复习作文五天，我的第一篇作文issue153题，很需要大家给我指出毛病在哪里,谢谢啊

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153."Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
   
    I think what the speaker asserts is possibly right .I may have some reasons to be provided in favor of the view that"students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study , They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."   
     First, nothing in the world is absolutely correct. without a certain skepticism, we may be sometimes confused. For instance, it is almost impossible to find something without a single mistake. the theory printed in the books, the words said by the teacher, even the knowledge it self also have defect. just think how chaos our mind would be if we put all the things into our brain without a certain skepticism. thus,  recit whatever we are taught are not enough at all, moreover, we have to be skeptical to what we are learning. By doing so, we can have a much more clear mind in study and more likely to make a god job in school.
     But that is only part of the explanation, the most significant reason of why student's should have a skeptical  attiude  and question what the are taught  is that it can help students to develop their abilities of learning an thinking which is very important for their future life.because,when students are specious to what they are studying, they must make tremendous effort to scrutinize, exam and analyse instead of merely reciting the letters printed in the books. During this process of suspicion, the thinking and learning ability of the students are greatly improved. We can not achieve the same goal by reciting some theory like the 相对论,or write some 马克土文's articles. Therefore, it is obvious that holding a skeptical attitude really make advantage in shaping students' ability in both learning and thinking. Furthermore, as it is   known to all both of them are very important for every people to accommodate to the society and to achieve success. Just imagine what it would be like if students have no suspicion to whatever they study and accepting  what they were taught without a doubt? I am comparatively sure that they may be lack in learning and thinking ability and such lack will stand in the way of their success.
     Nevertheless, pay too much attention in holding a skepticism sounds a little abslustic and may make things worse. I will not deny that ,in some cases, merely reciting is a effective and a efficient way in our learning. A common example is: reciting some meaning of the word and some articles are indispensability for us to learn a language.
     Due to the reasons mentioned above, It seems almost certain that students should both be skeptical to what they study and question what they are taught. Teachers, also, should encourage and help students to develop a habit of criticalthinking to the things they study rather than cram their brain with knowledge without their own thinking.  To do these is not only good for students' study and future life but also important to our society to develop.

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不好意思，文章开头都忘记加空格了。
问个很傻的问题，考试时正式的，每行开头应该加几个空格？

一开始用了50分钟就写了篇文章，感觉太垃圾，300多字就完了，然后干脆全扔了。然后耗了一晚上才耗出来一篇，感觉一般。举不出例子……感觉论证手法挺单薄，请大家务必给些建议。
三月二十几号就要考了，过两周还要开学上课，感觉作文还没开窍呢，不知该怎么准备。
真的很需要大家的帮助。

谢谢谢谢谢谢

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占位先, DOWN下来仔细看

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153."Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

I think what the speaker asserts is possibly right. 感觉这里possibly不用比较好 I may have some reasons to be provided 这里需要被动?in favor of the view that"students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study , They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

照抄论题不大好


First, nothing in the world is absolutely correct. 这句话多余 without a certain skepticism, we may be sometimes confused. For instance, it is almost impossible to find something without a single mistake. the theory printed in the books, the words said by the teacher, even the knowledge it self also have defect. just think how chaos our mind would be if we put all the things into our brain without a certain skepticism. thus, recit  whatever we are taught are not enough at all, moreover, we have to be skeptical to what we are learning. By doing so, we can have a much more clear mind in study and more likely to make a god job in school.

这一段主要论述了我们所学的会有错误,会有缺点, 所以我们需要怀疑.  感觉论证不是很有力度


But that is only part of the explanation, the most significant reason of why student's should have a skeptical attiude and question what they are taught is that it can help students to develop their abilities of learning and thinking which is very important for their future life.because,when students are specious to what they are studying, they must make tremendous effort to scrutinize, exam and analyse instead of merely reciting the letters printed in the books. During this process of suspicion, the thinking and learning ability of the students are greatly improved. We can not achieve the same goal by reciting some theory like the 相对论(relativity theory),or write some 马克土文's (Mark Twain)articles. Therefore, it is obvious that holding a skeptical attitude really make advantage in shaping students' ability in both learning and thinking.这里和前面反复说, 重复了 Furthermore, as it is known to all both of them are very important for every people to accommodate to the society and to achieve success. Just imagine what it would be like if students have no suspicion to whatever they study and accepting  what they were taught without a doubt? I am comparatively sure that they may be lack in learning and thinking ability and such lack will stand in the way of their success.

此段反复说learning and thinking ability , 论证苍白


Nevertheless, pay too much attention in holding a skepticism sounds a little abslustic and may make things worse. I will not deny that ,in some cases, merely reciting is a effective and a  efficient way in our learning. A common example is: reciting some meaning of the word and some articles are indispensability for us to learn a language.

妥协太厉害, 没有着重too much skepticism 带来的危害, 只是说了说memorizing的好处


Due to the reasons mentioned above, It seems almost certain that students should both be skeptical to what they study and question what they are taught. Teachers, also, should encourage and help students to develop a habit of critical thinking to the things they study rather than cram their brain with knowledge without their own thinking. To do these is not only good for students' study and future life but also important to our society to develop.

结尾一般, 注意语法



整篇还有许多的语法和拼写错误
分段顶格， 空一行

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I think what the speaker asserts is possibly right .I may have some reasons to be provided in favor of the view that"students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study , They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

First, nothing in the world is absolutely correct. without a certain skepticism, we may be sometimes confused. For instance, it is almost impossible to find something without a single mistake. the theory printed in the books, the words said by the teacher, even the knowledge it self also have defect. 这句话主语应该是theory, words and knowledge, even 是副词,不能做连词just think how chaos our mind would be if we put all the things into our brain without a certain skepticism. thus, recit whatever we are taught 主语应为分词reciting, 所以动词用isare not enough
at all, moreover, we have to be skeptical to what we are learning. By doing so, we can have a much more clear mind in study and more likely to make a god job in school."." 后面的首字母不大写的毛病太多,我就不找了,要自己注意哦,感觉此段没有展开,just think how...與前面連接很突然


But that is only part of the explanation, that 指代不清 the most significant reason of why students should have a skeptical attiude and question what they are taught is that it can help students to develop their abilities of learning an thinking which is very important for their future life.because,when students are specious? to what they are studying, they must make tremendous effort to scrutinize, exam and analyse instead of merely reciting the letters printed in the books. During this process of suspicion, the thinking and learning ability of the students are greatly improved. We can not achieve the same goal by reciting some theory like the 相对论,or write some 马克土文's articles. Therefore, it is obvious that holding a skeptical attitude really make advantage in shaping students' ability in both learning and thinking. Furthermore, as it is known to all both of them are very important for every people to accommodate to the society and to achieve success. Just imagine what it would be like if students have no suspicion to whatever they study and accepting what they were taught without a doubt? I am comparatively sure that they may be lack in learning and thinking ability and such lack will stand in the way of their success.

Nevertheless, pay too much attention in holding a skepticism sounds a little abslustic and may make things worse. I will not deny that ,in some cases, merely reciting is a effective and a efficient way in our learning. A common example is: reciting some meaning of the word and some articles are indispensability for us to learn a language. 让步没有展开，例子，让人有些看不懂

Due to the reasons mentioned above, It seems almost certain that students should both be skeptical to what they study and question what they are taught. Teachers, also, should encourage and help students to develop a habit of criticalthinking to the things they study rather than cram their brain with knowledge without their own thinking. To do these is not only good for students' study and future life but also important to our society to develop.为什么上一段有让步而结尾丝毫没有提到呢

开头不用空，每段另起一行

新东方的模式很明显, 最好写自己的摸板，不要有太多的痕迹。

有一些很基本的语法错误, 比如,.不分, "." 后面的首字母不大写. 建议你写完以后先用WORD先查一遍再帖到

网上,自己改也是一个认识自己错误的过程啊.还有  RELATIVITY THEORY , MARK TWAIN,这样的词都要自己先

背背.精华区有很多好东东,找找看哦.

我的建议是先不要在词语上花太多时件，而是要在内容上说话的逻辑上下工夫。当有充足的例子和论据支持时

，文章自然就会很漂亮。

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你们的意见很宝贵，谢谢啊，deannaa和migao21，你们说的对我帮助很大
这是我第一片文章，看来差距还是很大啊
其实我一直苦恼的就是没有例子可举。
名人事迹和实事知道的都不多，也不太会用英语表达
而自己编的实例到底能用么？好么？

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还有就是deannaa提到的：“新东方的模式很明显, 最好写自己的摸板，不要有太多的痕迹”
我已经尽量的写自己的模板了，但似乎看起来还是很明显。
不过我觉得没有一个固定的模板也不行，很难在45分钟写出那么长的文章……
对模板该如何弄这个问题我一直有很大的疑惑。
issue的模板到底应给是什么样的呢？怎么写就比较好？是不是开头和结尾一定要有个模板？
你们能给我举个例子么？什么样的模板才可以用？