issue144 ugw战队4号第六次作业

王可UID: 2190701

144. "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

1.艺术家创造价值
2.评论家发现价值
3.评论家不断推动艺术的进步 但是有时也会阻碍艺术的进步
4.艺术家和评论家都重要
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When you see the great works of Sunflower created by Vencent van Gogh, who do you think give us the lasting value, Vencent van Gogh himself or the critics? Apparently it is the artist's contribution to the society, however, we should not overlook the cretic's affection.

Admittedly, it is the artists' creative thinking that give us the lasting value. Their creatures passed down from generation to generation, which give us enjoyment, or sometimes courage. For example, Beethoven's musics are hightly spoken for hundreds of years. Some of them give us a delightful feeling, such as Symhpony No.6 "Pastorale", while some others as Symhpony No.3 and No.5 encourage people to fullfill their dreams. No one could deny that most of the world famous woks took the artists a long time even all their lifes. So no artists no works, and we should give them full respect.

We all say, beauty is in the eye of the beholder，and everyone's lasting value means different from others, thus we need critics to point out the true value of the art works, which could help us enjoy them in the right way so that we can find more things that valuable for us. Take Van Gogh's Sunflower for example. It has been impressive by the unique use of the color and painting style which may hardly to comprehend by one individual who have learn nothing about the concerning information about the contemporary position of the authors. That is the work of crictics, and thuough this, more and more people find out the value of the art works under the appearence.

Thanks to the critics, the artists make better and better works as our society is developing. Not only common people but also the artists would accept the critics' view, especially the young artists.  Certain comments and efforts, sometimes, can serve as a great imputes for these persons to strive for a better works in their future engagement and ultimately make them possible to achieve a long lasting artistic work. However, sometimes the critics would make a reverse effect to the development of art, especially during reformation time. Critics would lead the artists into old way and therefore block the reformation.

As disscussed above, though artists' creative works shwo us lasting value, they still need critics to expain the true meaning to people who cannot find the right to enjoy it. Both the artists and the critics contribute to the art works that passed down from one generation to another.

sly60321UID: 2228803

When you see the great works of Sunflower created by Vencent[Vincent] van Gogh, who do you think give us the lasting value, Vencent van Gogh himself or the critics? Apparently it is the artist's contribution to the society, however, we should not overlook the cretic's[critic’s] affection.

  Admittedly, it is the artists' creative thinking that give us the lasting value. [表述不恰当，这句话意思是给我们无价之宝的是艺术家，这就把话说死了]Their creatures passed down from generation to generation, which give us enjoyment, or sometimes courage. For example, Beethoven's musics [不可数]are hightly[high] spoken for hundreds of years. Some of them give us a delightful feeling, such as Symhpony[Symphony] No.6 "Pastorale", while some others as Symhpony No.3 and No.5 encourage people to fulfill[fulfill] their dreams. No one could deny that most of the world famous woks took the artists a long time even all their lifes.[lives] So no artists no works, and we should give them full respect.

  We all say, beauty is in the eye of the beholder，and everyone's lasting value means different from others, thus we need critics to point out the true value of the art works, which could help us enjoy them in the right way so that we can find more things that valuable for us. Take Van Gogh's Sunflower for example.[怎么又是梵高？换个人好些] It has been impressive by the unique use of the color and painting style which may hardly to comprehend by one individual who have learn nothing about the concerning information about the contemporary position of the authors. [分析得不错]That is the work of crictics[critics], and thuough [through]this, more and more people find out the value of the art works under the appearance[appearance].

  Thanks to the critics, the artists make better and better works as our society is developing. Not only common people but also the artists would accept the critics' view, especially the young artists.  Certain comments and efforts, sometimes, can serve as a great imputes for these persons to strive for a[去掉a] better works[去掉s] in their future engagement and ultimately make them possible to achieve a long lasting artistic work. However, sometimes the critics would make a reverse effect to the development of art, especially during reformation time. Critics would lead the artists into old way and therefore block the reformation.

  As disscussed[discuss] above, though artists' creative works shwo[show] us lasting value, they still need critics to expain[explain] the true meaning to people who cannot find the right to enjoy it. Both the artists and the critics contribute to the art works that passed down from one generation to another.
[逻辑不错，但下次发作业前请先贴到word里把基本错误改掉，另外本文字数少了一些，issue要高分至少500+]

王可UID: 2190701

谢了啊,这篇巨难产...

fenghua9801UID: 2191885

When you see the great works of Sunflower created by Vencent[Vincent] van[Van]Gogh, who do you think give us the lasting value, Vencent[Vincent] van[Van] Gogh himself or the critics? Apparently it is the artist's contribution to the society,[逗号改成分号] however, we should not overlook the cretic's[critic’s] affection.
[没有看到评论家的作品的时候怎么就能说艺术家给了长远的价值呢？]

Admittedly, it is the artists' creative thinking that give[gives] us the lasting value. Their creatures [are] passed down from generation to generation, which give us enjoyment, or sometimes courage. For example, Beethoven's musics[music] are hightly[highly] spoken for hundreds of years. Some of them give us a delightful feeling, such as Symhpony[Symphony] No.6 "Pastorale", while some others as Symhpony[Symphony]  No.3 and No.5 encourage people to fullfill[fulfill] their dreams[如果把3和5的名字都写出来就好了，偶不知道他们是什么啊，呵呵，不通乐理啊]. No one could deny that most of the world famous woks[works] took the artists a long time even all their lifes[lives]. So no artists no works, and we should give them full respect.
[单词拼写错误比较多啊～！]

We all say, beauty is in the eye of the beholder[这句话应该再斟酌一下]，and everyone's lasting value means different from others, thus we need critics to point out the true value of the art works, which could help us enjoy them in the right way so that we can find more things that[that去掉好点吧] valuable for us. Take Van Gogh's Sunflower for example. It has been impressive by the unique use of the color and painting style which may hardly to [be]comprehend by one individual who have learn nothing about the concerning information[换成knowledge 是不是好点呢？] about the contemporary position of the authors. That is the work of crictics[critic’s], and thuough[through] this, more and more people find out the value of the art works under the appearence[appearance].
[感觉道理没有说得很明白，例子没有完全展开，如果在说一下评论家在绘画中的作用，使得普通人都很明白就好了]

Thanks to the critics, the artists make better and better works as our society is developing. Not only common people but also the artists would accept the critics' view, especially the young artists.  Certain comments and efforts, sometimes, can serve as a great imputes[应该是input吧？] for these persons to strive for a better works in their future engagement and ultimately make them possible to achieve a long lasting artistic work. However, sometimes the critics would make a reverse effect to the development of art, especially during reformation time.[可以举个例子来说一下] Critics would lead the artists into old way and therefore block the reformation.

As disscussed[discussed] above, though artists' creative works shwo[show] us lasting value, they still need critics to expain[explain] the true meaning to people who cannot find the right[是否应该加上meaning] to enjoy it. Both the artists and the critics contribute to the art works that [are] passed down from one generation to another.

[整篇文章观点都说出来了，但是论证得不够充分，有待改进，而且拼写错误比较多，加油吧～！]

xupeng66UID: 2193287

When you see the great works of Sunflower created by Vencent van Gogh, who do you think give us the lasting value, Vencent van Gogh himself or the critics? Apparently it is the artist's contribution to the society, however, we should not overlook the cretic's affection.

Admittedly, it is the artists' creative thinking that give（gives) us the lasting value. Their creatures(creations) passed down from generation to generation, which give us enjoyment, or sometimes courage. For example, Beethoven's musics are hightly(highly) spoken for hundreds of years. Some of them give us a delightful feeling, such as Symhpony No.6 "Pastorale", while some others as Symhpony No.3 and No.5 encourage people to fullfill their dreams. No one could deny that most of the world famous woks took the artists a long time even all their lifes. So no artists no works, and we should give them full respect.

We all say, beauty is in the eye of the beholder(这句话放在这里真得很棒，我也要借鉴一下），and everyone's lasting value means different（differ) from others, thus we need critics to point out the true value of the art works, which could help us enjoy them in the right way so that we can find more things that valuable for us. Take Van Gogh's Sunflower for example. It has been impressive(characterized) by the unique use of the color and painting style which may hardly to comprehend by one(这里的one可去掉活用single代替） individual who have learn nothing about the concerning information about the contemporary position of the authors. That is the work of crictics, and thuough this, more and more people find out the value of the art works under the appearence.

Thanks to the critics, the artists make better and better works as our society is developing. Not only common people but also the artists would accept the critics' view, especially the young artists.  Certain comments and efforts, sometimes, can serve as a great imputes for these persons to strive for a better works（work) in their future engagement and ultimately make them possible to achieve a long lasting artistic work. However, sometimes the critics would make a reverse effect to the development of art, especially during reformation time. Critics would lead the artists into old way and therefore block the reformation.

As disscussed above, though artists' creative works shwo us lasting value, they still need critics to expain the true meaning to people who cannot find the right(way) to enjoy it. Both the artists and the critics contribute to the art(artistic) works that passe
感觉你和我的思路很相近，都是参考了孙远的提纲，但我对艺术了了解没那么多，凡高莫扎特我都不太清楚，只知道梵高的向日葵。对了你的文章我感到受益匪浅，积累了不少例子。
你的语言反面还须提高，我只找出了部分语法错误。再接再厉！