issue51,高频第三篇，一直没人帮我，555，我真的快失望了

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Issue51:
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
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The controversy over the special education and general education has continued for centuries. The viewpoint to educate according to the needs of individuals becomes more and more popular recently. But is it really a wise choice to do so? I'm afraid it may not be as effective as the author thinks to design the education specially to meet the personal needs and interests of each student.

First, it is the generalization where the efficiency of education stands. This is a world abundant with complicated phenomena. It is important for us to handle varieties of knowledge to solve kinds of problems. One who only have a narrow ken and capability, no matter how well he or she can do in that field, will never make any true success. The education should help us to acquire the basic skills such as reading, writing, calculating and so forth for living or we may find wonder and wander facing the complex modern society. If we specialize the education according to the individuals, the students may grow to a narrow person in the future so that bring a lot of problem to them and to the world.

The second problem is that the needs of one individual may not always accord to the interest of the same person. Sometimes they are even conflict. Take the ability of calculating for example. There are so many situations under which we need to calculate that without the capability of calculating we may find it difficult to travel a single step. However, it is common that some students have no interest in or even hate mathematics. Thus it is impossible to meet the needs and interests both. It is really a embarrassing choice to give up one of them. Nevertheless, if we design the education according to the general needs, there won’t be such problem.

What’s worse, not all the students know about themselves well so that they probably have no idea about their own needs and interests. Therefore, given that we really provide a chance to them to choose what they want to learn, they may feel confused. We can frequently to hear the senior students in universities complain about the wrong choice made by themselves to learn what they are learning, which indicates that even senior high school graduators do not understand themselves well. Then how can we ensure that the educations we design will really meet the needs and interests of the individuals even if it appears so. Once the students find they have made a bad choice it may not easy for them to change their fields if the education is over-specified. It would be a real tragedy.

Of course, general education doesn’t mean that we teach everybody in the absolutely same way with the completely same contents. In order to cater to the individual needs and to stimulate the interests of the students, schools can offer some special courses for students. The combination of general and special teaching may arrive at a better consequence.

Over-specified education may not be so effective or practical as is appears. No one can lead a wonderful life only depend on one special skill in the developing world. Specified courses should be a complement rather than a substitute of the general education.

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The controversy over the special education and general education has continued for centuries. The viewpoint to educate according to the needs of individuals becomes more and more popular recently. But is it really a wise choice to do so? I'm afraid it may not be as effective as the author thinks to design the education specially to meet the personal needs and interests of each student.B+A+P的开头方式陈旧了一些

First, it is the generalization where the efficiency of education stands. This is a world abundant with complicated phenomena. It is important for us to handle varieties of knowledge to solve kinds of problems. One who only have a narrow ken and capability, no matter how well he or she can do in that field, will never太绝对了，建议用hardly can make any true success. The 加个定语， normaleducation should help us to acquire the basic skills such as reading, writing, calculating and so forth for living or we may find wonder and wander facing the complex modern society. If we specialize the education according to the individuals, the students may grow to a narrow person in the future so that bring a lot of problems to them 没必要如此拉长句子and to the world.

second,与一段结构词对应比较好，下边段类似The second problem is that the needs of one individual may not always according to the interest of the same person. Sometimes they are even conflict. Take the ability of calculating for example.随意了 There are so many situations under which we need to calculate that without the capability of calculating we may find it difficult to travel a single step. However, it is common that some students have no interest in or even hate mathematics. Thus it is impossible to meet the needs and interests both. It is really a embarrassing choice to give up one of them. Nevertheless, if we design the education according to the general needs, there won’t be such problem.与2段有点重复的嫌疑，还是想调的normal education

What’s worse, not all the students know about themselves well so that they probably have no idea about their own needs and interests. Therefore, given that we really provide a chance to them to choose what they want to learn, they may feel confused. We can frequently to hear the senior students in universities complain about the wrong choice made by themselves to learn what they are learning, which indicates that even senior high school graduators do not understand themselves well. Then how can we ensure that the educations we design will really meet the needs and interests of the individuals even if it appears so. Once the students find they have made a bad choice it may not easy for them to change their fields if the education is over-specified. It would be a real tragedy.此段有点偏了，论点是——是否为个人需要和兴趣设计的教育才是effective,此段说students不知道该学什么，不是围绕effective来写的，稍微有点偏，最好搭一下桥，在最后总结一下——说明因为不知道学什么，需要指导，单凭兴趣和需要不行，有时会misleading。

Of course, general education doesn’t mean that we teach everybody in the absolutely same way with the completely same contents. In order to cater to the individual needs and to stimulate the interests of the students, schools can offer some special courses for students. The combination of general and special teaching may arrive at a better consequence.写得不太好，此段应该是同意作者观点，而不是具例子，应该说why复合兴趣和需要的教育是有效的，而不是简单说明现象得出结论——无力

Over-specified education may not be so effective or practical as is appears. No one can lead a wonderful life only depend on one special skill in the developing world. Specified courses should be a complement rather than a substitute of the general education.
总体来说，还是写成了正反对比论证的，只是正面写的太无力了。有些论据过于笼统了，而且写规范的教育的有效性时候没有完全展开，可以正面写规范教育的好处，个性化教育的不足，个性化教育的优点。这样总体来看写得比较开，而且还是总体反对个性教育的，如此就不会显得2/3段雷同了。以上纯属个人观点，能力有限不妥之处多包涵

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太感谢了，我会再借鉴一下别人的文章的