Issue185 高频题（丑闻），感觉写得好差，还超时

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大家帮忙拍拍砖吧，对issue几乎失去信心了，写得很慢，语言又不好
只怪自己基础太差。
大家看能有几分，谢谢！

Issue 185
“Scandals whether in politics, academia, or other areas can be useful. They focus out attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.”
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Are scandals useful in politics, academia and other areas to focus out attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could, as the speaker asserts? As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the speaker’s opinion for the following reasons: First, scandals reveal many problems in our society which are concealed before. Moreover, scandals draw the attention of the public on these problems and propel relevant measures to solve or prevent them.

First of all, scandals can make us realize that our society or country is replete with all kinds of serious even disastrous problems which speakers or reformers can not. As scandals always appear in the way which is distinct and remarkable, the majority of the public tends to pay attention to them. However, speakers and reformers do not have the ability to make so many people to concern a certain affair although they themselves are aware of the problems. A case in point is the bankruptcy of Enron, the self-proclaimed World’s Leading Energy Company, which discloses the serious individualism and the lack of humility in the company environment as well as blind diversity in the development tactic of the company. But for the scandal, the public would have not realized these fatal issues existing in the companies which appear flourish apparently.

Furthermore, scandals also stimulate the public or the government to take relevant measures to prevent these problems. The Nixon’s Watergate Affair is a classic instance, which reveals the abuse of president power in the political realm in the United States. After the affair had surfaced, legislations about limiting the power of the president established and effectively decreased the occurrence of such affairs. Another example is the incitant scandal of the Bay Area Laboratory Co-Operative (BALC). This company was accused of providing stimulant containing THG to many famous athletes who were regarded as heroes of their nation before the scandal. Because of the incitant scandal, relevant laws and technologies about anti-drug were propelled. Therefore, scandals are helpful to solve these societal problems quickly and effectively.

On the other hand, some might point out that scandals will focus too much attention of the public on the details of the affair and ignore the more important aspects. The scandal of Bill Clinton and Monica Lewinsky is usually cited as an example in which the media and public has pay so much attention on the private lives of the two parties that they failed to take an insight into the societal significance of this affair. However, such a situation is attributable to the excessive curiosity of the public and the utilitarian of the media to draw more eyes of the citizens rather than the scandal itself. The responsibility of scandals is just to provide information which reveals societal problems. With proper utilization, scandals can be eventually useful.

Based on what I have analyzed, scandals are useful to our society as they can draw more attention on certain problems and propel corresponding resolvent. In order to make full use of scandals, the public and the media also should avoid bearing utilitarian purpose.

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No.1 Issue185 高频题（丑闻），感觉写得好差，还超时
大家帮忙拍拍砖吧，对issue几乎失去信心了，写得很慢，语言又不好
只怪自己基础太差。
大家看能有几分，谢谢！

Issue 185
“Scandals whether in politics, academia, or other areas can be useful. They focus out attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.”
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Are scandals useful in politics, academia and other areas to focus out attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could, as the speaker asserts? As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the speaker’s opinion for the following reasons: First, scandals reveal many problems in our society which are concealed before. Moreover, scandals draw the attention of the public on these problems and propel relevant measures to solve or prevent them.首段简明扼要,不错

First of all, scandals can make us realize that our society or country is replete with all kinds of serious even disastrous problems which speakers or reformers can not 缺少谓语. As scandals always appear in the way which is distinct and remarkable, the majority of the public tends to pay attention to them. However, speakers and reformers do not have the ability to make so many people to concern a certain affair although they themselves are aware of the problems. A case in point is the bankruptcy of Enron, the self-proclaimed World’s Leading Energy Company, which discloses the serious individualism and the lack of humility in the company environment as well as blind diversity in the development tactic tactics 好象该词一直用复数形式 of the company. But for the scandal, the public would have not realized these fatal issues existing in the companies which appear flourish apparently.例子不错,但是还是需要在结尾时总结一下例子的

Furthermore, scandals also stimulate the public or the government to take relevant measures to prevent these problems. The Nixon’s Watergate Affair is a classic instance, which reveals the abuse of president power in the political realm in the United States. After the affair had surfaced, legislations about limiting the power of the president established and effectively decreased the occurrence of such affairs. Another example is the incitant scandal of the Bay Area Laboratory Co-Operative (BALC). This company was accused of providing stimulant containing THG to many famous athletes who were regarded as heroes of their nation before the scandal. Because of the incitant scandal, relevant laws and technologies about anti-drug were propelled. Therefore, scandals are helpful to solve these societal problems quickly and effectively. 这一段写的很好,例子举的insightful

On the other hand, some might point out that scandals will focus too much attention of the public on the details of the affair and ignore the more important aspects该成这样好不好: On the other hand, some might point out that scandals always focus too much attention of the public on the specificed details, while ignoring the more important respects, 目的就是为了让转折明显一些,不知道可对?. The scandal of Bill Clinton and Monica Lewinsky is usually cited as an example in which the media and public has pay so much attention on the private lives of the two parties that they failed to take an insight into the societal significance of this affair. However, such a situation is attributable to the excessive curiosity of the public and the utilitarian of the media to draw more eyes of the citizens rather than the scandal itself. The responsibility of scandals is just to provide information which reveals societal problems. With proper utilization, scandals can be eventually useful.我一直对clithon的例子抱有怀疑态度,不知道这个例子是否适合给老美看,也请各位讨论以下!!!!!!

Based on what I have analyzed, scandals are useful to our society as they can draw more attention on certain pressing problems and propel corresponding resolventresolution. In order to make full use of scandals, the public and the media also should avoid bearing utilitarian purpose.

我的想法和你的差不多:也是赞成的态度,但是还有一些反对(大正小负)
准备按下面的sallbus写:
b1:scandals 会将现实中的问题暴漏出来,而有时reformer不能;
b2:scandals将问题暴漏出来以后,会引起政府和舆论的关注,从而得计解决
   你的例子watergate和Bay Area Laboratory Co-Operative (BALC)都不错,符合ets的例子标准;
b3:再说说scandals的负面影响:不如让人们将注意力分散,而忘了最终要的事情--自己的工作,国家的建设等
期待继续交流
我的:issue 50: https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=255435

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大家帮忙拍拍砖吧，对issue几乎失去信心了，写得很慢，语言又不好
只怪自己基础太差。
大家看能有几分，谢谢！

Issue 185
“Scandals whether in politics, academia, or other areas can be useful. They focus out attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.”
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Are scandals useful in politics, academia and other areas to focus out attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could, as the speaker asserts? As far as I am concerned, 这个开头太熟悉了，好像是模板吧，最好不要用，比较危险（你的beginners vs experts 也是这样的开头）I totally这里与你后面的让步有矛盾 agree with the speaker’s opinion for the following reasons: First, scandals reveal many problems in our society which are concealed before. Moreover, scandals draw the attention of the public on these problems and propel relevant measures to solve or prevent them.

First of all, scandals can make us realize that our society or country is replete with all kinds of serious even disastrous problems which speakers or reformers can not notice. As scandals always appear in the way which is distinct and remarkable, the majority of the public tends to pay attention to them. However, speakers and reformers do not have the ability to make so many people to concern a certain affair 这里没看懂 although they themselves are aware of the problems. A case in point is the bankruptcy of Enron, the self-proclaimed World’s Leading Energy Company, which discloses the serious individualism and the lack of humility in the company environment as well as blind diversity in the development tactic of the company.与reformer的关系何在? But for the scandal, the public would have not realized these fatal issues existing in the companies which appear flourish apparently.这个例子虽好，但是你的论证不够充分，且没有很好的照应本段论点

Furthermore, scandals also stimulate the public or the government to take relevant measures to prevent these problems. The Nixon’s Watergate Affair is a classic instance, which reveals the abuse of president power in the political realm in the United States. After the affair had surfaced, legislations about limiting the power of the presidentwas established and effectively decreased preventedthe reoccurrence of such an affairs. Another example is the incitant scandal of the Bay Area Laboratory Co-Operative (BALC). This company was accused of providing stimulant containing THG to many famous athletes who were regarded as heroes of their nation before the scandal. Because of the incitant scandal, relevant laws and technologies about anti-drug were propelled. Therefore, scandals are helpful to solve these societal problems quickly and effectively.这段的结构清晰

On the other hand, some peoplemight point out that scandals will focusattract too much attention of the public on the details of the affair and ignore the more important aspects. 让步的好，且有深度The scandal of Bill Clinton and Monica Lewinsky is usually cited as an example in which the media and public has pay so much attention on the private lives of the two parties that they failed to take an insight into the societal significance of this affairsignificance 有那些，这里应进行说明. Howeverin my opinion,, such a situation is attributable to the excessive curiosity of the public and the utilitarian of the media to draw more eyes of the citizens rather than the scandal itself. The responsibility of scandals is just to provide information which reveals societal problems. With proper utilization, scandals can be eventually useful.最后的两句是个败笔，不但与本段无关，而且也没展开说明

Based on what I have analyzed, scandals are useful to our society as they can draw more attention on certain problems and propel corresponding resolvent. In order to make full use of scandals, the public and the media also should avoid bearing utilitarian purpose.

与你的beginner vs expert 一样，你的例子和观点都很好，结构也不错，语言可总归终于。但你的转折连词有很大的问题，这会confused，希望你好好的研究一下。