Issue121 FLY AW作文组 第三周作业

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121"At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species."


Position: strongly disagree

Syllabus”
1.        Admittedly, natural process did eliminate some species through natural selection. However, it did not break the balance of ecosystem.
2.        Due to human process, including pollution and excessive exploration of natural resources, our natural environment is being threatened, and the extinction of rare species has been accelerated. With the development of modernization…
3.        Since the diversity of species is beneficial to human beings, measures should be taken to protect the endangered species.


Recently, the discussion on ecology is gaining more and more attention. People begin to realize that the balance of ecosystem is being broken. Some people hold a view that the extinction of some species is the natural result of evolution, while human process, I believe, mainly lead to its extinction.

Admittedly, natural process did eliminate some species through natural selections. However, it did not break the balance of the ecosystem. A lot of species disappeared in the past times are due to natural selection which has little to do with human. Millions of years ago, kinds of plants and animals came into being after a change of an earthquake or clashes between planets and earth. Some of them still live around us and some of them evolved, majority of these various species disappeared gradually because of natural selection. Take dinosaur for example, the dinosaur became extinct by exotic calamity rather than human, only leaving only fossil for human to review the dinosaur we have never seen. Nevertheless, our ecosystem have not been threatened or broken through these great changes.

Now, what should arouse our attention is that due to human process, including pollution and excessive exploration of natural resources, our natural environment is being threatened, and the extinction of rare species is accelerated with the development of modern industry. Highly industrialization not only brings us tined products and convenience, but heavily pollution of feculent rivers, greenhouse air, land of desert and more bared forest. During only several years, we have see, the pellucid rivers which we can see the bottom are no longer limpid, some fishes in the lake are becoming rare or even extinct. Since panda is the symbol of China, our offspring may see it only on the television years later if we will not take some measures to protect our environment from pollution. It’s not the result of natural process, but the pollution of human behavior.


Therefore, measures should be taken to save the endangered species, since the diversity of species in beneficial to human being. We undoubtedly have the responsibility to save the extincting species, at the same time, it’s will save human being. What’ s more, with the protection of environment, we can better develop our tourism, which will bring considerable income to protect environment in return. More jobs may be provided then. It will be a well circulation.


In sum, despite of natural process, it’s just and necessary for the society to spend money and additional efforts on protecting environment to provide ourselves a stable healthy and lasting living environment, including our offspring.

[ 本帖最后由 flycc28 于 2006-5-30 00:35 编辑 ]

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Recently, the discussion on ecology is gaining more and more attention. People begin to realize that the balance of ecosystem is being broken. Some people hold a view that the extinction of some species is the natural result of evolution, while human process, I believe, mainly lead to its extinction.我觉得论点不要谨止于次比较好，无论怎样不要把后面那一句话忽略不计

Admittedly, natural process did eliminate some species through natural selections. However, it did not break the balance of the ecosystem. A lot of species disappeared in the past times are due to natural selection which has little to do with human. Millions of years ago, kinds of plants and animals came into being after a change of an earthquake or clashes between planets and earth. Some of them still live around us and some of them evolved, majority of these various species disappeared gradually because of natural selection. Take dinosaur for example, the dinosaur became extinct by exotic calamity rather than human, only leaving only fossil for human to review the dinosaur we have never seen. Nevertheless, our ecosystem have not been threatened or broken through these great changes.怎么说呢，觉得论据不太具有论证的力度，也就是说，没有说明到底为什么生态系统没有遭到破坏

Now, what should arouse our attention is that, due to human process, including pollution and excessive exploration of natural resources, our natural environment is being threatened, and the extinction of rare species is accelerated with the development of modern industry. Highly industrialization not only brings us tined products and convenience, but heavily pollution of feculent rivers, greenhouse air, land of desert and more bared forest. During only several years, we have see, the pellucid rivers which we can see the bottom are no longer limpid, some fishes in the lake are becoming rare or even extinct. Since panda is the symbol of China, our offspring may see it only on the television years later if we will not take some measures to protect our environment from pollution. It’s not the result of natural process, but the pollution of human behavior.


Therefore, measures should be taken to save the endangered species, since the diversity of species in beneficial to human being. We undoubtedly have the responsibility to save the extincting species, at the same time, it’s will save human being. What’ s more, with the protection of environment, we can better develop our tourism, which will bring considerable income to protect environment in return. More jobs may be provided then. It will be a well circulation.


In sum, despite of natural process, it’s just and necessary for the society to spend money and additional efforts on protecting environment to provide ourselves a stable healthy and lasting living environment, including our offspring.

语法错误还是有点多呢
除此之外，最好在第一段明确提出“需要保护濒危物种”的观点，然后在说明了当今物种灭绝很大程度上是由人类造成的之后，还需要说明为什么人类要保护濒危物种，也就是要论证文中Therefore, measures should be taken to save the endangered species, since the diversity of species in beneficial to human being. We undoubtedly have the responsibility to save the extincting species, at the same time, it’s will save human being. 这两句话，否则光把这两句话摆在那里是不太有说服力的
其实这个题目我也觉得不太有话要说。。。

flycc28UID: 2164453

哎，语法错误...慢慢改吧 大家先容忍一下：）
第一段结尾是还应该说一下it's neccesary and indispensable for human beings to maintain the endangered species for our survival.
发现自己开头现在写的一点感觉没有，甚至有时候都没法下手，不知大家有什么建议？