据说是3月12日7分文章－大家参考点评

bqianaUID：193168

雅思7分范文:教育、个人发展与社会


It is generally believed that education is of vital importance in individuals’ development and well-being of societies. What should education consist of to fulfill both these functions?

With the rapid development of modern society, education is becoming more and more crucial to both individuals and societies. The issue over what education should consist of has considerably aroused people’s wide concern. In this essay, I seek to explore this complicated topic from diverse perspectives and what influence could be brought.

Among the most important aspects education should consist of, one should be stressed is professional knowledge education. On one hand, under the fierce competitive circumstance, people who have professional skills and experience attract many big companies. Therefore, study about one special area gives people more opportunities to hurt an ideal job. On the other hand, this education is also significant to develop societies in a long run.

At the second place, what is also worth noticing is that physical education is necessary for students, especially for teenagers. If you want to achieve successfully in the modern societies, strong body is the first premise, which makes you always in sharp. So education should push people to take care themselves and this could bring great benefits to the healthy society.

Last but not least, we should not lose sight of psychological education. Psychological problems are serious nowadays and a sizable percentage of people suffer from them. A survey conducted by a famous research organization indicates that over 40 percent of students have various psychological problems, who really need help from school and society. Even worse, if such problems cannot be solved, they could hamper the progress of well-being society.

Judging from what I have been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that three aspects cannot be separated in education, which play vital important roles in the growth of individuals and societies. The fulfillment of both people and societies can be done as long as we lay emphasis on three aspects mentioned above.

lucy_zq2002UID：177408

文章得7可以理解，优点非常明显
1总体感觉经典套路开头，最后一句给人期待，同时表明下面的内容。
2层次清晰，而且遵循了，经典的，从生理到心理的模式。
3句子比较连贯。每段开头交代中心意思。且全文有例证。
缺点：
感觉是努力模仿的结果，缺少些新意，所以不能得8吧。

lucy_zq2002UID：177408

刻意开帖，略显做作，所以请允许我以下感性文字

不喜欢51的喧闹，感觉表面浮华
不排除3g的积极，可那未免有些急功近利
还是喜欢这里，偌大寄托的一角
尽管非常的不起眼
可是这里有bqiana

细心的你应该发现
每天清晨和晚上
bqiana总是大把大把的时间泡在网上
可是你总能发现他最及时的回帖
有解答问题，最新信息
更有很多国外文章，贴近雅思阅读
还有精制到无以复加的原创
bqiana很谦虚，他很少给自己加精华
却一不小心被多个知名网站转贴
bqiana也很可爱，也许是生怕你读多了英语
或者上网时间太长感觉疲劳
他的每个帖子都个性化的加上了小图

这年头说真话，做实事的人实在不多了
窃以为
在备考雅思的日子里
能把考试和英语能力的提高结合起来
实在快乐
在bqiana老师在任斑竹的日子里
我以追随他的学习为荣


仅以此肉麻小诗表达心情
旨在呼唤更多诚心求学的雅友！共同进步，同时繁荣论坛！
（以上文字仅代表个人意见，非论坛意见）

bqianaUID：193168

呵呵，多谢捧场
欢迎加入逍遥一族。。。

imongUID：140258

最初由 lucy_zq2002 发布
[B]刻意开帖，略显做作，所以请允许我以下感性文字

不喜欢51的喧闹，感觉表面浮华
不排除3g的积极，可那未免有些急功近利
还是喜欢这里，偌大寄托的一角
尽管非常的不起..

以下省略...... [/B]

在谦虚和朴实的同时 投入和付出更应该得到肯定。

那么 这个精华 就请允许我来加。
^^