如果你是高手们，就请瞄一下这个句子！

smartyrUID: 169453

我想举例子对比，不同职业的人看问题，思考问题的方式也是不一样的(我是从新概念里改装而成的)，觉得不是太妥，请改一下，地道点的表达。句子如下：
[B]For instance, Michelangelo may perceive an egg as a simple solid shape and consider how to make it become an artwork while Shakespeare may more have an idea that it will become a bird when they see the same egg, let us imagine.[/B]

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这个句子我觉得写得很好
楼主有什么问题吗?

不为虾米UID: 195785

楼主,你的标题有问题.
单复数不一致啊. 你 怎么可以是 高手 们啊

不为虾米UID: 195785

let us imagine删除掉,味道不对.
make it become欠流畅
句式还好.

不为虾米UID: 195785

新概念哪一篇 贴出来瞅瞅嘛.

smartyrUID: 169453

原本标题打算写“高手们过来看看”的，后来觉得这样吸引不了你们！所以就凑了个这样蹩脚的题！
这是新概念4 Lesson 31 The sculptor speaks

smartyrUID: 169453

原句子如下：
He must, for example, perceive an egg as a simple single solid shape, quite apart from its significance as food, or from the literary idea that it will become a bird!
我写的句子就是觉得不是太地道！句法上没有什么太大的问题吧？

不为虾米UID: 195785

when they see the same egg, let us imagine.

同学,这个有点问题,你解释解释

smartyrUID: 169453

请知无不言！！
请给另个表达

不为虾米UID: 195785

when they see the same egg, let us imagine.
就改成简单一点嘛 when he see the same one.

:D 原来貌似高手也是一件很爽的事情 拉拉拉拉.

smartyrUID: 169453

足下太谦虚了！！

flyingwindUID: 189320

最初由 不为虾米 发布
[B]楼主,你的标题有问题.
单复数不一致啊. 你 怎么可以是 高手 们啊 [/B]

楼主用英语思维写汉语了，厉害！
英语里面你和你们都是you！

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For instance, Michelangelo may perceive an egg as a simple solid shape这个还能改  and consider how to make it an artwork while Shakespeare may otherwise have an idea that it will evolve to a bird when he met the same egg, which leaves every unique individual to imagine.

不为虾米UID: 195785

签名好漂亮 怎么做的。。。。

smartyrUID: 169453

最初由 花心大萝卜 发布
[B]For instance, Michelangelo may perceive an egg as a simple solid shape这个还能改  and consider how to make it an artwork while Shakespeare may otherwise have an..

以下省略...... [/B]

For instance, Michelangelo may perceive an egg as a simple solid shape and consider how to make it an artwork while Shakespeare may otherwise have an idea that it will evolve into a bird when he met the same one, which leaves every unique individual to imagine.


这样改行不行？
For instance, Michelangelo may perceive an egg as a simple solid shape and consider how to make it an artwork while it may otherwise an idea occurs to Shakespeare that the very one will evolve into a bird, which leaves every unique individual to imagine.