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A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person—often so briefly that the waking goes unnoticed—and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.
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In this argument, the arguer recommends that anyone who snores should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more to keep fit. At first glance, this argument is very specific and convincing. A careful examination of it, however, would reveal how groundless it is.

Firstly, the mere fact that people snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds is insufficient to conclude that these person will feel very tired during the day. As the arguer has said, the waking is so brief that the people who snore do not notice the interruption. In this sense, it is quite possible that the short waking does not impair these people's sheep or the influence is very slight. Moreover, tired people tend to have a sound sheep, thus it is equally possible that the person who snore sheep well just because of the brief waking.

Besides, granted that the people who snore feel tired during the day, it is no reason to say that these people will not do exercise during the day. Although people who snore will feel tired during the day, they may be accustomed to the tire after long term, in this sense, they might do exercise as ordinary people. Even if they are not used to fatigue, they may do sport, too. Most of us including the person who snore know the importance of sports and would like to do exercise during spare time. Thus although these person are tired, they also do exercise to keep fit.

Finally, even if person who snore do not do much exercise as ordinary people for the reason that they are too tired, it is still unadvisable to recommend them to eat less. Common sense tells us that, people who feel tired always do not have good appetite and eat less. Thus although they do not do much exercise during the day, they might be very thin because they eat so less. If so, the arguer's recommendation has no sense at all. Granted that person who snore gain more weight than ordinary people because of their snore, people should go to hospital to heal their snore rather than to go on a diet, which is not rational at all.

To sum up, this argument is not well reasoning and lack of credibility. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide evidence to prove that the snore causes their fatness and the snore can not be heal easily.

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A good tool.[不如改为A useful/helpful tool.]In this argument, the arguer recommends that anyone who snores should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more to keep fit. At first glance, this argument is very specific and convincing. A careful examination of it, however, would reveal how groundless it is. [这句好别扭  However, a careful examination will reveal the groundless of the recommendation.]

Firstly, the mere fact that people snore also [and] [stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds 这个能不能换成have sleep apnea 不然太长 看起来绕] is insufficient to conclude that these person will feel very tired during the day. As the arguer has said, the waking is so brief that the people who snore do not notice the interruption [我的觉得这一点算是 well-establish 没有必要攻击]. In this sense, it is quite possible that the short waking does not impair these people's sheep or the influence is very slight. Moreover, tired people tend to have a sound sheep, thus it is equally possible that the person who snore sheep well just because of the brief waking. [主要应该针对 tired 的原因来讲]

Besides, granted that the people who snore feel tired during the day, it is no reason to say that these people will not do exercise during the day. Although people who snore will feel tired during the day [和开头那句一模一样 没有必要讲了], they may be accustomed to the tire after long term, in this sense, they might do exercise as ordinary people [习惯的长期的疲倦后 就会象正常人一样的运动了 这一点没有说服力]. Even if they are not used to fatigue, they may do sport [, too][as well]. Most of us including the person who snore know the importance of sports and would like to do exercise during spare time. Thus although these person are tired, they also do exercise to keep fit. [这个很好]

Finally, even if person who snore do not do much exercise as ordinary people [for the reason that][as] they are too tired, it is still unadvisable to recommend them to eat less. [Common sense tells us that,不要这句] people who feel tired always do not have good appetite and eat less. Thus although they do not do much exercise during the day, they might be very thin because they eat so less. If so, the arguer's recommendation has no sense at all. Granted that person who snore gain more weight than ordinary people because of their snore [这个用中文讲都很绕 可以删一处 snore 或者分成两句], people should go to hospital to heal their snore rather than to go on a diet, which is not rational at all.

To sum up, this argument is not well reasoning and lack of credibility. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide evidence to prove that the snore causes their fatness and the snore can not be heal easily.

imjasonUID: 176604

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A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person—often so briefly that the waking goes unnoticed—and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.
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In this argument, the arguer recommends that anyone who snores should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more to keep fit. At first glance, this argument is very specific and convincing我个人总觉得如果开始出现了，有点像是在否定自己的判断，范文确实是这样，但是好象不是这个说法. A careful examination of it, however, would reveal how groundless it is.
我觉得很明显的是ARGU只要出现了STUDY之类都会对之首先进行狂批
Firstly, the mere fact that people snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds is insufficient to conclude that these person will feel very tired during the day. As the arguer has said, the waking is so brief that the people who snore do not notice the interruption. In this sensecase, it is quite possible that the short waking does not impair these people's sheep or the influence is very slight这个如果防在or前面可能要更好些. Moreover, tired people tend to have a sound sheep, thus it is equally possible that the person who snore sheep拼写 well just because of什么意思 the brief waking.

Besides, granted that the people who snore feel tired during the day, it is no reason to say that these people will not do exercise during the day. （Although people who snore will feel tired during the day,）这句话可以不要吧 they may be accustomed to the tire after long term,这个不具有说服力啊，长期累有可能会出问题了，怎么还能适应 in this sense, they might do exercise as ordinary people. Even if they are not used to fatigue, they may do sport, too. Most of us including the person who snore know the importance of sports and would like to do exercise during spare time这个？不是很清楚的. Thus although these person are tired, they also do exercise to keep fit.

Finally, even if person who snore do not do much exercise as ordinary people for the reason that they are too tired, it is still unadvisable to recommend them to eat less. Common sense tells us that, people who feel tired always do not have good appetite and eat less. Thus although they do not do much exercise during the day, they might be very thin because they eat so less. If so, the arguer's recommendation has no sense at all. Granted that person who snore gain more weight than ordinary people because of their snore, people should go to hospital to heal their snore rather than to go on a diet很8错, which is not rational at all.

To sum up, this argument is not well reasoning and lack of credibility这个没必要说两个吧. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide evidence to prove that the snore causes their fatness and the snore can not be heal easily.结尾有些仓促
全篇思路是清晰的，就是稍嫌展开不够。对于那个STUDY在ARGU中的出现，我觉得Ger们应该形成条件反射。