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To obtain the exclusive right to sell Venadial internationally seems to be the best choice to make our profits increase substantially within a very short time following that this new margarine actually reduces cholesterol levels.In addition,among the participants in the study who consumed Venadial daily the risk of heart attack of those people fell by one-third and the new margarine is so popular that stores in Alta are unable to keep it on their shelves.The evidences,which the director places,sound reasonable at first glance,whereas close scrutiny shows the evidences lent little support to the conclusion.

To begin with,the director fails to convince us the Venadial is the only factor which reduces cholesterol levels.Firstly,in the study of Venadial the enviroment which the  participants experience was not mention.Maybe during the study,the people paticipant in the study have some other medicin or food which also has the same impact on reducing the cholesterol level.Secondly,it is possible that the paticipants did some excerise and sports which contribute to the cholesterol levels reducing.

Even if the Venadial in the study has the effect to reduce the cholesterol levels and the risk of heart attack,dose it bring several side affects at the same time.In the director's opinion,Venadial works by activating a metabolic response that is not yet well understood.Therefore,as the Venadial reducing the cholesterol level,at the same time,other effects which may do harm on human body come about.

Furthermore,the director only focous in the stores located in Alta,however,the international maket may be a profoudly different situation from the one in Alta.The profit composed by a lot of factors,such as price,the consumption of the market,the situation which one company target at and the like.Only following that the Venadial is tremedously popular in Alta will be a hastily desicion for the director to draw for the international maket in that there are still much investment waiting to be considered.

In sum,to draw such a conclusion in a hastily way is not wise enough to make profit of Venedial.The director should consider the study more seriously and concertrate on the metabolic response that is still not well understood.On the other hand,further investments should also be take into accout on the sale of the international maket.Only in this way can the food company benefit a lot on the Venadial.

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The following is a memorandum from the sales director to the president of the Healthy-and-Good food company.
'A recent study indicates that Venadial, a new margarine currently produced only in the country of Alta, actually reduces cholesterol levels. Derived from the resin of pine trees, Venadial works by activating a metabolic response that is not yet well understood. However, cholesterol levels fell ten to fifteen percent among participants in the study who consumed Venadial daily, and the risk of heart attack by one-third. In addition, the new margarine is so popular that stores in Alta are unable to keep it on their shelves. Therefore, if our company obtains the exclusive right to sell Venadial internationally, our profits are sure to increase substantially within a very short time.'