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猫猫624UID: 171232

218"In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people."

The speaker asserts that any work of art---whether film, literature, sculpture or a song--must be understandable to most people in order to have merit. I concede that being understandable to the majority help work of art accomplish its goals, however, it is not the prerequisite for artistic work to have merit.

(艺术作品反映艺术家的思想，不一定被大众理解)
The first object of arts lies in presenting artists' distinct perspectives toward the world, which is not related to understanding of the majority. Universally acknowledged that artists commonly have perspectives beyond ordinary people, much valuable work of art may not be understandable and accepted by the society. For example, Impressionists---such as Monet, Magnet, and Von Gogh, concentrated on the play of light over objects and stressed vivid contrasts between colors in the sunlight and shade. Their achievements presents artists' unique angle of inspecting natural world, which does not be understandable to their peers. Similarly, German composer Beethoven completed Ninth Symphony, a work which summarizes much of his achievements and influence, even after losing hearing. The vision of struggle and triumph manifested in the work comes from Beethoven’s confidence encountering paramount difficulties. This new style of music does not accord with established music rules, thus was not understandable to other people in some period and even dismissed by esteemed critics of his time. In brief, much work of art possesses eternal value, even though not being understandable to most people.

(艺术作品提升人们的思想，不要求被大众完全理解)
When it is comes to another objects of arts, which lies in enhancing human's spirits, work of art does not require most people to understand the meaning of arts. Work of art usually present subjective feelings of artists, common people without profound comprehension of lives cannot completely understand its meanings. For example, Da Vinci's " Mona Lisa"  and " the last supper",  cited as some of best examples of "true art" in the world, bring the enjoyment of beauty to people. Similarly, Michelangelo's sculpture of “David” and his incredible paintings on the ceiling of Sistine Chapel at the Vatican, which are revered as some of the pinnacles of artistic achievement, bring about enhancing religious spirits for people. One real merit of artistic work involves inspiring the imagination and lifting the spirits of people. Even though people cannot completely understand the meanings of arts, the work of art accomplish its goal of lifting people's spirits.

（艺术作品给人们带来娱乐方式，要求被部分人理解，而不一是被大众理解）
Aside from foregoing objects of artistic work, some work of art also aims at entertaining people. With the development of mass media and tele-communication tools, especially the Internet, work of art has been much closer to people's daily life. Some people may assert that the criterion of modern artistic work lies in whether it can be understandable to the majority or not. However, people should not overlook this assertion confuse the "true merit" of artistic work with its economic value. Being understandable to most people is the criterion of popular arts, but not one of really valuable arts. Work of art having merits may bring about entertainment to certain people, but not necessarily the majority. Moreover, merely focusing on catering to the mass appetite may result in the losing the fundamental goals of arts.

In sum, being understandable to most people is not the prerequisite to work of art to have merit, because the ultimate goal of art lies in presenting artists' distinct perspectives toward the world, lifting people's minds and entertaining people, which is unrelated with the understanding of people.

鬼谷子UID: 159645

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疯子兔八哥UID: 196616

猫猫什么时候考,正在疯狂的准备4月的高频,
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猫猫624UID: 171232

我最后了.4.28.

枫丹UID: 166492

218"In order for any work of art—whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people."

The speaker asserts that any work of art---whether film, literature, sculpture or a song--must be understandable to most people in order to have merit. 前面这句对原文的重复最好可以改改，你说呢？I concede that being understandable to the majority help work of art accomplish its goals, however, it is not the prerequisite for artistic work to have merit.

(艺术作品反映艺术家的思想，不一定被大众理解)
The first object of arts lies in presenting artists' distinct perspectives toward the world, which is not related to understanding of the majority加个maybe吧，否则太绝对了. Universally acknowledged that artists commonly have perspectives beyond ordinary people, much valuable work of art may not be understandable and accepted by the society. For example, Impressionists---such as Monet, Magnet, and Von Gogh, concentrated on the play of light over objects and stressed vivid contrasts between colors in the sunlight and shade. Their achievements presents artists' unique angle of inspecting natural world, which does not be understandable to their peers. Similarly, German composer Beethoven completed Ninth Symphony, a work which summarizes much of his achievements and influence, even after losing hearing. The vision of struggle and triumph manifested in the work comes from Beethoven’s confidence encountering paramount difficulties. This new style of music does not accord with established music rules, 到是这个地方改多些笔墨了thus was not understandable to other people in some period and even dismissed by esteemed critics of his time. In brief, much work可数的 of art possesses eternal value, even though not being understandable to most people.

(艺术作品提升人们的思想，不要求被大众完全理解)
When it is comes to another objects of arts, which lies in enhancing human's spirits, work worksof art does not require most people to understand the meaning of arts. Work of art usually present subjective feelings of artists, common people without profound comprehension of lives cannot completely understand its meanings. For example, Da Vinci's " Mona Lisa" and " the last supper", cited as some of best examples of "true art" in the world, bring the enjoyment of beauty to people. Similarly, Michelangelo's sculpture of “David” and his incredible paintings on the ceiling of Sistine Chapel at the Vatican, which are revered as some of the pinnacles of artistic achievement, bring about enhancing religious spirits for people. One real merit of artistic work involves inspiring the imagination and lifting the spirits of people. Even though people cannot completely understand the meanings of arts, the work of art accomplish its goal of lifting people's spirits.
前面这两段似乎在说一个道理，就是作品的思想性不容易被人理解，我认为艺术家的思想的表达被人们理解了后，就是对人们思想的升华，这个界线比较难把握啊。

（艺术作品给人们带来娱乐方式，要求被部分人理解，而不一是被大众理解）
Aside from foregoing objects of artistic work, some work of art also aims at entertaining people. With the development of mass media and tele-communication tools, especially the Internet, work of art has been much closer to people's daily life. Some people may assert that the criterion of modern artistic work lies in whether it can be understandable to the majority or not. However, people should not overlook this assertion confuse the "true merit" of artistic work with its economic value. Being understandable to most people is the criterion of popular arts, but not one of really valuable arts. Work of art having merits may bring about entertainment to certain people, but not necessarily the majority. Moreover, merely focusing on catering to the mass appetite may result in the losing the fundamental goals of arts.
我个人认为这篇文章的问题在于：过于片面仅从音乐绘画着手，缺乏足够的说服力，思路有些窄，没有拓展开，仅停留在观众的理解能力的基础上，让论证不够丰满，还有你这里说会失去真正根本的目的，那艺术的根本目的到底是什么呢？这个地方是不是一个关键的入手点呢？

In sum, being understandable to most people is not the prerequisite to work of art to have merit, because the ultimate goal of art lies in presenting artists' distinct perspectives toward the world, lifting people's minds and entertaining people, which is unrelated with the understanding of people.
文笔，米就不说什么了，你向来很好的。关键是思路似乎没打开，停在表面。对于艺术的价值和目标缺乏一个明确的界定和论证。个人观点，仅攻参考，还有需要我改哪篇，请发悄悄话给我

猫猫624UID: 171232

枫丹,谢谢你的砖.思路确实感觉没打开.可能是例子举多了.凑字数.再想想论证的部分.
鬼兄,一直看你占着.是不是我这篇写的太差了:(

victoriazhizhiUID: 163135

估计鬼鬼给忘了吧，理解下，他确实为作文版忙的不行，呵呵 我来砍一个，表嫌弃哈。砍的不好的地方，请鬼鬼来看 :p

The speaker asserts that any work of art---whether film, literature, sculpture or a song--must be understandable to most people in order to have merit. 还有两周呢，开头可以再想办法新颖点，最好表复述题目I concede that being understandable to the majority help work of art accomplish its goals, however, it is not the prerequisite for artistic work to have merit.

(艺术作品反映艺术家的思想，不一定被大众理解)
The first object of arts lies in presenting artists' distinct perspectives toward the world, which is not related to understanding of the majority.觉得这里说的有些模糊，或者说是不一定需要很多人来理解的，说is not related觉得有些不确切 Universally acknowledged that artists commonly have perspectives beyond ordinary people, much valuable work of art may not be understandable and accepted by the society. For example, Impressionists---such as Monet, Magnet, and Von Gogh, concentrated on the play of light over objects and stressed vivid contrasts between colors in the sunlight and shade. Their achievements presents artists' unique angle of inspecting natural world, which does not be understandable to their peers. Similarly, German composer Beethoven completed Ninth Symphony, a work which summarizes much of his achievements and influence, even after losing hearing. The vision of struggle and triumph manifested in the work comes from Beethoven’s confidence encountering paramount difficulties. This new style of music does not accord with established music rules, thus was not understandable to other people in some period and even dismissed by esteemed critics of his time. In brief, much work of art possesses eternal value, even though not being understandable to most people. 觉得对为什么没有被大众都理解，但是还有merits 的分析最好再多些，就更能紧扣题目了，不然有种感觉就是对“被人理解”和“流传，优秀”之间的关系还不是很明确。

(艺术作品提升人们的思想，不要求被大众完全理解)这句汉语看的不是很明白，先看后面
When it is comes to another objects of arts, which lies in enhancing human's spirits, 不知道enhance people’s spirits的表达是否确切？看的不是很明白，感觉最好能说的具体点work of art does not require most people to understand the meaning of arts. Work of art usually present subjective feelings of artists, common people without profound comprehension of lives cannot completely understand its meanings. For example, Da Vinci's " Mona Lisa" and " the last supper", cited as some of best examples of "true art" in the world, bring the enjoyment of beauty to people. Similarly, Michelangelo's sculpture of “David” and his incredible paintings on the ceiling of Sistine Chapel at the Vatican, which are revered as some of the pinnacles of artistic achievement, bring about enhancing religious spirits for people.嗯 这个例子不错 One real merit of artistic work involves inspiring the imagination and lifting the spirits of people. Even though people cannot completely understand the meanings of arts, the work of art accomplish its goal of lifting people's spirits. 同上一段意见，感觉对这个提升思想和理解之间的关系还是不够明确，或者说，不理解的情况下怎么能提升思想？人们如何不了解艺术的深刻含义就心灵得到净化？思想得到升华了？觉得开头对enhance the spirits的表述不够具体，因此一直有疑问，然后后面对例子的分析不够，还是有疑问，呵呵。

（艺术作品给人们带来娱乐方式，要求被部分人理解，而不一是被大众理解）
Aside from foregoing objects of artistic work, some work of art also aims at entertaining people. With the development of mass media and tele-communication tools, especially the Internet, work of art has been much closer to people's daily life. Some people may assert that the criterion of modern artistic work lies in whether it can be understandable to the majority or not. However, people should not overlook this assertion confuse the "true merit" of artistic work with its economic value. Being understandable to most people is the criterion of popular arts, but not one of really valuable arts. Work of art having merits may bring about entertainment to certain people, but not necessarily the majority. Moreover, merely focusing on catering to the mass appetite may result in the losing the fundamental goals of arts. 感觉娱乐这个点抓的不太好，感觉把艺术各种广泛的形式局限到音乐电影之类可以娱乐的工具上了，而且前面把艺术的目的说的那么高尚，这里显得有通俗下去了。还有问题同上段，仍然是对于理解不理解和实现这个功能之间的关系没有很明确的论证出来。总是扔出来个结论就转走了，之间的推理分析不够，这段尤其显得思维跳跃。比如你说那个being ….really valuable arts那句感觉和前后都不太能接上，让人忍不住问why？此类的结论性语言在整个文章中不只这一处，然后很快的就换了别的方面，缺乏分析。

In sum, being understandable to most people is not the prerequisite to work of art to have merit, because the ultimate goal of art lies in presenting artists' distinct perspectives toward the world, lifting people's minds and entertaining people, which is unrelated with the understanding of people.

觉得有些没放开，有的东西要好好分析的时候感觉没说透，比如例子完了最好能好好总结一下就更深入了，也显得更严密。整体上思路还是不错的，B3的切入点再斟酌下，个人看法。语言用词都没什么说的，一直不错，继续保持。加油

猫猫624UID: 171232

谢谢吱吱拍我.好好琢磨一下........