标题: argument42 fantasy group 有拍必回!越写越没感觉 [打印本页] 作者: kiona 时间: 2005-9-5 17:25:09 标题: argument42 fantasy group 有拍必回!越写越没感觉
好多东西都忘了怎么写了,郁闷!大家狠狠给我拍!
In this argument, the speaker concludes that Paraterra should begin to promote ecotourism in order to provide more income for the population of Paraterra and also preserve the natural environment of their tiny country and in order to ensure that their advertising campaign is successful, Paraterra should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign. To evidence this conclusion, the arguer cites that last year the government of the nearby country of Bellegea began the advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism and they are successful. However, the argument ignore several important information in this argument, I will give my view as follows.
To begin with, there is a false analogy between these two countries. First of all, the conditions, such as economic condition, weather condition and societal condition may be different. Perhaps Bellegea is a country with low economic condition, however, Paraterra is a developed country. The economic condition of Paraterra is much better than that of Bellegea, even Bellegea carries out that advertising campaign. Or perhaps Paraterra's weather condition is bad, blows wind all years around, it is not suit for all visitors traveling in this country. Secondly, the travelers of these two countries are different in types. Perhaps the Bellegea’s culture can easily attract the foreign travelers, but Paraterra’s travelers are mainly from their own country. Last but not the least, the population of these two countries is different. Only depend on the advertising campaign can made the per capita income increased by ten percent, the country must have small population. But Paraterra does not suit this condition. Lacking of the introductions of these two countries, we cannot infer that the advertising campaign, which is successfully carried in Bellegea is also suit for Paraterra.
In Addition, the grounds of this argument has some problems. First, the arguer only cites that the foreign visitors who arrive the main airport are doubled but he ignores the foreign visitors who arrive to the other airports. We cannot get rid of the possibility that the foreign visitors who arrive to the other airports drop. At the same time, the total number of the foreign visitors is down. Second, how to recognize the foreign visitor and the foreign businessmen, if the arguer regards all the foreigner as the foreign visitors, the survey will not be correct. For the reason that maybe there is a communication meeting which be held in Bellegea, so, the survey, which is about the increasing of the foreign visitors is useless.
Finally, even though we hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign, we cannot ensure that our advertising campaign is successful. First, not only the director individual carries out the campaign. Second, the director maybe not familiar with the environment of Paraterra. Finally, the current director of Paraterra’s National Tourism Office may be more outstanding.
In sum, this argument cannot make us convince that carrying out the advertising campaign is necessary and it is must be successful. In order to convince us, the arguer should provide other evidence, such as the economic and societal conditions of Paraterra, and so on.作者: kiona 时间: 2005-9-5 22:06:04
嗯?没有人改?晕!作者: coquelicol 时间: 2005-9-5 22:48:13
In this argument, the speaker concludes that Paraterra should begin to promote ecotourism in order to provide more income for the population of Paraterra and also preserve the natural environment of their tiny country and in order to ensure that their advertising campaign is successful, Paraterra should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign. To evidence this conclusion, the arguer cites that last year the government of the nearby country of Bellegea began the advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism and they are successful. However, the argument ignore several important information in this argument,(是不是有点重复?) I will give my view as follows.
To begin with, there is a false analogy between these two countries. First of all, the conditions, such as economic condition, weather condition and societal condition may be different. Perhaps Bellegea is a country with low economic condition, however这里似乎用however不太合适, Paraterra is a developed country. The economic condition of Paraterra is much better than that of Bellegea直接用Bellegea就可以了吧,不过不知道这样算不算累赘 even Bellegea carries out that(?) advertising campaign. Or perhaps Paraterra's weather condition is bad, blows wind all years around, it is not suit(suitable?)for all visitors traveling in this country. Secondly, the travelers of these two countries are different in types. Perhaps the Bellegea’s culture can easily attract the foreign travelers, but Paraterra’s travelers are mainly from their own country. Last but not the least, the population of these two countries is different. Only depend on the advertising campaign can made the per capita income increased by ten percent, the country must have small population. But Paraterra does not suit this condition. Lacking of the introductions of these two countries, we cannot infer that the advertising campaign, which is successfully carried in Bellegea is also suit for Paraterra.
In Addition, the grounds of this argument has some problems. First, the arguer(称呼最好通篇保持一致) only cites that the foreign visitors who arrive the main airport are doubled but he ignores the foreign visitors who arrive to the other airports. We cannot get rid of the possibility that the foreign visitors who arrive to the other airports drop. At the same time, the total number of the foreign visitors is down.(是不是用may,might合适一些?) Second, how to recognize the foreign visitor and the foreign businessmen, if the arguer regards all the foreigner as the foreign visitors, the survey will not be correct. For the reason that maybe there is a communication meeting which be held in Bellegea, so, the survey, which is about the increasing of the foreign visitors is useless.
Finally, even though we hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign, we cannot ensure that our advertising campaign is successful. First, not only the director individual carries out the campaign. Second, the director maybe not familiar with the environment of Paraterra. Finally, the current director of Paraterra’s National Tourism Office may be more outstanding.
In sum, this argument cannot make us convince that carrying out the advertising campaign is necessary and it is must be successful. In order to convince us, the arguer should provide other evidence, such as the economic and societal conditions of Paraterra, and so on.
我是喜欢根据错误出现的顺序进行批判,基本是这么构思的
1, the survey only considered the mainly airport
2, may other reasons cause theincreasing of foreign visitors
3, whether the two cities are comparable?作者: kiona 时间: 2005-9-5 22:53:00