in university only as a degree. People possessing such experience are fortunate to learn more than what a degree requires.
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发表于 2004-7-29 09:35:13 |只看该作者
:)最近忙g作文了,糊里糊涂的终于考完了。所以最近一直没有时间光顾托福的事情。现在终于可以踏实在这一块了。刚从北京考回来。等我歇歇的,一定回归这个队伍。

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发表于 2004-7-31 16:42:29 |只看该作者
Topic: some people think studying in a university is worthwhile only because you can get a degree. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give specific reasons to support your answer.

I strongly disagree with the assertion that studying in a university is worthwhile only because of the degree. In fact, what a degree can reflect is the basic criterion required by the level of  (cancel) university education; hence there are more valuable things that one is not able to understand barely through a degree.

First of all, studying in a university is a process of disciplining one's ability to learn. During the period of learning in college, students have to accomplish the task including numerous courses, experiments, investigations and so forth, which is obviously a formidable work comparing with that they have encountered in high school. Therefore, in order to overcome these difficulties, they are forced to master the knack of assign their day-to-day life. Indeed, {for the purpose of making sure graduates are competent to acquire knowledge}这句语法? which might be unfamiliar, complex, but necessary to solve practical problems, this suffering experience serves as a preparation for the challenge faced in the future life.

Secondly, unlike the education before college, students in university have the opportunity to contact with experts. Especially in famous universities, prominent professors can not only instruct knowledge of certain subjects, but also convey the distinct perspective to understand and the subtle method to solve problems. Undoubtedly, the masters' wisdom obtained by students is an abiding wealth.

Thirdly, given the fact that students in a university come from different areas or even different countries, learning how to deal with the relationship with others is another worthwhile course in university. For example, when I studied in a university, four of my roommates came from the south part of China where the average temperature is much higher than that in my hometown. As a result, they often open the window even in the night of winter, which I cannot tolerate. After vehement quarrelling without gaining any result for several times, I tried to explain patiently the harm of this habit to the person sleeping near the window in winter, and then the situation changed. On the other hand(为什么要用这个连词?我觉得不合适) I gradually do not feel so (口语化,不能这样用在写作里)bad when they open the window.

To sum up, it is superficial to view the worth of studying in university only as a degree. People possessing such experience are fortunate to learn more than what a degree requires.
用词不错,结构也够清晰,凭我的感觉对付托福作文应该没有什么大问题的。

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发表于 2004-8-1 13:26:07 |只看该作者
Thank you. 我看那个on the other hand 不如改为meanwhile,或 at the same time.
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发表于 2004-8-4 10:33:23 |只看该作者
托福作文想拿高分,必须改掉一些从小养成的不好的用词习惯。比如first, seconde....这些东西的出现会降低文章的档次,所以根本不要使用。
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发表于 2004-8-6 10:07:17 |只看该作者
God,真的阿。我是离了first, second 活不了。看来还得练练。
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发表于 2004-8-6 10:08:49 |只看该作者
斑竹给点建议吧,不用这些每一段的开头咋写,起承转接怎么办。
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