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TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

Whether the choice is very，very rare is depended on individual. In our life, there exit a lot of phenomena that we face a multitude of choices and often confuse which one is better. But in other circumstance there are no choices. Moreover, it does not only happen in our life, but also happens in science, arts or society.

The first mention is in our life. There exit a deluge of choices when we are in key cross road of life choice. Some of them are great for the further, though they are not easily to realize; some of them are easy to success, but they maybe take you in a spear life; some of them maybe feel happy and rich in the rest of life, yet they are not according with normal. considered, a example, when we graduated from high school or university with bachelor degree, we faced an avalanche of such choices as working (working for individual firms, or State-owned enterprises, or working in big companies, or work in small firms, and so forth), further education (master degree, or Ph.D degree, or still in the same university, or changing a new one, or going abroad, and so on.)

On contrast, we also face to a circumstance of no choice. For a simple instance, if we want to apply the master degree on the major of law, though GRE, GMAT, LAST are all the exam of the entrance exam of graduate students, LAST is our only choice. Another example, you surly need a professional book about Supply Chain Management, and you found all the libraries, all the bookstores, and all publishing house. Unfortunately, there is only a book with dirty face, at that time you have no choice, this book is the only one you need, if you want to learn knowledge, you have no choice to pay much attention to the surface, and finally you bought it with regrets. Therefore, in this situation, the absence of choice is a circumstance that exits.

Not only in daily life, but also in science, we often encounter the situation with no choice. If we want to justify a conclusion, we should to offer the statistics or the results of researches which also should collect statistics. Without this quantitative analysis, most of situations they do not subscribe or agree your notion, especially in the innovated field. We have no choices; because science is science which is teemed with logic and strictness and can not only rely on state without strong proofs.

In sum, the writer simplified this notion, most of time we should depend on what we faced, thinking and rethinking, and finally make decisions or notions.

fenghua9801UID: 2191885

[你搞错了吧，我们的作业是36啊，你怎么写的是136呢？]

TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

Whether the choice is very，very rare is depended[depends ] on individual. In our life, there exit[exist?] a lot of phenomena[“现象”这个词用在这里感觉不太好，situation怎么样？本来想的是circumstance，但是你后面马上又用了] that [改成when是不是好点？] we face a multitude of choices and [are] often confuse[confused by] which one is better. But in other circumstance there are no choices. [这两句话我觉得应该可以再改改，总觉得有点别扭]Moreover, it does not only happen in our life, but also happens in science, arts or society.

The first mention[这个词？？] is in our life. There exit [exist?]a deluge of choices when we are in key cross road [??不懂啊，汗～！重要的交叉路口？crossroad] of life choice. Some of them are great for the further [future? ], though they are not easily to realize; some of them are easy to success [说选择容易成功，是不是不对啊？Some of them may lead you to success easily], but they maybe take you in a spear life [spear life说法地道么？work you into a miserable life]; some of them maybe feel happy[同样的问题啊，some 代表的是选择啊，怎么可能感到高兴呢？] and rich in the rest of life, yet they are not according with normal [这句偶又不懂啊～请指教]. considered [Consider], a [an]example, when we graduated from high school or university with bachelor degree, we faced an avalanche of such choices as working (working for individual firms, or [去掉] State-owned enterprises, or [去掉] working in big companies, or [保留这个就可以了]work in small firms, and so forth), further education (master degree, or Ph.D degree, or still in the same university, or changing a new one, or going abroad, and so on. [同样的])


On contrast, we [may] also face to[face] a circumstance of no choice. For a simple instance, if we want to apply the master degree on the major of law, though GRE, GMAT, LAST are all the exam of the entrance exam of [for] graduate students, LAST is our only choice. Another example, you surly[这个词？？] need a professional book about Supply Chain Management, and you found[find是“找到”的意思，换成search] all the libraries, all the bookstores, and all publishing house[houses]. Unfortunately, there is only a book with [a] dirty face, at that time you have no choice, this book is the only one you need[can find], if you want to learn knowledge, you have no choice to pay much attention to the surface[cover], and finally you bought it with regrets [这句话太长了，标点有问题，建议看看The Elements of Style，在作文版的精华区里面有的]. Therefore, in this situation, the absence of choice is a circumstance that exits[exists].
[这段在分析上面是不是应该深入一点呢？毕竟是分析性(Analytical)写作啊，那个长句我给改了一下，你看怎么样：Unfortunately, only a book with a dirty face can be found, you have to take it since no other choices you can have, and if you want to absorb knowledge, the cover of the book need not be paid too much attention. 哈哈，凑合着看吧，我很菜的]

Not only in daily life, [去掉逗号]but also in science, we often encounter the situation with no choice. If we want to justify a conclusion, we should to[去掉to，这个可是很基本的问题哦～] offer the statistics or the results of researches which also should collect statistics. Without this quantitative analysis, [in] most of[去掉of] situations they do not subscribe[“订阅”的意思，换成accept怎么样?] or agree your notion, especially in the innovated field. We have no choices; [分号去掉]because science is science which is teemed with logic and strictness and can not only rely on state[statement] without strong [换成persuasive怎么样？]proofs.

In sum, the writer simplified this notion, most of time we should depend on what we faced, thinking and rethinking [现在分词怎么会出现呢，没有be动词啊～！], and finally make decisions or notions.

[语法错误比较多啊，而且感觉对题目的复杂性（complexities）分析的不够,这个可是ETS着重强调的啊～！加油～！]

[ 本帖最后由 fenghua9801 于 2006-7-20 16:44 编辑 ]

sly60321UID: 2228803

Whether the choice is very，very rare is depended on individual. In our life, there exit a lot of phenomena that we face a multitude of choices and often confuse which one is better. But in other circumstance there are no choices. Moreover, it does not only happen in our life, but also happens in science, arts or society.

The first mention is in our life. There exit a deluge of choices when we are in key cross road of life choice.[有点chinglish] Some of them are great for the further, though they are not easily to realize; some of them are easy to success, but they maybe take you[尽量不要用you用people就好] in a spear life; some of them maybe feel happy and rich in the rest of life, yet they are not according with normal. considered, a example, when we graduated from high school or university with bachelor degree, we faced an avalanche of such choices as working (working for individual firms, or State-owned enterprises, or working in big companies, or work in small firms, and so forth), further education (master degree, or Ph.D degree, or still in the same university, or changing a new one, or going abroad, and so on.)

On contrast, we also face to a circumstance of no choice. For a simple instance, if we want to apply the master degree on the major of law, though GRE, GMAT, LAST are all the exam of the entrance exam of graduate students, LAST is our only choice. Another example, you surly need a professional book about Supply Chain Management, and you found all the libraries, all the bookstores, and all publishing house. Unfortunately, there is only a book with dirty face, at that time you have no choice, this book is the only one you need, if you want to learn knowledge, you have no choice to pay much attention to the surface, and finally you bought it with regrets. Therefore, in this situation, the absence of choice is a circumstance that exits.

Not only in daily life, but also in science, we often encounter the situation with no choice. If we want to justify a conclusion, we should to offer the statistics or the results of researches which also should collect statistics. Without this quantitative analysis, most of situations they do not subscribe or agree your notion, especially in the innovated field. We have no choices; because science is science which is teemed with logic and strictness and can not only rely on state without strong proofs.

In sum, the writer simplified this notion, most of time we should depend on what we faced, thinking and rethinking, and finally make decisions or notions.
[貌似写错题目了，语言不错，不过文章短了点，另外似乎浅显了点，感觉没深度。]

[ 本帖最后由 sly60321 于 2006-7-24 16:47 编辑 ]