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转自未名BBS
句子也是如此,我们提倡简炼,但不是说都用简单句。有人认为在写作考试中,采用简
单句、短句、容易掌握,不在会出错,因而也最保险。这话没有错,但简单句用得太多
,造成简单句的堆彻实际上是语言技巧不成熟、不老练,甚至语言水平低下的表现。在
阅卷人员看来,同样的意思内容,一个考生能够运用比较复杂的句子结构来表达,其语
言水平当然要比只会用简单句来表达的考生的语言水平高出一截,就是有点错也不妨碍
他比后者取得较高的分数,因为他的难度系数要高。在某种意义上来说,在词数相同的
作文中,语言水平越高,语言技巧越熟练,句子的数目也就越少。这就意味着句子长了
,句子结构复杂了。
当然,我们反对过多地使用简单句并不是鼓励学生去刻意追求长句、复杂句。我们
追求的是句子结构的多变。一篇文章能根据表达的内容使用不同的句子结构,会产生较
好的艺术效果。
例子1
The Career I Pursue的主体段:
A variety of reasons have led me to choose this occupation ov
er other more lucrative ones. First, teaching is learning. To make
my lectures more interesting, I have to read more books, explore
new knowledge and gain a better understanding of the world—the
very thing I like to do in my life. Second, teaching means freed
om. As a teacher, I can freely express my opinions and explain t
hem in my own way since nobody will interfere with me. Finally,
I like teaching because it offers a certain peace of mind. No mo
re rushing to catching a morning bus, no more anxiety to please
a boss, and no more worries about being laid off because you are
getting old.
文中有4个词的短句First, teaching is learning.也有27个词的长句To make
my lectures more interesting, I have to read more books, explore
new knowledge and gain a better understanding of the world—the
very thing I like to do in my life.有简单句,也有复杂句As a teacher
, I can freely express my opinions and explain them in my own w
ay since nobody will interfere with me;还有同位语句,断裂句,排比句,比
较句等,因而文章读起来节奏感强。所谓句子变化,主要是指句子的开头要有变化,句子
的结构要有变化,句子的长度要有变化。不要连续使用几个简单句(如例9中的a)),
要学会使用复杂句(如例9中的b))。
例2
a) Teenagers are pressured by school work. They are also encou
raged by their peers. Under such circumstances, they resort to smo
king. But sometimes they feel a little guilty.
b) Pressured by school work and encouraged by their peers, tee
nagers often resort to smoking, tough they feel a little guilty s
ometimes.
a) College students now are primarily interested in grades and
economic success. They are expected to cheat on exams more frequen
tly. This is not like those who graduated 10 years ago. They are
only concerned with their own personal future. They consider litt
le problems of society. All these are reported by a recent study.
b) A recent study reports that college students now are primar
ily interested in grades and economic success, that they are expec
ted to cheat on exams more frequently than those who graduated 10
years ago, and that they are more concerned with their own pers
onal future than with problems of society.
不要总是以有生命的名词和人称代词开头(受汉语表达习惯的影响,不少考生部喜欢
以I,People,We等开头),如例10中的a)。
例3
a) Many people think birth control is quite necessary in China
.
b) It is widely (commonly) thought/believed/held/accepted) that b
irth control is quite necessary in China.
a) More and more people agree (realize/are aware) that women s
hould enjoy full equality with men.
b) There is a growing agreement (realization/awareness) that wom
en should enjoy full equality with men.
a) Many Chinese people have gone to the United States in the
past 15 years.
b) The past 15 years have brought many Chinese people to the
United States.
a) We almost forget this event.
b) This event is now almost fading from our memory.
a) Students should certainly make continuous efforts.
b) Continuous efforts on the part of students are certainly re
quired.
a) We easily drew the conclusion through the investigation.
b) The investigation easily led us to the conclusion.
不要千篇一律地使用主动态(英语中被动结构的使用频率远高于汉语),如例11中的a
)。
例4
a) We are making great efforts to improve our English.
b) Great efforts are being made to improve our English.
a) We know very little about the nature of human beings.
b) Little is known about the nature of human beings.
a) Because of social demands, there appear many evening schools
.
b) Many evening schools are called into existence by social de
mands.
a) We may think more of the elderly who live apart from thei
r children.
b) More thought may be given to the elderly who live apart f
rom their children.
不要总是用(如果),(因为),(当)等口语意味较重的句子,如例12中的a); 要注意使
用书面语体的句子, 如例12中的b).
例5
a) if you compare bicycles with cars carefully, you will find
bicycles are superior to cars
b) careful comparison of bicycles with cars will cars will sho
w the superiority of the former over the latter.
a) If we only apply book knowledge, we will not get good res
ults.
b) The application of book knowledge alone won’t bring you go
od results.
a) If we can better understand the greater pressure of populat
ion growth, we will have a correct attitude towards family plannin
g.
b) A better understanding of the greater pressure of population
growth is essential to a correct attitude towards family planning
.
a) When a woman sees that she is going to be laid off, she
begins to worry all day and night.
b) The mere prospect of lay-off would set a women to worry a
ll day and night.
a) When our teacher had left, the heated discussion then ended
.
b) The departure of our teacher brought the heated discussion
to an end.
a) Only when we make continuous efforts, can we seize an oppo
rtunity when it occurs.
b) Continuous efforts must be made before it is possible for
us to seize an opportunity when it occurs.
a) Because we cannot apply book knowledge to practice, we cann
ot handle real problems in society.
b) The inability to apply book knowledge to practice prevents
us from handing real problems in society.
a) Because the decision recognizes the rights of students, so
they all welcome it.
b) Students all welcome the decision which recognizes their rig
hts.
不要对动词过分依赖,如例13的a); 要学会用名词结构来表达意思, 如例13的b)
例6
a) The style of living has become more and more popular and
accepted by more and more young people.
b) The style of living has found its growing popularity and a
cceptance among young people.
a) It is time for us to revise educational system and then p
rovide it to our society.
b) It is time for us to provide our society a revised educat
ional system.
a) If we are watching too much TV, our reading ability will
be seriously affected.
b) Heavy exposure to TV will exert an negative effect on our
reading ability.
a) If we don’ t recognize the serious problem of growing pop
ulation, we will make a big mistake.
b) Failure to recognize the seriousness of growing population w
ill lead to a big mistake.
不要总是用肯定句来表达,如例14中的a);要学会用否定句来表达肯定的意思, 如例
14中的b).
例7
a) Every young boy and girl wants to earn a little money to
help cover higher college cost.
b) There is hardly a young boy and girl who doesn’t want to
earn a little money to help cover higher college cost.
a) Whenever you pick up a newspaper, you will always find adv
ertisements.
b) It is impossible to pick up a newspaper without finding ad
vertisements.
a) Gathering around and listening to mother or father read a
good story is the best pastimes to bring a family closer together
.
b) Few pastimes bring a family closer together than gathering
around and listening to mother or father read a good story.
a) Do is the most basic issue to individual and national surv
ival.
b) No issue is as basic to individual and national survival a
s food.
恰当地使用排比、平行句,如例15中的b).
例8
a) I am in favor of equal rights for women. I think women s
hould especially have the right to compete with men for jobs on
equal terms. They should get the same pay as men for the same j
ob. They should also have equal opportunities for promotion.
b) I am in favor of equal rights for women, especially the r
ight to compete with men for jobs on equal terms, the right to
get the same pay as men for the same job, and the right to equ
al opportunities for promotion.
a) The nationwide controversy over the current reforms will tes
t the courage of our people. Through the controversy we can also
see the determination of our government.
b) The nationwide controversy over the current reforms will tes
t the courage of our people and the determination of our governme
nt.
a) For the first time in history Chinese citizens held such p
ower in their own hands. In the past they have never been allowe
d such vigorous and unrestrained debate on politics.
b) Never before in history have Chinese citizens held such pow
er in their own hands. Never before in history have they been al
lowed such vigorous and unrestrained debate on politics.
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