Issue130 【米国有米】小组 第十次作业

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[提纲]：
1.孩子们的社会化程度确实会部分影响我们社会的发展。
2.但是没有必要太过担心孩子们的影响。
3.孩子毕竟不是社会发展的唯一的决定性因素。

[正文]：
Every child will undoubtedly grow up, leave their parents' care and be a socialized man in the society. As a famous saying goes, "Character decides the destiny", so when everybody's destiny has something with his character. Consequently, someone claims that how children are socialized today may also decide the destiny of society tomorrow, I agree with it, but partly, for how children are socialized should never be the only determinant in developing a better society.

To begin with, how children are socialized today indeed make some influence on our society. And we need to make children realize that they are responsible for future world of human being. Whenever our age is or whatever our society is like, some merits that we stick to will always be beneficial to future of all the children and progress of our society, such as honesty, fairness, team spirit, self-discipline, social responsibility, fidelity to task, friends and family, and belief in the principles of liberty, equality and so on. Try to imagine, if when one child grows up with a abundant knowledge of his career, but he lack of team spirit and social responsibility, how could he cooperate with his partners to finish the work or achieve their goals. Or just imagine one cynic who has talent in science and technology and lacks of social responsibility. Indeed, he may contribute to the construction of our society, but if he does something extreme such as resisting by a fire to a public facility, he may contribute nothing but discordance. Therefore, all the qualities mentioned above will never be out-of-date to benefit human's society.

However, it is not necessary for us to be too anxious about the influence which children will make. With persistent developing science and technology, with sustaining development of our society, children will face various complex problems which we never met before. After all, future is never could be foreknown or predicted. Faced with more and more complicated circumstance of future society, what we should teach the children is how to deal with the problems they may encounter on rather than just raise them to meet our time's need. For instance, the generation of our parents would have never thought that machine and technology had changed our society so greatly, so they couldn't raise us to bring about a better society in modern way. What they had imparted to us is to stick to unvarying good qualities, to refuse what disobey our heart, and how to do when facing different problems. Therefore, when children grow up, with the ability we teach them, they will handle problems efficiently themselves and construct their society.

Moreover, after all, cultivation of children now will never be the determinant or decisive way to developing our society. There are so many factors that would contribute to a better society, such as a society system with justice and democracy, an inherent spirit of progressing and the most important, everyone's effort in his position. In fact, besides raising children to meet needs of society, what we should also do now is to devote ourselves to our respective work, so that we could do our best to create fortune and construct a better living condition. Moreover, what we do now is also an example for our children.

To sum up, children, to some extent, may decide the destiny of our future society. However, children have their own future, we would be too anxious to help them with nothing. Facing a rapidly changing world, we should also teach the children the good qualities they should hold on and the way to dealing something with.

[ 本帖最后由 bluecathy 于 2007-1-20 12:37 编辑 ]

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Every child will undoubtedly grow up, leave their parents' care and be a socialized man in the society. (入题很快,a socialized man 尤其8错!!)As a famous saying goes, "Character decides the destiny", so when everybody's destiny has something with his character. Consequently, someone claims that how children are socialized today may also decide the destiny of society tomorrow, I agree with it, but partly, for how children are socialized should never be the only determinant in developing a better society.(开头很干净利落,但是对原作者另一个观点we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society貌似作者的态度没表现出来啊)

To begin with, how children are socialized today indeed make some influence on our society. And we need to make children realize that they are responsible for future world of human being. Whenever our age is or whatever our society is like, some merits that we stick to will always be beneficial to future of all the children and progress of our society, such as honesty, fairness, team spirit, self-discipline, social responsibility, fidelity to task, friends and family, and belief in the principles of liberty, equality and so on. Try (It is hard)to imagine, if when one child grows up with a abundant knowledge of his career, but he (可以不要)lack of team spirit and (other)social responsibility, how could he cooperate with his partners to finish the work or achieve their goals. Or just imagine one cynic who has talent in science and technology and (but)lacks of social responsibility. Indeed, he may contribute to the construction of our society, but if he does something extreme such as resisting by a fire to a public facility, he may contribute nothing but discordance. Therefore, all the qualities mentioned above will never be out-of-date to benefit human's society.(语言很好,思路也很清晰,要是能有个具体的例子,就几句话带过都行,就显得更饱满了,虽说论证得有道理,但在一大堆honesty, fairness, team spirit, self-discipline, social responsibility, fidelity to task, friends and family, and belief in the principles of liberty, equality and so on.而无事例映证一下显得有点单薄)

However, it is not necessary for us to be too anxious about the influence which children will make.(前面说indeed make some influence on our society这里一个急刹车 not necessary for us to be too anxious about the influence 偶看得有点...) With persistent developing science and technology, with sustaining development of our society, children will face various complex problems which we never met before. After all, future is never could be foreknown or predicted. Faced with more and more complicated circumstance of future society, what we should teach the children is how to deal with the problems they may encounter on rather than just raise them to meet our time's need. (这个观点好!放在howeve后面更好,在encounter后面加个in practice when they come to the society  更扣题一些)For instance, the generation of our parents would have never thought that machine and technology had changed our society so greatly, so they couldn't raise us to bring about a better society in modern way. What they had imparted to us is to stick to unvarying good qualities, to refuse what disobey our heart, and how to do when facing different problems. Therefore, when children grow up, with the ability we teach them, they will handle problems efficiently themselves and construct their society.(这是对前面一段做补充,很好,很饱满)

Moreover, after all, cultivation of children now will never be the determinant or decisive way to developing our society. There are so many factors that would contribute to a better society, such as a society system with justice and democracy, an inherent spirit of progressing and the most important, everyone's effort in his position. In fact, besides raising children to meet needs of society, what we should also do now is to devote ourselves to our respective work, so that we could do our best to create fortune and construct a better living condition. Moreover, what we do now is also an example for our children. (这一段要再有个点题的句子就可以照应上原作者后一个论点了~)

To sum up, children, to some extent, may decide the destiny of our future society. However, children have their own future, we would be too anxious to help them with nothing. Facing a rapidly changing world, we should also teach the children the good qualities they should hold on and the way to dealing something with.
结尾很好,但和开头一样,忘记对we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society点一下了,其实全文里面还是有这方面的论述,但不够明朗.我觉得blue这篇写的很好啊,语言词汇和清晰的思路都值得我们学习.至于小马的老外朋友说的社会化问题,我们不要太在意,老美思维单纯,一下就想到一个点上,思考全面才是偶门中国的特长吗.....加油!!!