TWE39 欢迎大家多批评

大傻子UID: 2178494

TWE39: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Science and technology, with their ever increasing power, have largely transformed our way of living, influence of them spreading across every aspect of society. It is undeniable that students, nowadays, under the help of new technology, especially that of computer science, including internet, have been able to acquire knowledge as well as information more quickly than ever before, nearly causing a dramatic revolution of education. For instance, more effectiveness in a foreign language learning, which used to require the learners’ high endurance and depend entirely on tedious, or boring, repetition of tape-recording, is now attached to using computers loaded with latest learning software. What’s more, the new technology has added to the enjoyment of learning process, enhancing our interest, an important element of success, in a particular field.
However, as is often pointed out, every coin has two sides. While computer has become more and more indispensable equipment, its detrimental effect, both on adults and children, seems to be completely ignored. Many young have spent most of the day playing computer games and, as a result, most of them dropped out of school. Moreover, some people, without giving any consideration to their future, even indulge themselves in porn movies or erotic photos illegally spread on the Internet. One of my friends, though claiming to have derived a lot of pleasure from it, wasted too much time chatting on line and in the end failed 3 exams in the final. Therefore, from what has been discussed above, technology is a two-edged weapon that could produce both positive and negative impact on us.
In conclusion, technology itself does not make things good or bad. Acquiring a new knowledge takes a long, arduous journey before finally reaching the destination. Students, especially those under the age of 18 and still in their high school, should utilize new technology to improve their learning under the guidance of teachers and their parents.

大傻子UID: 2178494

恳切期盼大家的批评

foolboy007UID: 28322

你是用的模板吧
平常尽量不要用

大傻子UID: 2178494

应该不算什么摸版吧只是结构是按照总分总结构进行的

semicircleUID: 2174354

感觉一般，不是很地道！

mig29znbUID: 2121740

呵呵，如是5t，其实还可以了，要知道我也是这个时间才开始练作文的，4月份就直接去考GRE的作文了，原来的水平也就是4级的水平！
至于文章，首先不能有语法错误，特别是对于练习文章，更要保证一个都没有，比如第二行society之前是否应有个冠词（可数名词不能单独出现）。
另外，可以看出文章是经过精心修改的，但我感觉有些过头，全文都是插入语，而没有简单句，倒装句，强调句，排比句，看着很不爽，应该结合起来使用。
最后是一些小词的用法还有些不当。加油吧！

大傻子UID: 2178494

楼上的批评是有问题的，society的用法没错，此外，简单句，倒装句，强调句，排比句不可能在一篇文章里全部出现，那才是不地道，“可以看出文章是经过精心修改的”不仅没有精心修改甚至没有修改，因为修改过后拿上来讨论有什么意义呢？

mig29znbUID: 2121740

呵呵，楼主终于出现了。我想你太具攻击性了，我没有批评你，只是在说“是否”应该加冠词，我也不是薄冰，我也拿不准啊，如果你说没问题，那就无所谓了。不过如果方便的话仍请说明原因啊。
至于说句型的问题，这是我的经验之谈。我G的作文只得了4分就是因为句型太单一，都是复杂句，而后来考得T的作文就是在使用了各种句型后得了5.5。
至于地不地道，我没有资格说，你去看看范文，再得结论也无妨。
还有如果你没修改过，那请你下次修改后再拿上来供大家欣赏，否则一篇未经雕琢的文章让大家来修改很耽误你的时间，也失去了自己修改的这种提高过程。

大傻子UID: 2178494

楼上这位G T都考过了，大几啊？哪个学校？

大傻子UID: 2178494

我的另一篇作文仍然在规定的时间内写的：
travel alone or travel with friends. ?

Traveling is one form of my favorite pastimes. One will be able to make new friends in different places and gain more knowledge while at the same time improving his or her survival ability. However, hardly can we achieve these goals by taking a trip with others, even the best friend. A direct comparison of both sides can illustrate my viewpoint.

It is true that traveling with a companion may eliminate the loneliness and add more interesting elements to the usually long and dull journey, but what we want to get from a meaningful tour is more information and knowledge of an entirely new place of interest. Being alone, one can have more free time to meet and talk with local people on any popular topic, thus gaining a deeper understanding of that place. Last summer when I had a chance to visit Beijing, for instance, I took a great pleasure from chatting with a professional tour guide who shared with me a lot of interesting stories about the capital. The tour was not only impressive, but also helpful for my history course.

Moreover, brought up by sagacious parents, I am a flexible person and I like to make decisions on my own. When traveling alone, I can plan and decide where to go and how to get there independently. If I went to a city far from my hometown, I would, instead of listening to my friend’s opinion that it is important to go as many places as possible, possibly prefer to stay in the hotel for two or three days to relax before going sightseeing and pursue my interest without the need to consider my friend’s desire. Such flexible schedule is just in accordance with my independent character.

Learning to survive in a different place that one is unfamiliar with is significant to the adjustment of this changing society. Imagine that one lost contact with parents and friends, in a new environment; the best thing to do would be to contact local residents and ask for their help. How could one possess that ability to socialize and win others’ trust if had never gone outing by himself/herself and completely relied on friends and relatives？

Considering the pros and cons, I agree that traveling alone could bring us more benefits than traveling with other people. Since we are still young and lack enough social experience, traveling on our own, learning to take care of ourselves and accumulating important life skills make a huge difference in our life.   
(Approximately 418 words)

大家可以同样来讨论嘛

大傻子UID: 2178494

对了也没修改，因为考试训练，就是要在30分钟内写完，看写的如何